Talk:1937 Fox vault fire/GA1

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 13:25, 23 February 2015 (UTC)Reply


Ok, will review this article shortly. Miyagawa (talk) 13:25, 23 February 2015 (UTC)Reply

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Fire
  • "Fifty-seven truckloads of burned film were hauled from the site to have their silver content extracted; at a rate of about five cents for each can, the salvaged metal returned $2000." - I'd change that comma to a semi-colon. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Not sure I understand this change request. Replacing the comma (after "can") with a semicolon doesn't seem correct to me, especially with the two clauses already divided by a semicolon (after "extracted"). Do I perhaps need to split this up? Squeamish Ossifrage (talk) 20:39, 23 February 2015 (UTC)Reply
How does that look now? Squeamish Ossifrage (talk) 17:44, 24 February 2015 (UTC)Reply
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It's a good article with not much to stop it from being marked as such. Nice job, and an interesting read to boot. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)Reply

Removed random sentence fragment

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Someone recently added "In May 13, 1967 in Vault #7 fired at Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer's film studio in Culver City, California" at the end of the Legacy section. I undid that edit to remove the sentence fragment. Clockster (talk) 04:53, 13 May 2015 (UTC)Reply