Adventures
Adventures
Adventures
Adventures in Poetry:
Writing Poems with Students
A handbook for teachers
to start students writing
in elementary to high school
by
Hilary Tham
Hilary Tham Adventures in Poetry: Writing Poems with Students 2
Adventures in Poetry:
Writing Poems with Students
A handbook for teachers
to start students writing
in elementary to high school
by
Hilary Tham
Hilary Tham Adventures in Poetry: Writing Poems with Students 3
Permission to reproduce this book for non-commercial individual or classroom use is granted so
long as no text is taken out of this document including any and all copyright messages.
This handbook was supported in part by a grant from the Virginia Commission for the Arts, to
whom grateful thanks is extended.
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CONTENTS
CONTENTS 4
FOREWORD 5
SUGGESTIONS FOR MAKING WRITING A POSITIVE EXPERIENCE: 7
SAMPLE LESSON PLAN 8
BUILDING BLOCKS FOR POETS 9
CRITERIA FOR EFFECTIVE LEARNING ACTIVITIES 10
FOCUS ON FORM 52
LIMERICKS 53
CLERIHEWS 57
POLITICAL NURSERY RHYMES 58
CONCRETE or SHAPE POEMS 59
ACROSTIC POEMS 61
ALLITERATION POEMS 63
HAIKU Or Making Every Word Count 65
ROLLING HAIKU 67
CINQUAIN 68
DIAMANTE 69
THE LIST POEM Or Raindrops on Roses 70
THE LITANY POEM 73
THE PANTOUM 76
THE GHAZAL 79
THE TEMPLATE POEM 83
VILLANELLE 85
SESTINA 93
NESTING RHYMES 95
CLOSURES or HOW DOES A POEM END? 96
POETRY FOLDER PROJECT 97
MINI-ANTHOLOGY OF POEMS TO ENJOY 99
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FOREWORD
Introducing and including the writing of poems into the classroom has many benefits:
reinforcing student learning of content material not only in language but also in math, science, social
studies
broadening student appreciation of poetry and its ability to communicate ideas as well as feelings,
unlocking student creative abilities and freeing their imagination
developing a deeper student understanding of the cultural heritage of others, and
giving teachers tools for teaching content areas using poetry.
Many students (and teachers) feel more comfortable with the step-by-step method of writing a poem
-- This works well if the main goal is to reinforce learning, so the students think about a subject, recall
specifics, come to some conclusions, and review what they've already learned. The following sample
poem templates can be used for reviewing grammar, science, social studies.
Cold-blooded
Template 2: I am (adjective) I am scaley
I am ( adjective) I am cold-blooded
I am (participle) I am hissing
You are (verb) You are covered with a shell
They are (participle) They are crawling
We are (noun) We are reptiles
Another approach is to have students write litany /list poems on subject matter they wish to review.
Review of math. percentages is fun when students brainstorm wishes, then write about how they would
spend a million dollars (suppose you won the lottery) using percentages.
expression of their thoughts and to learn to see the world creatively as well as functionally. I try to
teach the building blocks of good poetry, also the basics of good writing. My workshop exercises are
intended to give them practice in observation skills, thinking and the use of imagery, simile and
metaphor, to enrich their writing, skills that will stay with them hopefully all their lives.
Children are natural poets. The secret to unlocking their creativity is to create a space for them
to speak up, a receptivity to what they think and feel, an opportunity for them to articulate the process
of learning about life, a caring and respect for individual truths so they can share who they are, what
they see and feel and dream. Sharing is the key: sharing of ideas, responses, associations, phrases,
words, meanings personal and public. The free discussion before writing is vital to the workshops:
it is the striking of sparks and sparks and sparks until each student forgets her/his fear of being laughed
at and accepts the condition that it is very much okay to be truly themselves and see that individual
responses and words make up different poems. And that each poem is meaningful in its own right.
Then, and only then, do we work on editing, revising, making the poem the best it can be. Which
includes correct spelling and good language usage.
The other key part of a successful workshop is having students read aloud their poems in an
atmosphere of respect and receptivity. Students learn in my classes to listen as well as to speak up.
They learn respect for each others thoughts and for the individualistic expression of those thoughts
and feelings. They learn to critique the writing, not the writer! to focus on offering suggestions for
more effective use of language to express the thought and feeling.
Adventures in Poetry: Writing Poems with Students is a collection of easy-to-follow poetry writing
activities complete with sample poems that are intended to work as a box of matches for lighting the
imaginations of students, to give students the vision and tools to reach for wider possibilities as writers.
. It is also a work in progress. I am continually in the process of writing up the workshops I have
found worked successfully with my students and the enclosed represent some of these workshops.
Some are variations on the approach: for example, the Air Workshop approach is equally successful
using the three other elements Water, Fire, and Earth.
I am grateful to the hundreds, thousands of children I have had the pleasure of teaching these
twenty years. They have given me the gift of their poetry. I want to thank also poets Christopher Bursk
(Water Magic/Air Workshop), Elaine Magarrell (Memories Workshop), teachers Mrs. Anita Scott and
others for sharing their teaching approaches with me.
Hilary Tham
May 2001
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SOCIAL
As a result of participation students will have:
Improved cooperation and team work skills (sharing of ideas).
Improved self-esteem (how the art form enhances the self-worth of the
child/student).
Improved ability to understand non-verbal messages (communication, how you present
yourself to the world).
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DEFINITION: A simile is a figure of speech in which one thing is likened to another with the use
of as or like. Example: a heart big as a whale, her heart is like a house with lots of room for
people, her tears flowed like a river in flood.
For younger children, it is best to do a group poem with a list (based on the senses, of things we see,
smell, hear, taste, touch) such as
red like an apple
green as grass
small like a crumb
sweet like
sour as
smells like
sounds like
soft as cotton
cold like
slippery as
happy as
sad as
angry as a bear whos had no dinner.
I like to ask the students to add more information so we can see a picture from the words. e.g. Angry as
a bear when? show us when the bear may be angry.
I like to ask older students to compare the adjective word to a feeling or an emotion or state of mind.
E.G. red as anger, slow as tomorrow. Once students can grasp the what and how of a simile, they
should practice it to learn to use it appropriately, with ease and style. This helps develop their skills in
metaphoric logic and in making connections.
adjectives to an object,
Stubborn as ____________ buttons, rocks, a mule, sorrow [use an object, nature, animal, emotion ]
Angry as _____________[object, nature, animal/insect, emotion]
Hungry as __________ [as above categories]
Sad as __________
Big as ___________
He felt small as _____________
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--~
Justice is like Ray Charles
both are blind and ohh! so funky.
Talent is like being born with blue eyes, you either
have 'em or you don't.
Talent is like a headache,
you cant see it but you can feel it.
A headache is like a bagpipe,
shrilly irritating.
A bagpipe is like a car, something I don't have.
--
A dancer is like water, both are
free and flowing, and can go
wherever they choose.
Water is like spring, arousing joy in sparrows
and sprites alike.
Spring is like fire,
radiant and bursting with life.
Fire is like inspiration - both can spark
a priceless possibility.
Inspiration is like a shooting star, both come and go..
SELF-PORTRAIT WORKSHOP
Children love to think and write about themselves. I begin this workshop with an Art Activity: I have
students draw a self-portrait using hand mirror and markers, crayons / pen/ pencils. It can be a serious
self-portrait or a modernistic, wacky portrait.
I tell them after they have drawn their portrait, Ill like them to look at the face in the mirror and the
face in the picture. Things to think about:
What do you notice first, any distinguishing mark that stands out?
What do you like best about your face/ hair etc.
What do other people usually compliment you on?
What aspect of you would you wish different?
Jot down thoughts, phrases, words.
I tell students they can write in the third person or personify the featuree.g.
This face gets up in the middle of the night
This face goes to bed in the morning.
This face goes boldly where feet dont want to go.. and so on.
Or Write a poem about something triggered by looking at your drawing. It can be a physical feature.
My Nose the way my face
My nose is like a hook is.
In the center of my face Ana Acevedo
Catching smells.
By Anna J, Copetanalos, "How pleasant to know Mr. Lear!''
Drew Elem. School 1998 Who has written such volumes of stuff!
Some think him ill-tempered and Queer,
This face is big But a few think him pleasant enough."
This face likes pizza with lots of cheese -- Edward Lear
This face does not like school
This face rather be at home sometimes. Self-Portrait by Jason Sher, Gr. 3, Jamestown
This face likes football
This face is smart My hair is like mud in the pond.
This face is plain. My eyes are like brown markers.
Raymond Johnson My teeth are white as cotton.
My ears can hear anything.
I like chocolate My heart holds happiness.
the color of my eyes. I live in garbage
I'm pretty like the and eat stinky socks.
flowers and my lips
are like the fire.
I'm smart and
nice and I like
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SOUND WORKSHOP
I find sounds a wonderful springboard for the imagination and for making images. I bring in noise
makers paper for crumpling, two pieces of wood to tap, aluminum foil to rattle, a bottle of water
(half-empty) to slosh, bell to ring, etc. I ask the students to close their eyes and listen and then write
down what it sounds like. They can write down the phonetic spelling of the sound itself, then make a
word picture so someone reading/hearing their words would also be able to picture the sound and the
situation. E.g. someone tapping is not enough. Who is doing it, where, perhaps even why. Some one
knocking on a door in a hurry, or quietly trying not to be heard. After 5 or 6 sounds, I ask students to
make up a story or write a poem about a specific time or event or occasion using those sounds, or other
sounds.
APPLICATIONS: This workshop can be used to review history, geography or social studies. Have
students write a poem focusing on the sounds as if she or he lived at the time of the historical period or
in the place or culture being studied.
SOUNDS IN MY COUNTRY
In my country, Philippines, people love pig.
Because every time they have wedding and other
parties, they love to eat pig, different kinds of pig.
Pigs are cute in my country.
When pigs are hungry, they say oirk oirk.
Chickens say chick chick
Rooster says cock co rok kok.
Dogs say aw aw.
Cats go miawng miawng
and ducks go gwuek gwuek.
- Alba Yabut
SOUNDS IN KOREA
In Korea many animals make different sounds.
Pigs go Koor-koor
Dogs go Mung-mung
Birds go Chak-chak
Cats go Ya-ong.
Frogs go Ga goor, ga-goor.
In Korea, many things make different sounds.
Cars go Bang-bang.
Telephones go Thaloo-roong
Bells go Ding-ding
Clocks go Thock-tak, thock-tak.
The bells in church go DONG DONG.
