The document provides examples of rewriting sentences to shift the focus from the speaker's point of view to the reader's point of view. It demonstrates changing phrases like "I", "we" to "you", and "our" to "your" in order to address the reader directly and make the information more relevant to their needs and concerns. The revised sentences make requests of the reader and explain how the reader can benefit from actions being described, rather than simply making announcements from the speaker's perspective.
The document provides examples of rewriting sentences to shift the focus from the speaker's point of view to the reader's point of view. It demonstrates changing phrases like "I", "we" to "you", and "our" to "your" in order to address the reader directly and make the information more relevant to their needs and concerns. The revised sentences make requests of the reader and explain how the reader can benefit from actions being described, rather than simply making announcements from the speaker's perspective.
The document provides examples of rewriting sentences to shift the focus from the speaker's point of view to the reader's point of view. It demonstrates changing phrases like "I", "we" to "you", and "our" to "your" in order to address the reader directly and make the information more relevant to their needs and concerns. The revised sentences make requests of the reader and explain how the reader can benefit from actions being described, rather than simply making announcements from the speaker's perspective.
The document provides examples of rewriting sentences to shift the focus from the speaker's point of view to the reader's point of view. It demonstrates changing phrases like "I", "we" to "you", and "our" to "your" in order to address the reader directly and make the information more relevant to their needs and concerns. The revised sentences make requests of the reader and explain how the reader can benefit from actions being described, rather than simply making announcements from the speaker's perspective.
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You Attitude and Reader Point of View
Rewrite the following sentences to focus on the readers point of view.
Example: Poor: I got your email about the problem. Improved: Than you for your email about the problem you are having. !. "e wish to announce our new product. #ou can now purchase a ... $. "e will be happy to email the contract details. #ou will now obtain the contract details %. "e must have your proposal immediately. #our proposal is very important to us& please submit as soon as you can '. (ur safety policy forbids us from renting power e)uipment to anyone who cannot demonstrate proficiency in its use. #ou can rent power e)uipment when you have demonstrated proficiency *. +o that we may bring our customer records up,to,date and eliminate the expense of duplicate mailings& we are asing that you complete and return the enclosed card. #our completed and enclosed card will allow us to bring our customer records up,to,date and eliminate the expense of duplicate mailings -. "e are offering an in,house training program for employees who want to improve their writing sills. If you wish to improve your writing sills& we are offering an in,house training program for employees