School Uniforms

All children should be made to wear school uniforms.
To what extent do you agree or

disagree?
It is believed that all children should be required to wear uniforms when attending
classes. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this idea.
There are certain reasons why some people disagree with this idea that there is no need
for children to wear school uniforms. Firstly, wearing uniforms does not help students
increase their grades. Wearing uniforms cannot determine a child’s development; it
depends on how hard the students have studied. Secondly, free-dressing can encourage
children to explore their differences., because the compulsion to wear uniforms can not
allow children to express their individuality. Thirdly, not being made to wear school
uniforms may bring the students more comfort when going to school, as they are allowed
to wear casual clothes, which can help them study more productively.
However, I am of the opinion that all students must wear uniforms when they go to
school. To begin with, uniforms promote equality between children and their classmates,
as both rich and poor wear the same uniform, eliminating differences in clothing.
Moreover, isolation can be avoided by wearing uniforms. For instance, a poor student
who wears cheap clothes may be isolated and bullied by other rich students in class, this
can result in mental health crisis among adolescents. Last but not least, uniforms are more
cost-effective for parents. If children wear school uniform, their parents will not have to
spend a lot of money on their clothing because they can wear their school uniforms for
the whole school year. Instead, they can provide their children with other things that help
their studies such as textbooks and stationery.
In conclusion, it is essential for all schools to ensure that their students wear school
uniforms to school.
1. Introduction:
 Original: "It is believed that all children should be made to wear school
uniforms."
 Correction: "It is believed that all children should be required to wear
school uniforms."
2. Introduction:
 Original: "In my opinion, I totally agree with this idea."
 Correction: "In my opinion, I strongly agree with this idea."
3. Body Paragraph 1:
 Original: "Wearing uniforms cannot decide a child’s development because
it depends on how hard the students have studied."
 Correction: "Wearing uniforms cannot determine a child’s
development; it depends on how hard the students have studied."
 Original: "Secondly, free-dressed can encourage children to explore their
differences., because the compulsion to wear uniforms can not allow
children to express their individuality."
 Correction: "Secondly, free dress can encourage children to explore
their differences because the compulsion to wear uniforms does not
allow children to express their individuality."
 Original: "Thirdly, not being made to wear school uniforms may bring the
students more comfort when going to school as they are allowed to wear
casual clothes, which can help them study more productively in school."
 Correction: "Thirdly, not being required to wear school uniforms may
bring the students more comfort when going to school, as they are
allowed to wear casual clothes, which can help them study more
productively."
 Original: "To begin with, uniforms promte equality between children and
their classmates, because rich and poor both wear the same uniform so there
is no difference in what they wear."
 Correction: "To begin with, uniforms promote equality between
children and their classmates, as both rich and poor wear the same
uniform, eliminating differences in clothing."
 Original: "For instance, a poor student who wears cheap clothes may be
isolated and bullied by other rich students in class, this can result in mental
health crisis among adolescence."
 Correction: "For instance, a poor student who wears cheap clothes may
be isolated and bullied by other rich students in class; this can result in
a mental health crisis among adolescents."
 Original: "Last but not least, uniforms are more cost-effective for parents."
 Correction: "Last but not least, uniforms are more cost-effective for
parents."
9. Conclusion:
 Original: "In conclusion, it is essential for all schools to ensure that their
students wear school uniforms to school."
 Correction: "In conclusion, it is essential for all schools to ensure that
their students wear school uniforms."

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