Its weird that each country has different sounds.
I guess thats because we cant copy the sounds
and different people hear things differently.
- Sunyoung Kim
-----
Sounds in Jamestown
On Sunday morning I hear the church bells ring. Horse hooves clatter on the cobblestone paths and
children are playing games like marbles. We cook bacons and eggs for breakfast. I hear the eggs
sizzling in the pan and the crunch of the bacon.
In the afternoon an Indian war cry echoes in the distance. Later I hear guns shooting and the swish
of the bows and arrows.
In the evening I hear deer in the forest and squirrels running up trees. As darkness comes, I hear
wolves howling and owls hooting. The wind whistles through the pine trees. I fall asleep to their quiet
lullaby.
-- Douglas Wackerle, Mrs. Simmons 4th grade.
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For this exercise, I bring in photographs cut from magazines like National Geographic or Art/
Photography magazines, each mounted on cardboard. I ask students to pick a photograph that snags
and holds their eye, that something in them answers to with interest and resonance. For additional
poems, they can pick a photo from their family albums. The family album photograph need not be a
good photographin fact, sometimes, the botched one will have more resonance. You might choose
a photograph that someone has taken of you or of someone you know. Judith McCombs has a
wonderful poem on a photograph of her father and his ex-girlfriend who was not her mother, on what
might have been but did not happen. Or you can use a photograph from an artistic or journalistic
magazine (DoubleTake and National Geographic are good sources.) Or a photograph that documents a
historical event. Miles David Moores fabulous poem Dead Boy in the Road to Fredericksburg is
written on Matthew Bradleys photograph of a casualty of the Civil War.
With the photograph in hand, I ask students to spend some time writing out just what you see in it:
objects, landscape, people, clothes, trees, architecture, light, and shadow. In a sense, you will have
to narrate the photograph, or at least make images so that we can, literally, see what you are talking
about without seeing the photograph. Then, using the same photograph, I have students write
different poems from it, from some of the following perspectives or points-of-view:
1. what you see and think is happening, what is the person(s) in the photograph feeling.
2. Speak in the voice of the photographer and give the imagined story of the moment captured.
3.Speak in the voice of someone or something in the photograph.
4.For family album photos, speak as yourself addressing the poem to someone in the
photograph.
An additional shift in perspective can be uncovered by writing poems in which you manipulate
time.
1. Write what happened just before the photograph was taken.
2. Write what happened as the photograph was being taken, outside the range of the camera.
3. Write the poem as if you have found the photograph years after it was taken.
4. Write exactly the same poem in three versions: in the present tense, the past tense, and the future
tense.
One way of revising poems is to shake up the original poem, to see it from different perspectives, to
re-see it. Sudden shifts in perspective open a poem up to us again and help us to surpass our
resistances to revision: stubbornness, attachment to predictability, and the touching, understandable
love of our own first seeing. One way of practicing revision is to work a poem that has the same
focus of attention through several different points of view. While the focus of the poem remains the
same, we can see how we speak it, revising by generating new poems. Photos provide a stable focus
and seem to be especially suited to writing with these kinds of shifts.
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Maggie Anderson says, Any photograph is a record made by a person who was shifting around
something shifting that they saw. When we look at a photograph, we shift around what the
photographer has made to stand still. Imagine the lives that came to that point of time in the
photograph, imagine the what might happen and did not, imagine the lives after that point in their
timelines and you will find your poems.
We all love color we make color decisions often in our day --- from what to wear, what to eat,
drink, et cetera. Children love thinking and talking about colors. I often begin this workshop with a
taste test for my students. Each student is given a handful of M & M chocolate candies and asked
which color tastes best. Even though some children know and will point out that the taste is
technically the same, they agree that all prefer one or another color to eat first or to save for last. We
then engage in a brief discussion of how their choices relate to their favorite colors, in clothes, in walls,
ink, etc. and how we associate colors with emotion: - having the blues, feeling browned off, a test day
being a black day.
Lesson: Students develop thinking skills and make interdisciplinary connections. This exercise
stimulates as many senses and ways of knowing as possible (multiple intelligences) and enhances
curiosity
The following are sections from a color spectrum poem written by my second daughter, Shoshana
Goldberg in Grade 6.:-
Black is horror.
Shadows on a wall, an eerie noise,
A creaky door, an endless hole.
Black is unknown.
It is important at this stage to stress to students the need to write concretely, to make word pictures
instead of explaining only what a color means. As illustrated by the above, black is horror is not as
interesting or vivid to us as shadows on a wall. etc. The concrete things that are scary to the writer
makes us relate to it emotionally and makes the piece a poem.
Exercise 1: Use one of the following forms to make up a poem with your favorite or least favorite
color or a spectrum of colors.
Additional Resource for Elementary students: Mary ONeill : Hailstones & Halibut Bones
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Form A -
(color) is ____ (animal or part of an animal e.g. pink is the nose on a bunny rabbit.)
(color) is the smell of ________( e.g. green is the smell of pancakes on St. Patricks day)
(color) is the sound of _________ (noun & sentence)
(color) likes to be with____(color) They ---- dance/melt/sing_(action verb) together.
(color) makes me feel_________
FORM B:-- I love -------- (color) of the fur on a ____
I love __________(color), the ________(adjective) ______
of the fur on a (animal)
I love __________(color), the _______ (adjective) ______ (color)
of ______________________________
Form C -
Pick a color and use it wherever (color appears below.) If writing about a least favorite color,
substitute I do not like or I hate for I love
I love _________(color) things
I like _______ (plural noun), ______ ,and _______
I love big ______ (color) ________ (noun)
that ______________________________________
I love small ______ (color) ________
that _______________________________________ (verb sentence)
Exercise 2 (Advanced):-
Here are some questions to have the class discuss and freely associate with things they know. What
are the colors you associate with your family? Your house? think of clothes, walls, curtains, roof,
street.
With your culture? The Chinese love red - you see a lot of red pillars and walls in Chinese
architecture. Chinese brides wore red embroidered jackets until 1942. The brides switched to pink and
then white. White only became accepted with Western tradition and was resisted by the older
generations because traditionally, white is the color of mourning and funerals. Ask students write a
poem or story about a childhood experience involving an aspect of color traditions in their culture:
Additional Resource for Elementary students: Mary ONeill : Hailstones & Halibut Bones
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INSIDES/OUTSIDES POEMS
the star in the apple
the nest in the pomegranate,
the maze in the onion.
from the poem Wonders of the World
by Richard Shelton
This workshop is wonderful with elementary school children. I bring in some fruits and vegetables
(such as apples, oranges, pomegranates, bananas, kiwi, onions, potatoes, cabbage, red peppers). I slice
the apple in half around the waist so that there is a star apparent. I carry the two halves around the
classroom so that the students can see the star. Then I slice the onion and the cabbage in turn and let
the children see the maze in each. We then cut some of the other fruits in half and let the children tell
me what they see.
The lesson in this workshop gives students practice in creative seeing and creative thinking, pushes
them to look and think beyond the surface appearance of things. It also teaches them to make
connections to life situations and relationships.
For a group exercise: The students are seated in groups and each group is given a sampling of a
certain fruit or vegetable. One person in the group is assigned to write what the fruit looks like before
and after cutting, how it grows, how they usually prepare it for eating. Also what it smells like, and
finally, what it tastes like.
Students are asked to compare their foods to objects that are basically different. E.g.. A banana
tastes like banana is not acceptable. After the writing, students can share the leftover cut-up food.
Additional Exercises:
A:- Students write a poem about their family preparing and eating a traditional or favorite dish and
his/her feelings on the occasion.
B:- Students write a poem about their favorite or most disliked food, the first time they tasted it and
his/her feelings about it.
C: Insides/Outsides. This is my favorite writing exercise with this workshop. Discuss exterior
appearance versus interior e.g.. apples, onion, and compare with impressions of people e.g..
their best friend on first meeting and later when they got to know them. Ask students to write a
poem about how they seem to others and how they know they actually are. Students can use
one of the following motifs to start up their poems. This is also a good exercise in reviewing
Opposites.
but ____
Sample 3: I seem to be
but really I am
I begin this workshop with a leading question: How many students have touched a butterfly? a
caterpillar? How did they feel? How does the caterpillar see the world? What is important to the
caterpillar? What is important to the butterfly? Are they the same?
Lesson: This workshop teaches students to include the senses in their writing and to use different
points of view in looking at the world around them.
Leading Question: If you were a puppy, what would you. want? What would you fear? If a duck? a
mouse? the sun? the moon? a star? A bed? A dandelion? Pick the point of view of something other
than human and write a poem, speak for it. Use repetitions of If I were a ______ if you like.
Lesson: Perspective - We change as we grow older; the way we see and feel about things also
changes. This exercise challenges students to reexamine the way they viewed things in the
past and now.
Poem for Discussion: I read aloud this poem and use it as a springboard for discussion on time and
change in our lives, our world. I ask students to think about whether they have changed in
the way they look at the world and how the world has changed since they were small.
I remember
I remember when I had a babysitter;
but now I am in charge.
I remember when monsters didnt like perfume,
but now I know there are no monsters.
I remember when multiplication was impossible,
but now Im in algebra.
I remember when stairs were dangerous,
but now I know of guns and drugs.
by Megan ONeill, Grade 4, Drew Elementary School
2: how things have changed in the world since they were small, or since their parents were kids, or
since an earlier period in history.
Students are asked to complete the following incomplete lines with statements, using images, word
pictures. Students are not to explain the series of statements should lead the reader to a conclusion
of why. The word BECAUSE is not allowed in the poem.
I used to think________________________
but now I know________________________
I used to love_________________________
but now I love________________________
--- -- -- -- --
When I was small,
I thought the moon
and the stars were stickers
on the ceiling of the world.
-- Monique Hayes, Gr. 3, Drew Elementary School.
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The Ocean
Once the ocean was a clear crystal blue
Now it is dark, a polluted gray-blue.
Once it was Welcome, come swim,
Now it is warning, Chemicals found.
Once I had freedom to run on the beach,
Now there is litter, deep in the sand.
Once the waves crashed on the beach,
Now they are silent, mild and meek.
Once the beach was a great place to go,
Now it is empty and amusement parks full.
-- Stephanie Kuldell, Gr. 5, Drew School.
**
I Remember
by Jack Strabo
I remember when I didnt know what 1 + 1 was. (2).
Now I know what 89x32 is. 2,848.
I remember when I thought everything was mine.
Now I know I have to share.
I remember when being alone could be dangerous.
