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THE HOBBITON HERALD
www.hobbiton-herald.com THE SHIRE’S FAVOURITE NEWSPAPER 6 pennies

BAGGINS
IS BACK!
SURPRISE RETURN OF
HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD
By Andwise ‘Andy’ Roper

The quiet village of Hobbiton-on-the-

Water was yesterday in uproar due
to the unexpected re-appearance of
Mr Bilbo Baggins, who left the Shire
months ago, accompanied by the
wizard Gandalf. Where has he been all Bilbo Baggins
this time?
Early on, they were captured by trolls;
A large crowd of Hobbits had gathered they only avoided being eaten because
at Mr Baggins’ home, Bag End, where Gandalf tricked the creatures and
his property was being sold off by his turned them to stone. While shelter-
cousins, Mr and Mrs Sackville. They ing from a violent storm in the Misty
had asked some months ago for Mr Mountains, they were trapped again
Baggins to be declared dead and had – this time by hordes of vicious, evil
subsequently claimed Bag End as their goblins. Bilbo explained they had got
own inheritance. away because Gandalf killed the Great
Goblin with magic.
Having demonstrated that he was very
definitely alive, Mr Baggins demanded Lost and alone underground, Bilbo
that everyone should leave his house. next met a strange creature called
Mrs Sackville was heard to say, “It’s Gollum, who agreed to help if the
outrageous! How can we be sure he’s hobbit could answer a series of riddles.
not an imposter?” However, Mr Unfortunately, this individual betrayed
Baggins has told his story exclusively Bilbo’s trust. Mr Baggins wouldn’t
to the Hobbiton Herald. detail how he managed to escape – he
is strangely reluctant to discuss this
Bilbo Baggins, Gandalf and a party of particular event…
dwarves (led by Thorin Oakenshield)
departed some time ago on a quest to
In Mirkwood, the adventurers unwisely
recover lost treasure, stolen centuries
strayed from the path and consequent-
before by the fearsome dragon Smaug,
ly were imprisoned again. Quick-think-
hundreds of miles away beyond
ing Bilbo saved them from years in the
the Misty Mountains. Their journey
dungeons: “I made everyone climb into
through foreign territories was
barrels and we floated down the river.”
perilous and Bilbo claims that their
he explained.
lives were endangered many times.
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When they finally reached their Grateful for all his help, the dwarves
destination – the Lonely Mountain – rewarded Bilbo with treasure and he
they found a scene of such desolation set off home with Gandalf. After a
that the dwarves were initially una- less eventful journey back, he arrived
ble to find the way into their family in Hobbiton only to find everyone
home. Bilbo saved the day. He not only thought he was dead!
located the entrance but also devised
how to kill the dragon. Following Now that Mr Baggins has recovered
Smaug’s death, they were attacked by from his epic adventure, he says he
thegoblins and their allies. Although has asked the police to make the
the evil creatures were defeated, Sackvilles hand back his property. He
Thorin was unfortunately killed. will be staying at Bag End for the fore-
seeable future: “No more adventures
for me!” said Bilbo, grinning.

The Lonely Mountain

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the name of the
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newspaper
THE HOBBITON HERALD 1

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a headline that www.hobbiton-herald.com THE SHIRE’S FAVOURITE NEWSPAPER 6 pennies
uses pun, rhyme
or alliteration

a sub-headline
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which gives a bit

more information
BAGGINS
4
a ‘byline’ (the
writer’s name) IS BACK!
SURPRISE RETURN OF
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an introductory
paragraph that HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD 3

