Talk:1937 Fox vault fire/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Clockster in topic Removed random sentence fragment
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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 13:25, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
Ok, will review this article shortly. Miyagawa (talk) 13:25, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- Could you capitalise "nitrate" and "destruction" under cause/outcome? It just looks odd there in lowercase to me. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- Done. I argued with myself about this forever when writing it, and had model pages that went both ways. Happy to go with caps, though (as frankly I agree). Squeamish Ossifrage (talk) 20:39, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- Background
- No issues - I think it helps the article greatly that you've included this information. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- Fire
- "Fifty-seven truckloads of burned film were hauled from the site to have their silver content extracted; at a rate of about five cents for each can, the salvaged metal returned $2000." - I'd change that comma to a semi-colon. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- Not sure I understand this change request. Replacing the comma (after "can") with a semicolon doesn't seem correct to me, especially with the two clauses already divided by a semicolon (after "extracted"). Do I perhaps need to split this up? Squeamish Ossifrage (talk) 20:39, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- I think that'd be better. Miyagawa (talk) 22:28, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- How does that look now? Squeamish Ossifrage (talk) 17:44, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
- Legacy
- No issues. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- General
- Cite #2 is throwing a fault at the moment. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- Fixed. Typo in the date field. The template was rightly complaining that September 31 is not a real date. Checked the source and corrected that to August. Squeamish Ossifrage (talk) 20:39, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- No dab links, and all external links are working. Referencing looks solid. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
It's a good article with not much to stop it from being marked as such. Nice job, and an interesting read to boot. Miyagawa (talk) 14:14, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- I appreciate the help, and would be happy to hear if there's anything else you'd suggest. Squeamish Ossifrage (talk) 20:39, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
- Great - thanks for the quick responses. I'm happy to pass the article. Good job! Miyagawa (talk) 18:00, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
Removed random sentence fragment
editSomeone recently added "In May 13, 1967 in Vault #7 fired at Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer's film studio in Culver City, California" at the end of the Legacy section. I undid that edit to remove the sentence fragment. Clockster (talk) 04:53, 13 May 2015 (UTC)