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Yeah I believe I found it here , it can be found a few passages after the mc and them have their breakfast I believe before the expected ceremony.

Haha the green background will be missed, may it Rest In Peace. I wish you luck and all. 

Thank you for the detailed response! I now understand that the reason Elya and Ian responses felt similar in the dream sequence were because these are characters who have spent countless lifetimes with the mc in pervious reincarnations which is why the emotions and responses they give on how they felt about the mc in that lifetime were similar because mc was the only one who ever treated them with such kindness and respect. And how did you know elya was my muse ? Awwwwf but really I love all three of them. 

I did get to play Joana earlier today and omg it was so heartbreaking and yes all three routes diverged  greatly in the end because the introduction into the world concluded and it’s only beginning the individual stories of the RO.

I also found this , I figured it was an honest mistake and didn’t know how to discribe it in the bug report and I’m a visual learner as well 😅💕

Also 75210 is such a an amazing word count, I meant it felt long in a good way cause when it ended; I was feeling sad and wanting more 😭 I really do think this is such a beautiful story you have here and I can’t wait for you to tell it to us! I did adore both Emma and Thomas, I believe you did a phenomenal job with the found family aspects and such a genuine portrayal of Platonic relationships and you did it in a way that was welcoming, so subtle without trying to push the friendship to the player but done in such a way that was subtle but genuine , I thought it was refreshing since usually IF games and stories focus on the RO’s and romance that they neglect the family and friendships aspects of it! So I do appreciate your take on it, friendships especially with the right individuals is something to be treasured and you certainly nailed! I do hope we do get to meet them again and their friendship with the mc doesn’t drift due to the distance. I’m rambling   

Also yes, it can be intimidating reaching out to an author since most authors have feedback they are looking for and feedback they aren’t looking for, it took me a couple months of me following an authors on ao3 for me to even comment on a chapter 😭😂😂.  Also don’t mind what I said about the previous green screen, it must be my strong case of nostalgia speaking ! I tend to have that! The new aesthetic is equally as pleasing as well. 💝

Such a lovely update! it toke me a few hours to get it through with a few breaks, I finally decided to play it on my computer since the save doesn't work for me on phone lol, I feel quite nostalgic for the green aesthetic background, I though it was lovely, may I ask why you changed it? the black and white doesn't feel as inviting and lively as the green and feels lifeless, considering this game is filled with so much live <333.

Ben and Alex: Nothing noteworthy about them, to the point that both of them feel like the same character and only the name was changed for them but I felt some distinct differences for them in some passages otherwise they really did seem the same character. Are you using them as a catalyst for the mc to ease themselves into the different routes? is that why they felt indistinguishable? I'm keeping in mind that I have not done Joana route yet so I can't speak for its characteristics and tone of the route and its supporting characters. I'll probably play it tomorrow.

 I also seemed to have found a pronoun error for Alex in which you referred to them as “he’ his” even though in all the other passages they are referred to using they/them pronouns so just letting you know that.

The paths: I though they were going to be a bit different but the ones I’ve done were eerily similar and only had slight vibrations of differences, both Elya and Ian routes were similar to one another. I don’t know if that was a choice or not. 

Also from what I noticed, both Ian and Elya flashback story was again quite the same with only slight variation changed for them, nothing unique with the way the flashback dream was done, both seem to have the same motivation for how they felt about the mc in the solutions they give to the mc present tense, Some examples “You were my only friend” “A gift that was sent to me” “I came to hate you”  if I as a reader hasn’t spend quite a while with them in the beginning and didn’t get to know their inner voice and speech patterns than I would’ve mistaken them for the same character, I am in no way saying that they are the same but am only acknowledging that their routes were quite similar only in the way they responded to the mc with the dream sequence and that only. Both are equally quite diverse and lovely characters with such distinctive voices so it felt a bit jarring when their response to the mc with their nightmare was line by line the same.

I contemplated writing this and I really do hate writing such harsh notes for my favorite authors, I never write them and is this the kind of feedback you are looking for? I hate to be overstepping my boundaries.

May I also ask what's the word count for the current demo? it felt really long or it might have been me playing really slow.

This is really a beautiful game and i'm glad i found iy and got a chance to play it. I can't wait for the next update or the finished product. Thank you for giving us such a breathtaking story!

• Did you enjoy having a more intimate look at your Dragon Commander's past? Should I make more of this type of thing or nah?

Yes, most definitely. It was really lovely, I like these types of special short stories, they give the main plot more life and gives it depth. Yes you should most definitely do more of them if there ever comes a time where you want to add more depth, life, or give certain main characters a chance for the player to get to know them etc. Would be really cool. 

• What was your favorite and least favorite thing about this update?

Everything about it was my favorite, my least favorite would have to be that when the game ended (nothing bad its i couldn't believe i played every route and still wanted more) 

• Which character would like to learn more about?

I think all of them, all of your characters are lovely but the queen, master curio, and the doctor, mandra as well, i want to see more of their story. But i really want to get to know more of the dragon commander themselves and how the choices that they make in the story would effect them and the other characters in the long run. I want to also know what was up with the queen in the past and if she really brought the mc to the palace knowing their fate. Also even hell , I want to see what was up with the dead king, (thank god he's dead).

• Do you feel you're having enough space to create your own Dragon Commander? 
  

Yes i do, everything about them feels so natural to the story. There wasn't a point in the story where i was like the choices provided to the player was limited etc, all the given choices fit the character and their personalities. 

such a fascinating story, I love it. Gotta ask tho been playing around with twine lately, how did you get such a simplistic but Aesthetically pleasing design on your story, and how did you make the choices like that. It’s so cool.