includes the 5 W’s By Andwise ‘Andy’ Roper 4

The quiet village of Hobbiton-on-the-

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pictures with Water was yesterday in uproar due
captions
to the unexpected re-appearance of
Mr Bilbo Baggins, who left the Shire
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a commentary of months ago, accompanied by the 6
the main events wizard Gandalf. Where has he been all
Bilbo Baggins6
this time?5
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third person and
past tense A large crowd of Hobbits had gathered Early on, they were captured by trolls7;
at Mr Baggins’ home7, Bag End, where they only avoided being eaten because
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direct and his property was being sold off by his Gandalf tricked the creatures and
reported speech
cousins, Mr and Mrs Sackville. They turned them to stone. While shelter-
had asked8 some months ago for Mr ing from a violent storm in the Misty
10
a conclusion
Baggins to be declared dead and had Mountains, they were trapped again
paragraph to – this time by hordes of vicious, evil
explain what subsequently claimed Bag End as their
own inheritance. goblins7. Bilbo explained they had got
might happen away because Gandalf killed the Great
next
Having demonstrated8 that he was Goblin with magic9.
very definitely alive, Mr Baggins
demanded that everyone should leave Lost and alone underground, Bilbo
his house7. Mrs Sackville was heard to next met a strange creature called
say8, “It’s outrageous! How can we be Gollum7, who agreed to help if the
sure he’s not an imposter?”9 However, hobbit could answer a series of riddles.
Mr Baggins has told his story exclu- Unfortunately, this individual betrayed
sively to the Hobbiton Herald. Bilbo’s trust. Mr Baggins wouldn’t
detail8 how he managed to escape – he
Bilbo Baggins, Gandalf and a party of is strangely reluctant to discuss this
dwarves (led by Thorin Oakenshield) particular event…
departed some time ago on a quest to
recover lost treasure7, stolen centuries In Mirkwood, the adventurers un-
before by the fearsome dragon Smaug, wisely strayed8 from the path and
hundreds of miles away beyond the consequently were imprisoned again7.
Misty Mountains. Their journey8 Quick-thinking Bilbo saved them from
through foreign territories was years in the dungeons: “I made every-
perilous and Bilbo claims that their one climb into barrels and we floated
lives were endangered many times. down the river.” he explained.9
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When they finally reached their Grateful for all his help, the dwarves
the name of the
1
destination – the Lonely Mountain – rewarded Bilbo with treasure and he
newspaper they found a scene of such desolation set off home with Gandalf.7 After a
that the dwarves were initially una- less eventful journey back, he arrived
ble to find8 the way into their family in Hobbiton only to find everyone
2
a headline that home. Bilbo saved the day7. He not thought he was dead!7
uses pun, rhyme
only located the entrance but also de-
or alliteration
vised how to kill the dragon. Following Now that Mr Baggins has recovered
Smaug’s death, they were attacked by from his epic adventure, he says he
a sub-headline
3
thegoblins and their allies. Although has asked the police to make the
which gives a bit the evil creatures were defeated, Sackvilles hand back his property. He
more information
Thorin was unfortunately killed.7 will be staying at Bag End for the fore-
seeable future: “No more adventures
a ‘byline’ (the
4
for me!” said Bilbo, grinning.10
writer’s name)

5
an introductory
paragraph that
includes the 5 W’s

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pictures with
captions

7
a commentary of
the main events

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third person and
past tense

9
direct and
reported speech

a conclusion
10

paragraph to
explain what
might happen
next
The Lonely Mountain7
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and Spelling Features 8
relative clauses
spelling, within sentences

THE HOBBITON HERALD

punctuation starting with
and grammar who, which,
taught in where, when,
previous years whose and that.
is demonstrated www.hobbiton-herald.com THE SHIRE’S FAVOURITE NEWSPAPER 6 pennies
(e.g. My mum,
throughout the who is a great

BAGGINS
text chef, cooked
dinner for me.)
2
formal
vocabulary
and sentence
9
preposition