Now I know that wars are dangerous.
I remember when I couldnt say my name.
No I can say Algebra.
I remember when I thought walking was hard.
Now I know schoolwork is hard.
I remember when I thought everything was dangerous.
Now I know about drugs, cigarettes and cigars.
I remember when I thought five dollars was a lot of money.
Now I know $1,000 is a lot of money.
** **
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If I were air, I'd be ______ (name a form of air with an action verb to show why it appeals)
Using simile, metaphor, explore the following
Air feels like ____ e.g. someone lifting my hair, a giant leaning on me
sounds like ____
moves like _____
smells like ____
looks like ____
Writing exercises:-
Write a poem on air the everyday air we take for granted or one of the forms of air... stories the wind
tells the leaves, scents/smells and sounds that flow from a Italian kitchen, someone cooking hot dogs
& sauerkraut? curry? Write a poem starting with a memory of a smell.
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AIR- Group poem by Mrs. Vetter's 4th/5th Air would be a big fat blue whale and make
grade Class, Drew Model School BIG SPLASHES.
WATER MAGIC
Students often need help in starting to write freely and to give their imaginations free rein, this is
more true of older students who feel their dignity/image may suffer if they say something far-fetched
or not usual. Many of my workshops start out as play, to loosen up my students and get them into a
spirit of play and let them know it is all right to have fun and take risks with their ideas.
I got this workshop from a Pennsylvania poet, Christopher Bursk with whom I taught a free evening
writing class for the homeless at the Washington, D.C. Center for Creative on-Violence in 1989. For
this class, I bring in water balloons filled with water and hand them out. Students are encouraged to
hold the water balloons, feel their heft, weight, texture, and brainstorm along the following guidelines:-
Teacher records what is said on large sheet of paper or the blackboard. Then we review these and edit
and arrange into a group poem.
Exercise:
Write a poem about your favorite form of water and how it makes you feel.
Write a poem about a dream or a person (relative, friend) in which water is involved.
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Water feels like a smooth, slow-motion dream Water smells.. the Potomac River smells,
that goes on like flour, seawater, seaweed, swimming
and on forever. It feels heavy and swift, it goes pool chlorine,
on like a dream. like dead fish, pollution.
Austin Hawkins, Gr. 8,
Thomas Jefferson School Water fears nothing, water fears man, fears
death
Water by evaporation.
Water
Water flows like a Doves beak glows.
A person needs water to live their life.
The things that live need water because
almost everything needs a drink, even plants.
Even when its raining, you can have fun
because you can pretend that the drops are you
tiptoeing,
trying to scare someone.
Red is nice, green is great, but if we didnt have
blue,
I would probably invent it myself.
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Memories are a rich resource for poems. The earliest thing you remember or any incident that
has vividness means that it had made a impact for a reason, usually emotional, on you at the
time. First comes the remembering, making notes as the memory unfolds and then, selecting
details, arranging them in the best order for the poem and then checking for clarity. Often,
students omit the most important bit of information e.g.: one student recalled being in a bath as a
2 year old, the lovely bubbles, being rushed to hospital and everyone being most anxious for her
life. She omitted one small but needed detail that she had drunk the bubble bath liquid
because she knew it and assumed it was obvious. I got this exercise from my friend Elaine
Maggarell and it is one of my favorites. This reinforces the basics of good writing and coherent
think, organization and presentation through practice in selecting details, and arranging the poem
in the best order.
Presentation: Im going to take you back in time. Use a sheet of paper to make notes. Write one
note on each line. Then youll turn these notes into a poem.
Go back in time to your earliest memory of a place. How old are you? What place are you in?
What is around you? What is on the floor? What is hanging on the wall? What sounds do you
hear - radio, TV, people speaking - what do they say? What smells are in the air? How do they
make you feel? What is the last thing you put in your mouth? - thumb, pacifier? How did it
taste? What is rubbing on your skin? Who is there with you? Write down what is said. How do
you feel in this memory?
In this time and place, what were you afraid of? What did you think might happen? What
might happen to you?
What is confusing in this place and time? What always happens? What do you wish would
happen that never happens? that sometimes happens
Why does this memory/incident have significance? What meaning do you see in it?
I had a high school student whose earliest memory was sitting quietly in his mothers lap when
he was three. Nothing happened in this memory. He just remember the peace of the memory.
When he got to this final question, he thought about it and realized that was the last time he was
an only child his mother was pregnant with his brother. And was able to turn his memory
notes into a beautiful poem.
Taking the notes you made, underline the interesting parts. Now number them in the order you
plan to use them. Cross out the unimportant words or lines and add anything interesting that you
can think of. Circle the interesting words, the ones with nice sounds and images.
Add a metaphor or simile if it will make the notes more interesting, vivid E.g.: the big kitchen
knife lay on the table like a threat. Her words came at me like thrown swords.
Now choose words and phrases from your notes to make a poem. You can add or change
things to make the poem better. it need not be true; it must only feel true and right to you.
DONT TRY TO SHOCK. You are trying to share an experience.
Find a title for your poem - it can be a word or a phrase from the poem itself. Everyone will
want to title their poem My Earliest memory. Please dont state the obvious. Make your title
work for the poem. Your title should be interesting and give a hint to what the poem is about or
give some additional information that. is not in the poem. Every word, phrase of the poem
should be a necessary part of the poem. Cut out superfluous words that dont add to the poem.
MEMORY POEMS
At three, waiting to be led somewhere
standing in bright grass, the smell filling
my nose.
There is silence, my parents in the background.
A stone, perhaps a tombstone, perhaps
a sign, it clouds only my vision.
I have no fear as I feel the breeze sweep
across me.
Everything is crystal clear.
My father takes my hand and I go.
- David Bloomberg
My Memory
by Jamal Sanders, Gr. 7, Paul Jr., High
I was 11.
I was in the hospital.
My grandmother, uncle and mother
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Surrounded me.
I heard the radio and TV.
They were talking about my education.
I hugged my mom.
I was afraid of her dying.
I wish she was still here.
My mom was sweet as a rose.
She lives in my memory.
**
My Memory
by Casey Smith, Gr. 7, Paul Jr. High THE DOLL by Hilary Tham
I ate a bottle, actually I ate Mother said:
Two bottles of Flintstones vitamins. I cannot afford to buy one but I will make you
I was 4 years old. a doll.
I am in my living room on my chair
Reaching for the bottle on top of the fridge 2 Popsicle sticks
in the kitchen. I remember crossed and tied with string.
My shoes are on the floor and 2 eyes with brows pencilled in.
the top of the bottle is on the floor too. A quick stroke of another pen
I hear the TV, it is on. made a scarlet smiling mouth. Then
There is no one talking, just me a dab of glue and cotton wool.
and my brother chowing down. 2 scraps of cloth from the sewing
My mom is sleeping. basket, with lace tacked on.
I smelled the vitamins in the bottle.
It smelled wonderful. And Doll was fully formed, with
I had vitamins in my mouth. a change of clothes to hand.
They tasted extraordinary.
I feel good at first.
Peoples hands at the hospital Doll lived under my pillow for years.
Pumping me like a person pumping gas. She did not meet the porcelain doll,
This memory came to me because the plastic dolls on our street.
It was appalling and surprising They had real hair, hands with fingers
And an important lesson that night. and toes on their feet.
**
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TOUCH/ SENSES
One of the most important tools of good writing is using words that bring images (word
pictures) to the readers mind. I tell my students: When you write a poem, you are making word
pictures in the mind of your reader. Word choice is important. The word daisy or hibiscus
will evoke a sharper and clear image than the word flower. Frangipani or coconut palm is
better than tree.
Lesson: Making word pictures, using words with precision.
Say bird,
and a sparrow appears
Inside you and ruffles
its feathers.
Say cardinal
and the bird turns red.
Suddenly it is winter,
With a lot of snow. And look!
There are sunflower seeds
in the feeder.
Leading Question: What are the five senses? Have students name them: sight, hearing, taste,
smell and touch.
What can touch tell you - e.g. feel your hand, your hair. Paper, sneakers, floor, carpet.
What are some words that give us touch sensing?
Have students feel wood, bark, paper, onion., plastic, etc. and name sensory words.
Rough, smooth, hard, soft, silky, thin, thick, tough, bumpy, sticky, fuzzy, dry wet, spongy,
soapy, springy, wooly, heavy, boggy, cool, hot, cold, warm, sharp, blunt, solid, squishy.
Does a dog feel the same all over? What touch sense words might one use to describe your dog?
Use a simile to make it more interesting. Example: the tongue of my dog is rough as sandpaper.
Nest, think of an abstraction something you cannot touch or handle, like emotions, ideas.
Happiness is my puppy licking my face with its wet tongue.
Friendship can be smooth as water or bumpy as tree bark.
Do a practice run on the black board with feelings suggested by the students.:
Anger feels like _____ ,
Sadness is like_________
Joy is like _______
Exercise: Write a poem about things you like and show the reader how they feel sample:
Rawan Alhhusami, Shah Azad, Paul Cavanaugh, Jordan Chiang, Kellie Cornwell, Raris
El-Mi, Jonathan Howick, Giedre Kazragyte, James Kurael, Hannah Mayberry, Alexander
McAuliffe, Xavier Palaathingal, David Romero, Shreya Sharma, Nader Sobhani,
Muhammed Tanoli, Caitlin Thomas, Linda Tran, Reyna Umanzor, Jose Villatoro and
Michael Webster
Exercise 2: Write an action poem: about things you like to do and how it feels to the 5 senses--
taste, smell, touch, hearing, sight. Pick interesting verbs, adverbs and adjectives and
onomatopoeic wordswords that sound like their meaning e.g. crunch, boom.
Telling someone how to do something that the student knows welle.g. How to dress
like a COOL Kid, To make a terrific peanut butter sandwich, Making the walk to school
shorter. Using the imperative voice, speaking as an authority on a subject, can be very
releasing to a poet. It also generates conditions for direct speech, terse and cogent language, the
poet stays very concrete dealing with directions or instructions and can bring out very powerful
poems. And there is always energy from the empowering position of pointing out something
that is clear, real and true to you! The trick is to convince the reader in the poem. Scott Cairns
does this in his poem Imperative.
Imperative
by Scott Cairns
The thing to remember
is how tentative all of this
really is. You could wake up dead.
Exercise1.: Write a poem telling a specific someone about something definite: e.g. the weather,
how to make a bird-house, how to skin a cat, anything that you know or can fake a convincing
tone and information on. Wearing the mask of Teacher, your tone can be playful, serious,
sarcastic, ironic, as long as it is imperative (commanding), i.e. I know what Im talking about.
