Perguntas sobre exemplo de orações com, e a definição e o uso de "Suji"

A: × When She was on working, a young man who was unclean came to her.
✓ When she was working, an unclean young man came to her.

× He told her how hard it was to live in the community as a psychiatric patient.
✓ He told her how hard it was to be a psychiatric patient in the community,

× He also asked why she only cared for hospitalized patients.
✓ asked why she only cared for hospitalized patients.

× Many psychiatric patients were wandering on the streets of Korea at that time.

× She was aware of it, but there was nothing she could do.
✓ She was aware of many psychiatric patients on the streets of Korea, but couldn't do anything.

× So she asked him to study with her.
✓ So she asked him to study with her and

× She made a 12-week mental rehabilitation nursing plan for him
✓ made a 12-week mental rehabilitation nursing plan for him.

× Twelve weeks later, he became better and brought friends around him, thanking her.
✓ Twelve weeks later, he was better and brought friends around him, thanking her.

× They were all schizophrenics, and she listened to the stories of their lives.
✓ They were all schizophrenics, and she heard their life stories.

× Their stories were analyzed by using statics called Factor Analysis.
✓ Their stories were analyzed by using statistics called Factor Analysis, and

× Based on the analysis results, she established the theory of love care.
✓ based on the results, she established the theory of love care.

× She planned to experiment with the theory of love care.
✓ She experimented with the theory and

× Then, the average yearly hospitalizations of patients rehabilitated under love care treatment decreased from 13.2 to 0.2.
✓ the average yearly hospitalizations of patients rehabilitated under love care treatment decreased from 13.2 to 0.2.

× This is a tremendous change and meaningful result because it proves the effectiveness of the theory of love care.
✓ This is a huge change and meaningful result, proving the effectiveness of the theory of love care.

× I was surprised that she cared for psychiatric patients who were difficult to heal.
✓ I was amazed by her dedication to healing difficult patients.

× I also want to be a warm person who respects and soothes patients
✓ I also want to be a kind person who respects and comforts the patients,

× the Suji Kim.
✓ like Suji Kim.

A: it's a little unnatural you can use a different word like damaged.