IS BACK!
structure that phrases to
matches the add detail
formality of the and clarity
text (e.g. under the
floorboards,
3
a range of
SURPRISE RETURN OF across the room)
linking words/ HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD 10
adverbs and
phrases, By Andwise ‘Andy’12 Roper
including adverbials to add
detail and clarity
adverbials, to The quiet village of Hobbiton-on-the- (e.g. bravely,
join sentences Water was yesterday in uproar2 due often, repeatedly,
and paragraphs to the unexpected re-appearance17 of in the blink of an
together (e.g. Mr Bilbo Baggins,13 who left the Shire eye)
first, then,
after, while,
months ago8, accompanied18 by the
Bilbo Baggins expanded
11

significantly, wizard Gandalf.8 Where has he been noun phrases to

likewise, for all this time?3 perilous2 and Bilbo claims that their add detail and
instance) as well lives were endangered4 many times. clarity (e. g. a
as repetition A large crowd of Hobbits had gath- state-of-the-art
and ellipsis ered2 at Mr Baggins’14 home, Bag End, Early on3, they were captured by computer or a
where his property was being sold off trolls;16 they only10 avoided being eaten hideous, green
4
passive verbs by his cousins, Mr and Mrs Sackville4. 8
because Gandalf tricked the crea- alien with a
(e.g. The They had asked some months ago10 for pointy nose.)
tures and turned them to stone. While
Spanish team Mr Baggins to be declared dead2 and sheltering from a violent storm in the
were beaten by inverted
12
had subsequently10 claimed Bag End Misty Mountains11, they were trapped4 commas
France or The as their own9 inheritance.
sweets were again –16 this time by hordes of
eaten by the vicious, evil goblins11. Bilbo explained commas for
13

children.) Having demonstrated that he was they had got away because Gandalf clarity
very definitely alive3, Mr Baggins killed the Great Goblin with magic.
demanded that everyone should5 leave 14
apostrophes for
5
modal verbs possession
(e.g. can, could, his house. Mrs Sackville was heard4 to Lost and alone underground9, Bilbo
should, would) say, “12It’s outrageous!7 How can5 we next met a strange creature called
be sure he’s not an imposter?”12 Gollum, who agreed to help if the brackets,
15

However10, Mr Baggins has told his hobbit8 could answer a series of rid- dashes and
6
multi-clause commas for
sentences story exclusively10 to the Hobbiton dles5. Unfortunately10, this individual18 parenthesis
Herald. 9 betrayed Bilbo’s trust14. Mr Baggins
7
single clause wouldn’t5 detail how he managed to
sentence for
16
semi-colons,
Bilbo Baggins,13 Gandalf and a party of escape –16 he is strangely reluctant to
effect - short dashes and
dwarves (led by Thorin Oakenshield)15 discuss this particular event… colons to
and snappy
departed some time ago on a quest2 to separate clauses
sentence
recover lost treasure,15 which was sto-
In Mirkwood9, the adventurers un-
len centuries before4 by the fearsome hyphens to
17
wisely strayed2 from the path and
dragon Smaug9,15 hundreds of miles avoid ambiguity
consequently were imprisoned again.
away beyond the Misty Mountains.
Quick-thinking Bilbo11 saved them 18
Y5/Y6
Their journey through foreign territo-
from years in the dungeons:16 “12I made statutory
ries9 was
spelling words
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Accurate 8
relative clauses
everyone climb into barrels and we rewarded Bilbo with treasure and he
spelling, within sentences
punctuation floated down the river.”12 he explained. set off home with Gandalf. After a
When they finally10 reached their less eventful journey back9, he arrived starting with
and grammar who, which,
taught in destination – the Lonely Mountain –15 in Hobbiton only to find2 everyone
where, when,
previous years they found a scene of such desolation thought he was dead! whose and that.
is demonstrated that the dwarves were initially unable (e.g. My mum,
throughout the to find the way into their family home Now that3 Mr Baggins has recovered who is a great
text 9
. Bilbo saved the day7. He not only from his epic adventure11, he says chef, cooked
located the entrance but also devised he has asked the police to make the dinner for me.)
2
formal how to kill the dragon. Following Sackvilles hand back his property.
vocabulary
Smaug’s death3,14, they were attacked4 He will be staying at Bag End for the 9
preposition
and sentence
structure that by thegoblins and their allies. Al- foreseeable future2. “12No more adven- phrases to
matches the though the evil creatures were defeat- tures for me!”12 said Bilbo,13 grinning. add detail
formality of the ed, Thorin was unfortunately10 killed. and clarity
text Grateful for all his help2, the dwarves (e.g. under the
floorboards,
across the room)
3
a range of
linking words/
phrases,
10
adverbs and
including adverbials to add
detail and clarity
adverbials, to
(e.g. bravely,
join sentences often, repeatedly,
and paragraphs in the blink of an
together (e.g. eye)
first, then,
after, while, expanded
11

