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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 00:51, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox
  • I do not think that the word “musically” is needed in this sentence (Musically, "Verde împărat" is a liquid dubstep and chillout song, with instrumentation from flute, bass and percussion.).
  • For this part (with her partner, which she compares to a "green emperor”), I would replace “which” with “who”.
  • I have a few recommendations for this sentence (An accomanying music video for the track was shot by Alex Ceauşu in early October 2017 and uploaded onto Cat Music's official YouTube channel simultaneously with the single's release to similar acclaim.). There are as follows: 1) accompanying is misspelled, 2) I would add a comma after “October 2017”, and 3) I would turn this portion “to similar acclaim” into its own sentence. The sentence is rather long as it stands, and it would be helpful to have a short, descriptive sentence on what critics praised about the video if possible.
  • I would change this (during her concert tour Psihedelia (2017)) to (during her 2017 concert tour Psihedelia).
Background and composition
  • I would rephrase this (was written as a therapy) as (was written as therapy). The “a” is not necessary.
  • I would change this part ("Cine m-a făcut om mare" (2016)) to (her 2016 single "Cine m-a făcut om mare”) with the translation of the song’s title in parenthesis at the end.
  • In this part (during her three–day concert tour “Psihedelia”), I do not think that the tour title needs to be in quotation marks.
Critical reception
  • I would revise this (In a review Delia's live performance on Radio ZU) to (In a review of Delia's live performance on Radio ZU) as you have a word missing.
Music video
  • Please add ALT text to the image.
  • I would change this (her "1234 (Unde dragoste nu e)" (2016) and "Rămâi cu bine" (2017) visuals) to (the visuals for her 2016 and 2017 singles 1234 (Unde dragoste nu e)” and "Rămâi cu bine”).
  • I am not sure what is meant by this part (while associating it with Delia's concert tour Psihedelia). How did the critic associate the video with her tour? Was a similar style used in the video as in the live performances?
External links
  • I would add a section with a link to the music video.
Final comments
  • Thank you for addressing my comments. ALT means the descriptions given to the photos for visually impaired readers. The infobox image has ALT text for it. To read more about it, you can look here. Hope this helps. Aoba47 (talk) 06:33, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Verdict
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