Academic Language
Academic Language
Academic Language
• The student asks a question here and then answers it. This is a
technique used in speeches to involve the audience. An
improvement would be: “The future of the Internet will be
decided by the needs of its customers. One development is
therefore likely to be service improvement.” This takes out the
question, the “hope”, which is quite personal, and the need for
“we”, which refers to Internet customers.
Secondly, we need to reduce the Internet service access fees. Moreover,
there are always technological developments in the pipeline.
• This follows on from the previous text about the Internet, so we can avoid the
“we” by saying “Another customer requirement is a reduction in access fees.”
The second sentence contains an idiom, “in the pipeline”, which means “in the
process of being completed, delivered, or produced”. Idioms are very rare in
academic writing, and it is better if you don’t use them. The sentence could be
improved as follows: