From c0e597ce9caf1159c5f531f151a4134f34015696 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Emily Cassandra Meeker
Date: Sun, 30 Oct 2016 01:33:13 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 1/3] Grammar change on Getting Started page
---
source/getting-started/index.markdown | 2 +-
1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)
diff --git a/source/getting-started/index.markdown b/source/getting-started/index.markdown
index 454ec2f81520..a3d0d2202578 100644
--- a/source/getting-started/index.markdown
+++ b/source/getting-started/index.markdown
@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ sharing: true
footer: true
---
-Below you can find the standard instructions. See the sidebar for installation instructions for specific platforms. If you're running a Linux-based platform, we suggest you to follow the [VirtualEnv Linux instructions] to avoid using root.
+Below you can find the standard instructions. See the sidebar for installation instructions for specific platforms. If you're running a Linux-based platform, we suggest you follow the [VirtualEnv Linux instructions] to avoid using root.
[Virtualenv Linux instructions]: /getting-started/installation-virtualenv/
From 3cfa5cd3fa2504a134972e922cdfcce7d16c9c92 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Emily Cassandra Meeker
Date: Sun, 30 Oct 2016 01:46:08 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 2/3] Wording on Devices to more natural native English
---
source/getting-started/devices.markdown | 4 ++--
1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-)
diff --git a/source/getting-started/devices.markdown b/source/getting-started/devices.markdown
index e955391bfc58..a7eb3e82eff1 100644
--- a/source/getting-started/devices.markdown
+++ b/source/getting-started/devices.markdown
@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ sharing: true
footer: true
---
-Home Assistant will be able to automatically discover a bunch of devices and services available on your network if you have [the discovery component]({{site_root}}/components/discovery/) enabled (which is by default).
+Home Assistant will be able to automatically discover many devices and services available on your network if you have [the discovery component]({{site_root}}/components/discovery/) enabled (the default setting).
See the [components overview page](/components/) to find installation instructions for your devices and services. If you can't find support for your favorite device or service, [consider adding support](/developers/add_new_platform/).
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ camera 2:
### {% linkable_title Grouping devices %}
-Once you have a bunch of devices set up, it is time to organize them into groups.
+Once you have several devices set up, it is time to organize them into groups.
Each group consists of a name and a list of entity IDs. Entity IDs can be retrieved from the web interface by using the Set State page in the Developer Tools ().
```yaml
From a8338865aff173601f9294675bc6b9241a672e98 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Emily Cassandra Meeker
Date: Sun, 30 Oct 2016 01:55:00 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 3/3] Native English corrections on presence-detection
---
source/getting-started/presence-detection.markdown | 8 ++++----
1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-)
diff --git a/source/getting-started/presence-detection.markdown b/source/getting-started/presence-detection.markdown
index 192168d45d14..38cd1e5f143e 100644
--- a/source/getting-started/presence-detection.markdown
+++ b/source/getting-started/presence-detection.markdown
@@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ footer: true
We care about privacy. Collected data is only stored in your instance of Home Assistant.
-Presence detection detects if people are home, an important input for automation. The most important piece of information is to know if anyone is home. But knowing who is home or where they are will open a whole range of other automation options:
+Presence detection detects if people are home, which is the most important input for automation. Knowing who is home or where they are will open a whole range of other automation options:
- Send me a notification when my child arrives at school
- Turn on the AC when I leave work
@@ -27,12 +27,12 @@ Screenshot of Home Assistant showing a school, work and home zone and two people
The device tracker component offers presence detection for Home Assistant. It supports two different methods for presence detection: scan for connected devices on the local network and connect to third party service.
-Scanning for connected devices is easy to setup. See the instructions for our [supported routers][routers] or [scan the network using nmap][nmap]. This approach does have its limitations however, it will only be able to detect if a device is home. It also struggles with iPhones because they disconnect from WiFi if idle, marking them as not home when they actually are.
+Scanning for connected devices is easy to setup. See the instructions for our [supported routers][routers] or [scan the network using nmap][nmap]. This approach does have its limitations, however: it will only be able to detect if a device is home, and iPhones may show as not home inaccurately (as iPhones disconnect from WiFi if idle).
-Home Assistant currently supports two third party services for presence detection: [OwnTracks][ha-owntracks] and [Locative][ha-locative]. OwnTracks is an app that you install on your iPhone or Android phone that allows you to push the location of your device to Home Assistant using an MQTT broker. An MQTT broker is an Internet of Things communication platform that you can [freely host yourself][mqtt-self] or get [a private instance for free in the cloud](/components/mqtt/#run-your-own).
+Home Assistant currently supports two third-party services for presence detection: [OwnTracks][ha-owntracks] and [Locative][ha-locative]. OwnTracks is an app that you install on your iPhone or Android phone that allows you to push the location of your device to Home Assistant using an MQTT broker. An MQTT broker is an Internet of Things communication platform that you can [freely host yourself][mqtt-self] or get [a private instance for free in the cloud](/components/mqtt/#run-your-own).
-OwnTracks communicates directly with your MQTT broker, no data will pass through their servers.
+OwnTracks communicates directly with your MQTT broker; no data will pass through their servers.
### {% linkable_title Zones %}