Additional Exercises: Write a poem in the voice of someone who knows like a science teacher,
Einstein, or a grandmother, giving directions on how to perform a science experiment to prove
something or how to cook an egg, etc. Remember to make it interesting and add word pictures
and use similes.
Or write a poem in the imperative voice explaining a law of physics like what causes potholes
and what happens when your car drives over one
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As he rowed, he heard a voice. Let me go, it said. Then he heard it again. Let
me go, and I will make you happy. The fisherman thought he was getting dizzy
and a little crazy from hunger and too much sun. He was hearing voices in the
middle of the empty ocean. Never mind, he would soon have food and rest, after he
sold his fish. He looked at his catch and couldnt believe his eyes. Its mouth was
opening and closing and words came from it. I am a magic fish. Let me go,
Fisherman, and I will give you three wishes. And it said it again and again.
Finally, the fisherman felt sorry for the fish. With a sigh, he stopped rowing. He
took the hook out of the fish and put the fish over the side of his boat. The fish
dove into the salt water. Then its head broke the surface of the dark water. It said,
Remember now, the first three things you wish for will come true. And you cannot
use one of the three to wish for more wishes.
By the time the fisherman reached the beach, he was wondering if it had all been
a dream. Since he had no fish to sell, he went straight home. His wife too had been
hungry all day and looking forward to his coming back with food. When she saw
he had brought nothing, she remembered all the things he had done wrong in the
past. And she scolded him for them again. He said, Calm down, Wife. I had a
strange thing happen to me today. He told her about the fish and the three wishes.
She got excited. Oh, there are so many things we could wish for. A grand house
with lots of servants. We could wish to own a supermarket well never be hungry
again if we did She went on and on until the fisherman got impatient and said,
Thats all in the future. I wish we had a huge sausage right now. Im so hungry.
Bing! There was a foot long kielbasa sausage on the kitchen table in front of
him.
Look what youve done! Youve wasted one of our three wishes! screeched his
wife. You stupid man, I wish that sausage was on the end of your stupid nose!
Bing! The sausage leapt into the air and one end glued itself to his nose.
The fisherman stared down at the end of his nose. The sausage was heavy, his
nose began to ache from the weight of it. Ow! Dnoo. Dnow see what youve
done. He groaned. His wife was horrified. They had only one wish left. They
could wish for millions of dollars but there was no way they could be sure that a
surgeon could remove the sausage from his nose. His wife often got mad at him but
she loved him and did not want him to be unhappy. So finally, they agreed to use
their last wish to wish the sausage off his nose. Bing! The sausage fell off his nose
back on to the table. So they had sausage for their dinner. And they went to bed
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I wish by RBF I wish Bill Gates would give me all his money
1 wish someday that the sun will rise listening and annual income so that I could
to babies cries, That day peace will grow and spend it on a home and have all the
form even during a terrible thunderstorm. I video games systems that were ever
wish I had a lot of money even enough to stop built.
world hunger. With at! the money I wilt also
provide for my future. I wish that people were off the earth so that
I would wish for more, I want to feel safe In no animals or habitats would ever be
this world I call home. in danger of extinction.
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I wish by Esme Morris I wish my teachers wouldnt give me
I wish I was the sun because Id get to rotate homework.
around the earth. by Eric Zimmerman
People would be happy to see me. **
I would get to see the moon. I would be bright I wish I was a dog. I wish I was
yellow. People would draw me on their paper A cat. I wish I was Natures king
and Id make people happy. Because then I would be all that.
---------- I wish I was a dog because I would bark
I wish by Jonathan Cox and run. I would be my masters soulmate
I wish there were no drugs as his life went on. I wish I was a cat -
and no fighting. I wish everything was good. I would purr and curl. My masters laps
I wish there would be a good chance for me to would be my place for he would rub my tail.
be in the NFL my sport is football. I wish I by Michael Yates
owned my own pet store. It would be called **
Johns Exotic Pet Store. I wish by Ben Gavares, Gr. 7, Williamsburg
I wish by Robert Baum I wish I were a big blob of
I wish I were a cat, mercury. So I would never die and
they eat mice. I would go through things.
I wish to be a bird
cause they soar high. I wish I were a bald eagle
I wish I were a cheetah so people would become concerned and
cause they run fast
and eat other animals. people would look up to me. Also so people
would hear what I have to say.
**
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I wish I had feathers, soft the things that are bad and make all
as silk they would be. little children never ever be sad.
A ebony black swan by Taneal Wilson, Gr. 6
I wish I could be. And Id fly, **
and soar high above the sea.
Where would I go? To Japan I wish I were a teacher that can help
with the Japanese and learn children with their work. I wish I had
what they know. a lot of money so that I can build houses
But I wouldnt stay there for for the homeless, so that people will not
Id be free, free to do anything, be sleeping on the street. I wish for the world
free to be me. to be peaceful with loving and caring people.
by Iman Jackson, Grade 6 I wish for the world to be without drugs
Parkview School because of the killing and death. And I wish
for the world to stop fighting.
By Allison Henderson, Gr. 6
I wish I were **
an angel in heaven because
they are so beautiful and wear white I wish I was grownup.
long gowns and fly I wish I were a lawyer
on a big white cloud in the sky. who helps mothers get child support
by Rochelle Beckham, Gr. 6 from their runaway husbands.
I wish I were a comedian to make I wish I had a big house with a big yard
people laugh. and lots of money and lived in Harlem, New
I wish I had ten trillion dollars York.
so I can spend it. I wish for the world
the drugs were gone. I wish I had a pathfinder car.
By Maurice Lee, Gr. 6 by LaJonya Whittaker, Gr. 6
**
I wish I had wings.
I wish I had feathers. I wish I were a baby so that I would not
I wish I were a mocking bird so have to go to school, and all day long
I can fly high in the sky and go Ill just sit and look up at you. I wish
where I want to go and change I were a baby so that I would be spoiled
back into a human when I want to. and everything I cry for would come to me.
by Courtney Bailey, Gr. 6 I wish I were a baby so I can re-live my
mistakes
** and take each day slowly as I grow up again.
I wish I were a mocking bird I wish I were a mosquito so I can bite
I wish I were a king. people who dont like me and
I wish I were a prince I would be healthy by drinking their blood.
whod walk around and sing. By Michelle Dealer
I wish I could stop the world and change
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FOCUS ON FORM
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LIMERICKS
Purpose 1:
To use the limerick form to create original humorous rhymes.
Introduction:
Most students will find limerick writing an enjoyable activity, because limericks can be just as
ridiculous as each author wishes. Once they have a solid introduction to the limerick, writing a
limerick is easy. The teaching value lies in two areas:
Disciplined expression.
Self-expression.
Disciplined Expression: Limerick writing requires strict adherence to the patterns of rhyme, rhythm,
and the number of syllables per line. This will make students more acutely aware of these elements,
will increase their respect for poetry as a discipline, and will guide their attitudes toward a healthy
acceptance of personal orderliness and self-control.
Self-Expression: Encourage all students to be active participants - they are capable of writing and
reciting their own original limericks. One of the chief underlying facts recognized as sound teaching is
that a student must generate his own thoughts and apply new skills himself, if the values of these skills
are to be lasting. The memorization of rules and the mute acceptance of someone else's efforts cannot
alone develop a student's potential
Purpose 2: After following this unit, the student will:
be familiar with the limerick form;
experience listening to poetry for enjoyment;
be introduced to interpretive reading;
recognize the rhyme patterns in poetry;
recognize the rhythm pattern of limericks;
recognize that limericks are humorous;
appreciate limericks as a form of creative expression;
have attempted writing a limerick;
Ages/Grades
Most students ages 10 and up will be able to successfully complete all of the suggested activities.
Materials
A number of books containing limericks, other compositions, and the art of Edward Lear and others
such as Lewis Carroll, Dr. Seuss, and Shel Silverstein. A rhyming dictionary is helpful.
LESSON:
--The limerick got its name from the place where it began--Limerick, England. Children love rhyme
and rhythm. Limericks satisfy these and hone their enjoyment of poetry.
The Limerick is still a most popular nonsense verse form today. The poem consists of 5 lines rhyming
AABBA. Lines 3 and 4 are some times written as a single line with an internal rhyme.
- - / - - / - - /(a) - - / - - / - - /(a)
- - / - - / - - /(a) - - / - - / - - /(a)
- - / - - / - - /(a) - - / - - / (b) - - / - - /(b)
- - / - - /(b) - - / - - / - - /(a)
- - / - - / - - /(a)
To help students get started, here's some helpful information about writing limericks. The last words of
the first, second, and fifth lines rhyme with each other (A), and the last words of the third and fourth
lines rhyme with each other (B). Here's an example:
There was an old man from Peru, (A)
da DUM da da DUM da da DUM
who dreamed he was eating his shoe. (A)
da DUM da da DUM da da DUM
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There once was a man named Paul There once was a president named Bill,,
He wanted to go to a costume ball White water drove him up a hill,
He decided to risk it All the lawyers were talking,
About sending him walking,
And go as a biscuit But he managed to escape without frill.
But a dog ate him up in the hall. -- Thomas Woo
-- Anonymous
** **
The Boy by Jake Ward, Gr. 4 There once was an artist named Hutty,
Whose neighbors all said was quite nutty.
There once was a boy with a grin
Who had very sensitive skin. He modeled, they say,
He got a bruise In real sculptors clay,
Tripping over his shoes But really he used silly putty.
And never did it again. **
** There once was a lady named Pat,
Who always wore the same blue hat.
There once was a dog named Bob Until one fall day,
Who wanted to eat a frog
But the frog was quite fat To her great dismay,
So they both just sat It blew far away just like that!
So there they sit, the dog and the frog. -Jessica Beckwith 91
-- Chris Kaas, Gr. 6, Williamsburg
**
ADDITIONAL INFORMATION ON THE LIMERICK
The Elements Of Limericks: There are five lines.
Rhyming scheme (a a b b a):
Lines 1, 2, and 5 rhyme
Lines 3 and 4 rhyme.
Note: Lines 3 and 4 are sometimes printed on the same physical line.
Alternately, you can count syllables. Some of the examples in textbooks vary, but the number of
syllables usually follow this pattern:
Rhythm:
Lines 1, 2, and 5 contain 3 accented syllables.
Lines 3 and 4 contain 2 accented syllables.
Meter:
There is no required metrical scheme, but each line usually has a masculine ending that is that each
phrase is always stressed, or emphasized, on the last syllable.
Humor:
Limericks thrive on the lack of harmonious agreement between parts. They contain a broad humor that
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most students over 8 to 10 years old appreciate. Junior High age students seem to really appreciate the
limerick form. Younger students, preschool to eight, really enjoy the rhythm and rhyme of the
limerick.
EXERCISE: Using one of these suggested lines (or one of your own), write a limerick:
1. There was a young lady who said,
2. There once was a boy with a grin,
3. An agile young gymnast named Mary
CLERIHEWS
The Clerihew is a comparatively new form of verse. It got its name from its inventor, a writer of
detective stories, E. C. Bentley, whose middle name was Clerihew. Clerihews are short; they are never
more than four lines and they always begin with the name of a famous character, but the facts about
him/her dont always have to be true. Often, these are exaggerated and purposely wrong.
Edward the Confessor Francesca de Rimini
Slept under the dresser. Lived in a chiminey,
When that began to pall, Full of ghouls in the gloam.
He slept in the hall. But still, home is home.
E. C. Bentley Louis Untermeyer
Said Sir Christopher Wren, Although the Borgias
"I'm having lunch with some men. Were rather gorgeous,
If anyone calls, They liked the absurder
Say I'm designing Saint Paul's." Kind of murder.
E. C. Bentley Louis Untermeyer
When Alexander Pope Albert Einsteins crooked nose
Accidentally trod on the soap, Never seemed a curse.
And came down on the back if his head While gazing down in repose,
Never mind what he said. He found the Universe!
E. C. Bentley Tara Farr
Edgar Allan Poe Timothy Viegh says, "I am not the bomber,"
Was passionately fond of roe. America thinks,- "He's a goner,"
He always liked to chew some His sister says, "He's the guy,"
When writing something gruesome. If they believe her, no more will he be able to
E. C. Bentley lie
by Geoff Roulil, Grade 8
That famous lady Mona Lisa,
Whose smile has been a real teaser, Lisa Gnugnoli wrote a poem,
Will never tell this world were in The poem made no sense.
Whats behind her fabled grin. She crumpled it up and threw it away
Anonymous
And then jumped over a fence.
Basketball ace, Dr. J - Lisa Gnugnoli, Grade 7
Is seven foot tall, so they say.
His only problem is buying shoes, Bill Clinton had a dream
But thats why they invented canoes. That he was punching a door.
Hilary Tham When he woke up,
Alfred, Lord Tennyson He was punching Al Gore.
Lived upon venison; -- William Mendoza, Grade 6
Not cheap, I fear,
Because venison's deer.
Louis Untermeyer
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The following sample poems are from CECIL RAJENDRAs Papa Mooses Nursery Rhymes For
our Times.
What are little boys made of? **
MacDonalds and Coca Cola Simple Shi Mun was in Tiananmen
Lucky Strike and a Honda, walking around the square.
Thats what little boys are made of. Asked a guard of Simple Shi Mun,
** Whats this noisy affair?
What are little girls made of? **
Cartier, Ricci and Coco Chanel, Said Simple Shi Mun to the guardsman,
Heavy eye-shadow and lots of gel, Were singing for democracy.
Thats what little girls are made of. Said the guardsman shooting Simple Shi Mun,
** Indeed! You wont get any!
File my case, file my case **
Lawyer man! Ali, Ali, farmer extraordinary
Win me my case How does your garden grow?
As fast as you can. With herbicides
And pesticides
Inflate it and pad it And mutant broccoli all in a row.
And mark it up forty
Per cent for that commission **
Youre squeezing from me. Dalai Lama
** A lama in Tibet
If all the world were a garbage pile sat in his turret
and all our sea was slime, Quietly meditating away.
And all our trees in paper mills,
Where would we live in ten years time. Along came a soldier
** Sent down from China
Ring a ring o soldiers And now the lamas an migr.
A silo full of bombs. **
Achtung! Achtung!
We all fall down.
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middle aged
couple playing
ten nis
when the
game ends
and they
go home
the net
will still
be be-
tween them
Life
is like a tree
living like you and me.
It starts with the seed
that grows like a weed
Up to the sky,
way up high.
Breathing the air
(theres plenty to spare).
They grow into saplings, competing for light.
They struggle to live in a very hard fight.
Finally the weak are weeded out,
leaving room to the others, no doubt,
that stayed alive
and continued to thrive.
Your own life is always at risk
but the tree will live, though the weather is brisk.
When your life is ending, it withers away,
caving in and breaking while the branches sway.
Solid and sturdy.
Life is like a tree.
by Ashley Seitz, Gr. 7
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TORNADO
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-- Hilary Tham
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ACROSTIC POEMS
An acrostic is a poem that has a visual dimension in that the letters of the subject word is written in
bold print and form the beginning letters of the lines. Even very young children can write or patch
together simple acrostics. The very young write only one related word or phrase next to each letter of a
word listed downward on their page.
Acrostic poems are easy and fun to do. Several of the Psalms and many pre-19th. century Hebrew
poems are acrostics. In an acrostic poem, the first letters of the lines spell out a word or some words,
such as the students name, part of the alphabet (or the whole alphabet), or a word that has something
to do with the poem. For example, the poem below spells out the word Apple.
Anybody can
Pick one up at the store
Pluck a juicy red off the tree
Licking good
Eating.
It is helpful to discuss the power of verbs here: how action words, active verbs help to energize a poem
or sentence and conjure up word pictures. Verbs for movement: stroll, amble, pace, run, skip, plod.
Remind students to put in appropriate action verbs in their poem to make it come alive.
EXERCISE: Choose a place or person and spell the word(s) vertically down the left side of the page so
that they form a column. Choose a word, name or thing that really interests you. Try to reach deep into
your feelings when you write. As you write the poem, start each line with a word that begins with the
letter youve already written on the line.
After the poems are written, identify the verbs and see if they are the best and most appropriate verbs
you can think of. Make the poem almost jump off the page because you have such good verbs.
Acrostic poems do not have to rhyme. Students may rhyme them if they wish. Since these poems are
meant to be visual as well as oral, the class should be given copies of the sample poems.
NOTE: This form is good for review of Science, geography, history material. e.g.: OXYGEN,
NEWTON, COLUMBIA, ZAMBIA, NAPOLEON, ANCIENT GREEKS, etc.
Maybe it was something about the soft
Earth, or maybe it was something about the
Airs sweet freshness. Maybe the way the wind cooled us
Down. Or the way the wind blew the leaves around.
Or it could have been the way everything seemed full of peace, the way the
Wind seemed to love this place.
by Rebecca SuYing Goldberg
Racial prejudice
Of the past: white people lording it
Over anyone with darker skin.
Their grandchildren say theyre sorry and
Still clutch their wallets nervously when we are near.
-- by Hilary Tham
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The following is a fine acrostic poem by Lewis Carroll remembering the day when he started telling
the Alice story to the three Lidell girls. Alice Pleasance Lidell was the inspiration for his books:
Alice in Wonderland and Through the Looking Glass.
ALLITERATION POEMS
Alliteration is the literary devise where beginning consonants are repeated for musical effect. Children
enjoy tongue twisters such as the following:
Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers.
Did Peter Piper pick a peck of pickled peppers?
If peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers,
Where is the peck of pickled peppers Peter Piper picked?
OR:
How much wood could a woodchuck chuck
if a woodchuck could chuck wood?
As much wood as a woodchuck would chuck
if a woodchuck could chuck wood.
OR: She sells seashells on the sea shore.
APPLICATION: This is good for reinforcing the learning of alphabets as well as to induce play and
enjoyment of the music of language. I read aloud the above poems and invite the students to recite
other TONGUE_TWISTER poems they know. We discuss what these poems have in common.
(1.They all have many words that begin with the same letter. 2. They dont make sense. 3.They are
humorous or downright silly, but lots of fun to say.)
Have children practice orally, then write alliterative lines using the first letters of their names.
Then have them do an Acrostic poem using their own first names.
Or they can do a Alphabet Acrostic or a numeric. Numeric alliteration example follows.
One old ox opening oysters with onions.
Two toads riding tame tigers and drinking tea.
Three turtles totally tired, trotting to Turkey.
Four frazzled frogs frying French fries.
Five feathered flamingos flying fast to Florida.
Six simple Simons sweeping snow.
Seven stubborn snakes slithering up a sky-scrapper.
Eight elegant elephants eating eggs with eggplant.
Nine neat nieces nibbling nougats.
Ten tipsy tomcats tap-dancing on a typewriter.
SAMPLE poems
Mary met monkeys, made monkeys marshmallows.
Justine just jang-jing genie.
Mary Dodson, Gr. 4
Mary made many marshmallow monkeys.
Maria helped make Marys marshmallow monkeys.
Mary and Maria made money making marshmallow monkeys.
Marsha bought Marys marshmallow monkeys.
Shannon Briggs, Gr. 4
Patty picked a perfect pumpkin on a peaceful plain.
Sally saw a skiing sailor.
Nick never needs to nip at nuts.
Hippos have huge hiccups.
Zicky like zany zebras.
Caroline caught a cold.
Justine Sequeira
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Any poem must convey emotion but haiku is a special way of communicating emotion by linking
human emotion with a observed aspect of nature happening. The haiku works by suggestion. Sentences
can be left unfinished: the use of three dots at the end is common
Exercise 1: Write a group haiku - brainstorm a nature image. plus the emotion you want to convey,
then pare it down to the 17 syllabic count into lines of 5,7,5 syllables.
Exercise 2: Write a linked haiku or a group of haiku to make a cumulative poem about a connected
theme.
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ROLLING HAIKU
After my students have gained familiarity with writing haiku, I have them play a game I call Rolling
Haiku. Actually, a favorite party game of Japanese poets called the Renga is a form of rolling haiku.
Exercise 1: RENGA: Here, participants take turns making up a haiku on the spot by a daisy chain i.e.
participant #2 writes a haiku spinning off participant #1s haiku and so on.
[Optionally, participant #2 can take the last line of haiku #1 and make another haiku using that as the
first line. Participant #3 takes last line of #2s haiku to begin another haiku with line3 of the preceding
haiku.]
EXERCISE 2. Another form of rolling haiku is to connect each haiku by a couple: two seven syllable
lines. This introduces another disciplined form of Japanese poetry -- the Tanka. The Tanka, like the
Haiku, focuses on nature and seasons but is a bit longer. It is also an older form of poetry, dating to the
fourth century. It consists of five lines and 31 syllables distributed according to the pattern 5 - 7 - 5- 7-
7.
