I normally don’t criticise other peoples fanfics without asking but I can’t help myself seeing as you have so much potential.
It was about your mark fanfic where he broke up with reader and left reader for dead, the first part in my opinion was amazing but after the second part it just went downhill in my opinion, I couldn’t even finish half of these because of it.
My main problem is, it just feels forced and awkward, when the variants first came, and don’t get me wrong I know it’s hard to make a story to fit them all in, but I thought instead of doing all these ending things at the end of the fanfic, why not start out with that anyway instead of doing that weird awkward stuff with them all claiming reader when we all know that would never happen, why not do more so less a copy paste of one variant finding reader and hurting Eve, blah blah blah, and taking reader with them.
That way it wouldn’t have felt so awkward.
The third part, I found the start pretty realistic, the conversation between mark and Eve, it’s just the public turning on him, eh, I don’t really see it happening, like at all, everyone was suffering, and I don’t think they’d care as a society so much over one girl? Ut could’ve worked, don’t get me wrong, if it was more fleshed out and less, idk, “dramatic” you really think after having multiple variants of a guy murder millions of people they’d dare go harass his mother? At their home?
Idk, it would’ve worked better if it was more so readers family members and mutual friends being mad at mark, think like William ripping him a new one on how he’s the “strongest man on earth and how he wouldn’t dare use his super speed to just try and grab the person without powers, that is not eve, who’s being hunted down by the others?”
I hope you get what I mean, because I did like your writing style and what you where going for, but at the same time I felt like you really did not wanna write the story around part two and three? What made it really demotivating to read the other parts.
Either way I hope you have a good day or night 🙂↕️🙂↕️