significantly, noun phrases to

likewise, for add detail and
instance) as well clarity (e. g. a
as repetition state-of-the-art
and ellipsis computer or a
hideous, green
4
passive verbs alien with a
(e.g. The pointy nose.)
Spanish team
were beaten by inverted
12

France or The commas

sweets were
eaten by the commas for
13

children.) clarity

14
apostrophes for
5
modal verbs possession
(e.g. can, could,
should, would) The Lonely Mountain
brackets,
15

dashes and
6
multi-clause commas for
sentences parenthesis
7
single clause
sentence for
16
semi-colons,
effect - short dashes and
and snappy colons to
sentence separate clauses

hyphens to
17

avoid ambiguity
18
Y5/Y6
statutory
spelling words
 Y6 Example Text Recount: Newspaper Report
Example Text Annotated Grammar, Punctuation
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Accurate
and Spelling Features 8
relative clauses
spelling, within sentences
punctuation
and grammar
taught in
THE HOBBITON HERALD starting with
who, which,
where, when,
previous years www.hobbiton-herald.com THE SHIRE’S FAVOURITE NEWSPAPER 6 pennies whose and that.
is demonstrated (e.g. My mum,
throughout the who is a great

BAGGINS
text chef, cooked
dinner for me.)
2
formal
vocabulary 9
preposition

IS BACK!
and sentence phrases to
structure that add detail
matches the and clarity
formality of the (e.g. under the
text floorboards,
SURPRISE RETURN OF across the room)
a range of HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD
3

linking words/ 10
adverbs and
By Andwise ‘Andy’12 Roper adverbials to add
phrases,
including detail and clarity
The quiet village of Hobbiton-on-the- (e.g. bravely,
adverbials, to
join sentences
Water was yesterday in uproar2 due often, repeatedly,
and paragraphs to the unexpected re-appearance17 of in the blink of an
together (e.g. Mr Bilbo Baggins,13 who left the Shire eye)
first, then, months ago8, accompanied18 by the
Bilbo Baggins expanded
11
after, while, wizard Gandalf.8 Where has he been noun phrases to
significantly, all this time?3 perilous2 and Bilbo claims that their add detail and
likewise, for lives were endangered4 many times. clarity (e. g. a
instance) as well A large crowd of Hobbits had gath- state-of-the-art
as repetition
ered2 at Mr Baggins’14 home, Bag End, Early on3, they were captured by computer or a
and ellipsis
where his property was being sold off trolls;16 they only10 avoided being eaten hideous, green
by his cousins, Mr and Mrs Sackville4. 8
because Gandalf tricked the crea- alien with a
4
passive verbs They had asked some months ago10 for pointy nose.)
(e.g. The
tures and turned them to stone. While
Mr Baggins to be declared dead2 and sheltering from a violent storm in the
Spanish team inverted
12

were beaten by had subsequently10 claimed Bag End Misty Mountains11, they were trapped4 commas
France or The as their own9 inheritance. again –16 this time by hordes of
sweets were vicious, evil goblins11. Bilbo explained commas for
13

eaten by the Having demonstrated that he was they had got away because Gandalf clarity
children.) very definitely alive3, Mr Baggins killed the Great Goblin with magic.
demanded that everyone should5 leave 14
apostrophes for
5
modal verbs his house. Mrs Sackville was heard4 to Lost and alone underground9, Bilbo possession
(e.g. can, could, say, “12It’s outrageous!7 How can5 we next met a strange creature called
should, would) be sure he’s not an imposter?”12 Gollum, who agreed to help if the brackets,
15

However10, Mr Baggins has told his hobbit8 could5 answer a series of rid- dashes and
multi-clause story exclusively10 to the Hobbiton commas for
6
dles8. Unfortunately10, this individual18 parenthesis
sentences Herald. 9 betrayed Bilbo’s trust14. Mr Baggins
7
single clause wouldn’t5 detail how he managed to 16
semi-colons,
Bilbo Baggins,13 Gandalf and a party of escape –16 he is strangely reluctant to
sentence for dashes and
effect - short dwarves (led by Thorin Oakenshield)15 discuss this particular event… colons to
and snappy departed some time ago on a quest2 to separate clauses
sentence recover lost treasure,15 which was sto-
In Mirkwood9, the adventurers un-
len centuries before4 by the fearsome hyphens to
17
wisely strayed2 from the path and
dragon Smaug9,15 hundreds of miles avoid ambiguity
consequently were imprisoned again.
away beyond the Misty Mountains.
Quick-thinking Bilbo11 saved them 18
Y5/Y6
Their journey through foreign territo-
from years in the dungeons:16 “12I made statutory
ries9 was
spelling words
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Punctuation and Spelling Features

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Accurate everyone climb into barrels and we rewarded Bilbo with treasure and he 8
relative clauses
spelling, floated down the river.”12 he explained. set off home with Gandalf. After a within sentences
punctuation When they finally10 reached their less eventful journey back9, he arrived starting with
and grammar who, which,
destination – the Lonely Mountain –15 in Hobbiton only to find2 everyone
taught in where, when,
previous years they found a scene of such desolation thought he was dead! whose and that.
is demonstrated that the dwarves were initially unable (e.g. My mum,
throughout the to find the way into their family home Now that3 Mr Baggins has recovered who is a great
text 9
. Bilbo saved the day7. He not only from his epic adventure11, he says chef, cooked
located the entrance but also devised he has asked the police to make the dinner for me.)
2
formal how to kill the dragon. Following Sackvilles hand back his property.
vocabulary Smaug’s death3,14, they were attacked4 He will be staying at Bag End for the 9
preposition
and sentence by thegoblins and their allies. Al- foreseeable future2. “12No more adven- phrases to
structure that though the evil creatures were defeat- tures for me!”12 said Bilbo,13 grinning. add detail
matches the ed, Thorin was unfortunately10 killed. and clarity
formality of the Grateful for all his help2, the dwarves (e.g. under the
text floorboards,
across the room)
3
a range of
linking words/ 10
adverbs and
phrases, adverbials to add
including detail and clarity
adverbials, to (e.g. bravely,
join sentences often, repeatedly,
and paragraphs in the blink of an
together (e.g. eye)
first, then,
expanded
11
after, while,
noun phrases to
significantly,
add detail and
likewise, for
clarity (e. g. a
instance) as well
state-of-the-art
as repetition
computer or a
and ellipsis
hideous, green
alien with a
4
passive verbs pointy nose.)
(e.g. The
Spanish team inverted
12

were beaten by commas

France or The
sweets were commas for
13

eaten by the clarity

children.)
14
apostrophes for
5
modal verbs The Lonely Mountain possession
(e.g. can, could,
should, would) brackets,
15

dashes and
6
multi-clause commas for
sentences parenthesis

7
single clause 16
semi-colons,
sentence for dashes and
effect - short colons to
and snappy separate clauses
sentence
hyphens to
17

avoid ambiguity
18
Y5/Y6
statutory
spelling words