Every one takes a paper and writes a haiku on it. Pass the paper. The next person writes 2 lines of
seven syllables below the haiku, that connects one thing or word from the preceding stanza and turns
the haiku into a tanka. Pass the paper. Next person writes a haiku related to something in the preceding
tanka. So the order goes Haiku tanka haiku tanka haiku tanka haiku tanka until
about 6 - 10 people have had a say on each paper. Since everyone starts a paper, everyone should be
working on a rolling haiku at any given moment during this exercise. Have students read aloud the
group poem they wrote the last stanza for.
EXERCISE 3. Variation on this exercise is to have the group begin with a starter haiku -- the same one
for all and you/they will be amazed at how many different directions each poem goes from the same
starting point. After the completion of the rolling haiku, each student can write their chosen rolling
haiku on a rice-paper scroll (one stanza per section) and draw a Chinese brush and ink image to
complete the group work. See Sample rolling tanka below.
Cuckoo singing loud. Listen to the child
I have nothing to do now, crying, abandoned in the
Neither does the weed. backyard with dead grass.
Weeds in the field grow and grow The winds blow cold and white.
Being old, I shrink and shrink We shall have snow by and by.
In the fields, weeds and A snowy morning.
a lone black crow crying out Chewing dried salmon alone.
There is nothing to eat. Happy by myself.
Nothing is good to eat when Happy sound of childrens play
youve the flu or mother scolds. in snow. I stay by the fire.
--- Hilary Tham 2/25/99
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CINQUAIN
The Cinquain is not of Japanese origin as many imagine because of its similarity to haiku and tanka.
As developed by Adelaide Crapsey, cinquains consist of 5 thought lines that follow a 2-4-6-8-2
syllable pattern for a total of 22 syllables.
Mother
washing clothes for
the family, wishes
she was not aging, but a child
again.
Some teachers have simplified this form so that the number of words rather than syllables per line is
the major structural requirement of the cinquain:
first line = one word
second line = two words
third line = three words
fourth line = four words
fifth line = one word
Squirrel
deftly scampers
up Birch tree,
hiding acorn treats from
me.
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DIAMANTE
The diamante, devised by Iris Tiedt, is a relatively structured form comprised of seven lines that
contain a contrast. Not only highly disciplined this form is great for reviewing (even teaching) the parts
of speech. The diamante is seven lines of poetry shaped like a diamond. It is about two things (nouns)
that show a contrast. The diamante follows this pattern:
First Line: Noun (word that names an object or idea)
Second Line: two adjectives (that describe the noun in line 1)
Third Line: three participles (verbs with -ing or -ed endings) associated with the noun in line 1)
Fourth line: four words - two referring to the noun in line 1, two to the noun in line 7).
Fifth Line: three participles (that are associated with the noun in line 7).
Sixth Line: two adjectives (that describe the noun in line 7)
Seventh Line: Noun (which can be another word for the noun in line 1[see Pattern A] or the opposite
of the noun in line 1[See pattern B])
Children love to think and talk about themselves its all part of the necessary process of finding
out who and what they are, part of the need to define their relation to others and the world and society.
The LIST POEM is an excellent device to get them started on writing with a favorite subject in hand,
How things affect them and focuses them on the concrete in their writing. Making a list is a very
useful poetic device for generating the specific, tactile, sensuous substance of the poem. I would
suggest students vary the pace or movement of the poem by putting in a statement sentence now and
again. In order for it to work, the list must be concrete and specific, making word pictures in the
readers mind.
Take the famous song/poem My Favorite Things from The Sound of Music: If it has just listed
raindrops, roses, kittens, etc. it would not have worked. The listed items should invoke all the senses
color, taste, smell, sound, touch so that the cumulative images, effect communicate what you want
to share with your reader. We read aloud the list poems on the sample pages before doing the
exercises. The list must be substantial it must contain at least ten (10) items.
My Favorite Things by Oscar Hammerstein
II IN THE JANITORS DUSTPAN
by Jessica Galllucci, Grade 7
Raindrops on roses and whiskers on kittens,
Bright copper kettles and warm woolen Two bitten off erasers,
mittens, One shoelace,
Brown paper packages all tied up with string,. Eleven chewed pencils,
These are a few of my favorite things. A progress report.
Five bits of broken chalk,
Cream colored ponies and crisp apple strudels, One juice box,
Door bells and sleigh bells and schnitzel with Sixteen kernels of stale caramel popcorn,
noodles, Three Band-Aids.
Wild geese that flay with the moon on their One failed science exam,
wings, Three dirty notes,
These are a few of my favorite things. A cracked lipstick case,
On slimy retainer,
Girls in white dresses with blue satin sashes, Six gum wrappers,
Snow flakes that stay on my nose and Three dead cockroaches,
eyelashes, One glue-stick,
Silver white winters that melt in the spring, One cracked protractor,
These are a few of my favorite things. One green marble
And
When the dog bites, when the bee stings, this list.
When Im feeling sad,
I simply remember my favorite things
And then I dont feel so bad.
Exercise 1: Students write a poem which is simply a list like In the Janitors Dustpan with the
title as the springboard.
Under My Bed
Things that make me smile
Things to do when theres nothing to do
People I want to invite to my birthday party
Night noises or things that go Bumpf in the dark
Things that begin with a letter of the alphabet
e.g. P Pitchers and pocketbooks, pennies and paint..
These may be related by a sensual link (color, sound, taste) or a place, even an imaginary place like
the Big Rock Candy Mountains or their own version of Nirvana or Never-Never-land.
The Big Rock Candy Mountains Birthday Party
(American Folk Song) by Kathleen Mallierah
In the Big Rock Candy Mountains, For my party Im going to invite:
Theres a land thats fair and bright Susantoo snobby,
Where the handouts grow on bushes, Kate hates Bobby,
And you sleep out every night. Becky eats too much.
Where the boxcars are all empty Elizabeth cries too much.
And the sun shines every day Bobby too immature,
On the birds and the bees Dave looks like a gerbil.
And the cigarette trees, Mike hates Susan.
And the lemonade springs Joseph okay.
Where the bluebird sings Maybe a party isnt such a good idea.
In the Big Rock Candy Mountains. **
The above are linked by an emotional response (how you feel about them).A list poem can be
connected by anything that gives them a sense of rightness when they are assembled into one poem
Exercise 2: Students write a poem about any subject and in whatever form which includes a
substantial list or several small lists within it.
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Here is a prayer litany poem by John McCartin, a sixth grad student who died a few months after
writing this poem.
RISING ABOVE
I must rise above
This disease that is holding me down.
I must rise above
The fear of never walking again.
I must rise above
The unsure thoughts of my upcoming surgery.
There are a lot of things to rise above.
If I take life one step at a time,
I will rise above my worries and fears.
(In memory of Mr. Bradford. He taught me that even though I am disabled, I should enjoy life and
ignore people who make fun of you and to always be independent.)
John McCartin, Grade 6, Williamsburg Middle School, 1996
Fathers Dance by James McEuen
Fathers, dance with your sons: forever the child
in the cradle swing of your arms; fathers grow
into the trees your sons will clamber, up to see the sky,
so blue, so closer; fathers swing your sons,
your sons from your long and manly arms swinging,
up higher, higher to the sun; fathers drop
your pencils and briefcases, your calculators
and notepads, your lunchpails, your uniform hats;
fathers dance with your sons, around and around
the rugs of your living rooms, the small triangular parks
outside your offices;
as in the marketplace with the other men,
as in the hogan with the other men, the kiva, the elders hut
with the other men, as in the firelit circle of early day
with the other men. as in the boardrooms, think tanks,
and conference rooms with the other men, the tabernacles,
the sanctuaries with the other men;
fathers dance
with your sons, your sons hair flying, breath caught
in joy, mouths wide in grinning awe; fathers drop
your plans, your arms
to your sons and be the dancing wind
to drive away all wars, to lift us
up squealing to the light.
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THE PANTOUM
The pantoum (oan-TOOM) is an old Malayan verse form that first appeared around the fifteenth
century. It existed orally before then. It uses repeating lines and rhyme weaving them into a sort of
braid. The Western version of the pantoum is a poem of indeterminate length made up of four line
stanzas whose lines are repeated in a fixed pattern. Lines 2 and 4 of each stanza are repeated as lines
1 and 3 of the next stanza and so on. The last stanza has a twist: the Lines 1 and 3 of the first stanza
are used in reverse order as lines 4 and 2 of the last stanza so that the poem ends with the line that
began it.
Heres the pattern:
Stanza 1:
_____________________ (Line 1)
______________________ (Line 2)
______________________ (Line 3)
______________________ (Line 4)
Stanza 2:
_______________________ (Line 1same as line 2 above)
_______________________ (Line 2)
_______________________ (Line 3same as line 4 above)
_______________________ (Line 4)
Stanza 3:
_______________________ (Line 1same as line 2 above)
_______________________ (Line 2)
_______________________ (Line 3same as line 4 above)
_______________________ (Line 4)
And so on until
the Last Stanza:
_______________________ (Line 1same as line 2 above)
_______________________ (Line 2line 3 from Stanza 1)
_______________________ (Line 3same as line 4 above)
_______________________ (Line 4line 1 from Stanza 1)
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SAMPLE PANTOUMS
ADVICE FOR MARRIED MEN ARMCHAIR by Hilary Tham
-- by Hilary Tham
A chair is not simply a chair,
Sometimes we must say, "No," an accessory for a house --
Slap down upstart desires. taken for granted until not there
Their price is high, we know somewhat like a spouse.
We can subdue the body's fires,
An accessory for a house --
Slap down upstart desires. fine teak, leather or rattan weave.
Pass by sweet lures of lust; Somewhat like a spouse,
We can subdue the body's fires, First impressions can deceive.
We can master our impulsive dust,
Fine teak, leather or rattan weave
Pass by sweet lures of lust, with strong back and firm arms.
The girls with bedroom eyes. First impressions can deceive.
We can master our impulsive dust Time will test all charms
To avoid the crippling of lies.
With strong back and firm arms.
The girls with bedroom eyes, Love can die and complicate
Their price is high, we know. Time, will test all charms.
To avoid the crippling of lies, An empty chair calling for a mate.
Sometimes we must say, "No."
Love can die and complicate
* ** ** * coping with the loss of a spouse.
An empty chair calling for a mate
Memory tightens its grip in an empty house.
Coping with the loss of a spouse
Taken for granted until not there.
Memory tightens its grip in an empty house...
A chair is not simply a chair.
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THE GHAZAL
The ghazal (gah ZAHL) takes its name from the Arabic word meaning the talk of boys and girls or
love poetry. A poetry form that originated in Persia and became very popular also in Urdu. Famous
ghazal poets are Hafiz, Rumi, Ghalib. Originally the main themes were love and drinking wine, but
later poets, like the Urdu poet Ghalib used it mainly to express philosophical and mystical ideas.
The ghazal is made up of couplets (units of two lines). minimum of five couplets up to as many as the
poet wishes. Each couplet is wholly independent of the others in meaning and complete in itself as a
unit of thought, almost like a proverb. All the lines have to be equal to each other in length and
follow this rhyme scheme:
AA BA CA DA EA FA and the last couplet must include the poets name.
Heres a ghazal by Ghalib mourning the death of Arif, his wifes nephew, who died young and whose
children Ghalib then adopted.
GHAZAL XI
You should have waited for me a little longer.
Gone on alone, alone you shall be a little longer.
Leaving, you said we shall meet on Doomsday,
As if there could be another, any longer.
You were, for our family, the full moon;
Why couldnt things have stayed the same a little longer?
I know you hated me and did not get along with Nayyar.
You could have stayed to watch your children grow a little longer.
Fools wonder why Ghalib is still living.
It is his fate to remain, yearning for death a little longer.
--trans. Hilary Tham (translated from literal version)
EXERCISE: Write a ghazal. Pick a word for your end word or a rhyme. Look around you and write
down some thoughts on what you see and feel. Write two long lines (couplet), then a break. Think of
something else, write another pair of lines (similar length). Repeat until you have 4 or 5 pairs. Now
write the last couplet and include your name in the last couplet. Viola, you have written a modern
ghazal.
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Ghazals by Yorktown High School students Sometimes I think that Id rather be dead.
The sound of a lonely voice I, Chris, look down on school with great
Surrounds the place; that sound reverberates. disdain:
When Im there, I want to shoot myself in the
The sun will be bright after a rainy day head.
But no matter what, the feeling reverberates. by Chris Palmiero
** **
Finding a parking space alone is a pain
But it has to be done so what can be said?
I hate the days when we have to walk through
the rain.
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John felt sleazy on a Saturday morning. He approaches the manager and prepares to
Michael had a busy but exciting morning. swing.
The manager sees him, smiles and says
Juan flew from the skies and came to us this Whats your beef?
morning.
Chris popped up on the corner as we walked by Gus says, This sandwich sucks, you sleazy
this morning. bum!
And with the might of his fist, he displaces the
Mikey was reviewing Latin when Bright called managers teeth.
him this morning. **
The sky was so beautiful this morning. I like school, its fun and interesting.
Im affable in all the work I have to do.
There was no traffic this morning.
Everyone was outside this morning. I have to wake up early
Though Im affable to doing that.
I, Mike, feel great this morning.
I have no irrevocable decisions this morning. Theres a lot of homework in school
by Mike Barnes Though theres an affable amount.
Ghazal I have to think hard for quizzes,
I woke up on time this morning. Im affable to get a good grade.
I had no irrevocable decisions this morning.
School is a great learning experience.
I felt refreshed with sleep this morning. Im affable and erudite in going to school
I couldnt find a parking spot this morning.
Though it sometimes makes
I had to walk a marathon this morning. Me, David, querulous.
I was almost late to First Period this morning. David Martinez
I fell asleep in the Dr.s class this morning. The way the river flows down the way,
I did not want to do vocabulary this morning. Carelessly it shoots down a path everywhere.
The Dr. was resilient on doing vocabulary this Like a poet who worries what to say
morning. To show in different words how to care.
I did not want to remonstrate with her this
morning. The wind caressing the trees as they sway,
Mike Barnes The snow and snow and all they bear.
Home of the Whopper by Gus Mausilla And I, Mikey, just stare down the way.
Ill go different places here and there.
A man sitting in a booth with his food on a Mikey Samayea
tray,
With his finger in his mouth picking at his Ghazals by Yorktown High School Students ***
teeth. ----------
Its been a long time, love
A sip of his Coke and a bite of his fries, Since we sat by the ocean side, my love..
A bite of his sandwich made with 100% beef.
Your sweet words reverberate with the sun
A look of confusion and terror in his heart, Glancing into the waves of our love.
Knowing that somethings rotting his teeth.
A wave of anger, he stands to complain The water of El Salvadors beaches
He and the manager now have some beef. Were refilled with the aura of love.
He knows hes real angry at how this restaurant Its been a long time, carino
works Since weve sat together under the stars, love.
When he punches the manager, hell knock out
his teeth. The heat of the tropic echoed through my body.
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Your sweet hand zigzagged down my long hair, She is powerful though small, tiny in fact,
love, And in the end, shes alright, body and mind
intact.
That night full of stars for Karen, my love.
That night full of stars, my love. Her fields of flowers, her pastel sunsets, just
memory,
Karen Morales Vivid reminders of how things were, how
things used to be.
The black eyes gazing now, deep inside her
head.
Weary is she, tired, teary and wishing she were
dead.
But the battle is over now, she is victor, she has
** ** won.
A little girls face is tired, teary The beast is gone now, it has had all of its fun.
For nights on end, shes vigilant, leery.
I, J. A. am here for you, little girl, today.
Its black eyes, resilient to the dark of night It wont be back for you, or it will pay.
Might have taken her away if not for her might. Juan Ahert
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THE TEMPLATE POEM
Sometimes, using a poem as a template or model can be a challenge that starts the creative juices
flowing. In my poem The Male, I used Marianne Moores poem The Mind is an enchanting
thing as a model, piling on similes and followed the structure of the poem until the fourth stanza
at which point my poem took off on its own.
Exercise 1: Take a poem you like and write a poem using the grammatical structure of that
poem... substitute a different noun for a noun, adjective, verb, adverb etc. Have fun with it.
Exercise 2: Here is a model I made from Gwendolyn Brooks wonderful poem, Ancient
Civilizations. I have used this with excellent results with my students for reviewing history
curricula.
The men and women long ago
in ancient ____________, in ancient __________ (country)
knew things to grow, things to know
in ancient ____________.
They ___________________________
Their gods wanted ________________
The ancient _______ believed_________
They obeyed _______________________ (rulers? government?
A form needs a formula, plain and simple. Without one, it will be hit-and-miss. You cannot
always create a villanelle by sitting at your desk or computer and composing from the top down
(as you would a free verse poem). Neither can you rely much on discovery, letting the muse
dictate a villanelle from on high. The scheme is too fixed to do that.
Instead you have to plot out your villanelle the way a short story writer or novelist plots a
manuscriptbefore writing it. When you do, you will decrease the chances of wrenching rhyme
or forcing lines and increase the chances of composing a masterful villanelle.
Follow this method:
Know the Pattern
The villanelle uses two rhymes (designated by a and b), five tercets and one ending quatrain
(or five three-line stanzas and one four-line stanza), and two repeating lines (designated by A
and A2the first and third lines of the first tercet, which repeat alternately as the third line of
each following tercet and, finally, as the ending two lines).
Thus, the form: A1-b-A2 a-b-A2 a-b-A2 a-b-A1 a-b-A2 a-b-A1-A2. See template.
BURIAL A1 The stalks of wheat appear to
by Michael Bugeja writhe and bow
A1 The stalks of wheat appear to writhe and bow
b As funnel clouds descend upon the plain. a Then burst into a thunderclap of
A2 The farmer ends his dreaming with a plow. crow.
b They flap against sky but do not
a The sirens in the village always blow, gain.
b As if to synchronize his life of pain. A2 The farmer ends his dreaming with
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a plow. Lest we do our youth wrong,
Gather them while we may:
a The funnel clouds increase, the shadows grow. Wine and woman and song.
b A gust of wind revolves the weathervane.
A1 The stalks of wheat appear to writhe and bow. Three things render us strong,
Vine leaves, kisses and bay:
a His family beckons but he will not go Yet is day over long.
b To shelter as the twister tills the grain.
A2 The farmer ends his dreaming with a plow Unto us they belong,
Us the bitter and gay,
a To meet his fate in fields. He does not know Wine and woman and song.
b The apparitions bobbing in the rain.
A1 The stalks of wheat appear to writhe and bow. We, as we pass along,
A2 The farmer ends his dreaming with a plow. Are sad that they will not stay;
Yet is day over long.
Fruits and flowers among,
What is better than they:
Villanelle of the Poets Road Wine and woman and song?
by Ernest Dowson [18671900] Yet is day over long.
Wine and woman and song,
Three things garnish our way:
Yet is day over long.
Theres something soothing or hypnotic about the sound of a villanelle, the way the lines come
back, like waves at the ends of the stanzas. The form also carries a tone of conviction that
reinforces its sentiments. In the nineteenth century, French writer, Leconte de Lisle, used the
form of the villanelle but wrote more serious, philosophical poems. American poet Edwin
Arlington Robinson wrote a somber villanelle (House on the Hill) about a house that has been
left empty, using short, simple sentences. They are all gone away, / The house is shut and still, /
There is nothing more to say. In 1935, Dylan Thomas wrote Do Not Go Gentle into That Good
Night. This very serious villanelle is about not giving in to death and it is written eloquently,
with long, dramatic lines.
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Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night
Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Though wise men at their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright
Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Wild men who caught and sang the sun in flight,
And learn, too late, they grieved it on its way,
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight
Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
And you, my father, there on the sad height,
Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Combining Meter With Content
The villanelle works best using a four-foot or five-foot line. (trimeter starts to call attention to
the pattern instead of the poems content because of shorter line lengths.) Serious villanelles
usually employ iambs or a combination of iambs and trochees. Lighter ones use more anapests
for a tripping meter or dactyls for a haunting, childlike or marching meter.
Before you pick a meter for your poem, he sure to align it with content The villanelle is an
ideal form to express a nagging or recurring thought or idea. You might use anapestic
pentameter, say, for a Light verse villanelle about rejection slips or dactyllic tetrameter for a
villanelle about marching to the mailbox awaiting a manuscript Or iambic pentameter for a
villanelle about the struggle to fulfill your dreams as an artist, questioning your sacrifices in the
recurring lines
The Method
Because the first and third lines of the villanelle repeat according to a pattern and then must
come together as ending lines in the final quatrain, first compose the ending (as you would a
couplet). Many villanelles fail because the first and third lines of the first stanza are not strong
enough to sustain the structure and then serve as a conclusion By composing the last two lines
first, youll save yourself time and energy and virtually guarantee a first draft.
Compose your final lines carefully so that each reads as a unit of thought or speech. (This will
make it easier to insert a line between them in the first stanza and to improvise in the middle
stanzas.) Then pick end words that generate many rhymes.
It is possible to write all different sorts of poems using the basic, fairly complex structure of
the villanelle. Think of something you tee! strongly about. Then write two lines that are
approximately the same length and that rhyme. These two can be your repeating lines, in
other words: lines A1 and A2. Once you have those two lines and you are happy with what they
say, then let your head and heart dance around with the other lines of the poems. Writing a
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villanelle is like working a jigsaw puzzle; you can move the lines around quite a bit until they
finally seem to fit, to make a kind of poetic sense.
ONE ART
The art of losing isnt hard to master;
so many things seemed filled with the intent
to be lost that their loss is no disaster.
Lose something every day. Accept the fluster
of lost door keys, the hour badly spent.
The art of losing isnt hard to master.
Then practice losing farther, losing faster
places, and names, and where it was you meant
to travel. None of these will bring disaster.
I lost my mothers watch. And look! my last, or
next-to-last, of three loved houses went.
The art of losing isnt hard to master.
I lost two cities, lovely ones. And, vaster,
some realms I owned, two rivers, a continent.
I miss them, but it wasnt a disaster.
Even losing you (the joking voice, a gesture
I love) I shant have lied. Its evident
the art of losings not too hard to master
though it may look like (Write it!) like disaster.
MIRANDAS SONGby W.H. Auden My Dear One is mine as mirrors are lonely,
And the high green hill sits always by the sea.
My Dear One is mine as mirrors are lonely,
As the poor and sad are real to the good king, ** **
And the high green hill sits always by the sea.
Villanelle by David Mayo (Grade 6) Light brings him from sleep, he gets up with a roll.
Wanting some food, he constructs a small snare.
Over a hill climbs a stumpy old troll, Over a hill climbs a stumpy old troll,
A breeze juggles his knotted hair,
Scribbling down what he sees in his scroll. He packs up his belongings, a nugget of gold
And some to use for the wooden bridge fare.
He lowers himself onto a grassy knoll Scribbling down what he sees in his scroll,
Staring out blankly, to see what is there
Over a hill climbs a stumpy old troll, He turns to go home, his trip almost whole,
He had a good time, he munches on a pear.
Night, it comes swiftly, he lights a fire with coal, Over a hill climbs a stumpy old troll,
Using some flint, out emerges a flare, Scribbling down what he sees in his scroll.
Scribbling down what he sees in his scroll.
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VILLANELLE TEMPLATE Start with two strong lines that rhyme. Write them below as:
a1_________________________________________________________
a2_________________________________________________________
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Fill them in the appropriate lines marked a1 and a2. These lines repeat in a fixed order. Now complete
the poem with lines that rhyme with a rhyme where marked or end in a different rhyme b. Or with
the same rhyme (this is more difficult).Remember Poem title________________________
a1_____________________________________________________________________
b_____________________________________________________________________
a2_____________________________________________________________________
a _____________________________________________________________________
b______________________________________________________________________
a1_____________________________________________________________________
a ______________________________________________________________________
b______________________________________________________________________
a2_____________________________________________________________________
a _____________________________________________________________________
b_____________________________________________________________________
a1____________________________________________________________________
a _____________________________________________________________________
b_____________________________________________________________________
a2____________________________________________________________________
a _____________________________________________________________________
b_____________________________________________________________________
a1_____________________________________________________________________
a2______________________________________________________________________
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SESTINA
Sestina is a French form. The word means six. The sestina contains six stanzas of six lines each and
a final stanza of three lines. The six end words may or may not rhyme, but they repeat in a fixed
pattern in 6 stanzas. The end stanza uses all 6 words in 3 lines in a fixed order.
CHOICES by Hilary Tham
For sins of negation and aborted chance
we toss and burn, sleepless in the dark
for lives we uprooted before they could take.
We could have been kind to the living
child with grandmothers face, now dead,
plucked from seeds of other faces ready to fall.
Write a sentence that has meaning for you. Select 6 words from the sentence that are interesting to you
and that may have more than one meaning or usage. Number the words 1 6. Now place the words at
the end of the lines as shown.. word 1 on all the lines marked 1, word 2 on lines marked word 2 and so
on.
1 _______________________________________________(word 1)
2 _______________________________________________(word 2)
3 _______________________________________________(word 3)
4________________________________________________(word 4)
5________________________________________________(word 5)
6________________________________________________(word 6)
6 _______________________________________________(word 6)
1 _______________________________________________(word 1)
5 _______________________________________________(word 5)
2________________________________________________(word 2)
4________________________________________________(word 4)
3________________________________________________(word 3)
3 ________________________________________________(word 3)
6 ________________________________________________(word 6)
4 ________________________________________________(word 4)
1_________________________________________________(word 1)
2_________________________________________________(word 2)
5_________________________________________________(word 5)
5 ________________________________________________(word 5)
3 ________________________________________________(word 3)
2 ________________________________________________(word 2)
6_________________________________________________(word 6)
1_________________________________________________(word 1)
4_________________________________________________(word 4)
4 ________________________________________________(word 4)
5 ________________________________________________(word 5)
1 ________________________________________________(word 1)
3_________________________________________________(word 3)
6_________________________________________________(word 6)
2_________________________________________________(word 2)
2 ________________________________________________(word 2)
4 ________________________________________________(word 4)
6 ________________________________________________(word 6)
5_________________________________________________(word 5)
3_________________________________________________(word 3)
1_________________________________________________(word 1)
1 ____(word 1)_________2_____(word 2)________________________
3 ______(word 3)____________4______(word 4)_______________________
5 ______(word 5)____________6________(word 6)_____________________
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NESTING RHYMES
Take a word (of three or more syllables) write it on the blackboard and have students brainstorm what
other words come to mind or may be found as anagrams in the word, e.g. EMOTION, MOTION,
OCEAN, SHUN. or AGGRAVATION, GRAVEL, RAVEL, RAVE, AVE in descending syllabic run.
THEN write a poem using those words for a poem that is rich is assonance. The point of this exercise
is to take the mind from normal patterns of thinking or following an idea along logical paths. This way,
you make strange and fun leaps to other words that are nested inside the big word. They can reverse
the order in the poem so they go from simple one syllable word to that big word. Like ask, raid, rude,
mosque, made, quad, masquerade. Clincher is tell them the poem does not have to make sense for this
exercise.
Variation: Challenge them to write a 12 line poem, 4 stanzas of 3 lines each. Each stanza uses a
diminishing rhyme. e.g. stanza one, the first line would end with the word obtrude, the second line end
with rude, and the third line end with rue. Stanza 2 would use another nesting rhyme set: its lines
would end in 1)learn, 2)earn, 3)ear.
More ambitious students could use the same ONE nesting rhyme for all four stanzas.
Example: Nesting rhyme: - vagrant grant rant ran - ant
Sample poem:
Walking without care, I saw this vagrant
On the corner of Fourth and Grant
and ran when he began to rant
Gimme an ant, gimme an ant!
List these on board as examples of possible nesting rhymes to use and have them do a practice run on
the blackboard of their own nesting rhymes.
Disappear apple - pear ear
engine nine gin in
quaver aver- ave
gravel ravel rave grave lave
prayer pray pay rare
seasoning season sea son
reverberate berate revere rate - ever bear be
kaleidoscope scope code kale slide cope cop
bramble ramble ram ROM
charmer harm arm
engagement gage age mage
scaffold scoff scold - fold old
scatter cater scat sat cat
intertwine tine twine wine wire tire inert
cockatrice rice- ice
incandescent descent scent cant cane Cain
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REQUIREMENTS FOR AN A
a very colorful, well-decorated cover including title and author name
colorful illustrations throughout the book folder
a neat, accurate Table of Contents including titles of all poems and page numbers
10 poems
REQUIREMENTS FOR AN B
colorful, decorated cover including title and author name
colorful illustrations throughout the book folder
neat Table of Contents
8 poems
REQUIREMENTS FOR AN C
cover includes title and author name
some illustrations with color
Table of Contents present
6 poems
REQUIREMENTS FOR AN D
Partial completion of the requirements for a C
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ADDITIONAL RESOURCES
POETRY SITES: these sites offer poetry texts.
Bartelby.com Great Books Online
www.bartleby.com/verse/
The Poetry Archive at eMule.com
www.emule.com/poetry/index.cgi
Everypoet.com
www.everypoet.com/index.htm
Representing Poetry Online
www.library.utoronto.ca/utel/rp/intro.html
The Academy of American Poets
www.poets.org
Contemporary Poetry at About.com
www.poetry.about.com/arts/poetry/
American Verse Project
www.hti.umich.edu/cgo/a/amverse-idx?page=bibl
ADDITIONAL RESOURCES
BOOKS:
1. Kenneth Koch: Wishes, Lies, and Dreams: Teaching Children to Write Poetry , Harper &
Row, New York, 1980
2. Kenneth Koch: Rose, Where Did You Get that Red? Teaching Great Poetry to Children ,
Vintage Books, New York, 1974
3. Kenneth Koch & Kate Farrell: Sleeping on the Wing: An Anthology of Modern Poetry with
Essays on Reading and Writing which is an anthology of poems with suggestions on writing
exercises triggered by them- eg he has suggestion on Ways to look at an orange, et al from
Steven's Thirteen Ways to look at a Blackbird.
4. Karin Faulkner et, Ed. The Boy Who Heard A Voice, California Poets in the Schools 1989
Anthology- has essays by poets-in-the schools on their best methods.
5. Audrey Brainard & Denise Wrubel: Literature-Based Science Activities: an integrated
approach, Grades K-3, Scholastic Inc. 1993 Has hands on activities to springboard writing
activities. (You have to think up the writing activity).
6. Ron Padgett, Ed., The Teachers & Writers HANDBOOK of POETIC FORMS, Teachers &
Writers Collaborative, New York. 1987
7. Nikki Moustaki: The COMPLETE IDIOT's GUIDE to Writing Poetry - fun to read and good
for generating ideas for workshops., Alpha Books 2001
8. Lavonne Mueller/Jerry D. Reynolds: CREATIVE WRITING: Forms & Techniques, NTC
1990-- again good place for fun ideas/ things to get kids turned on to writing.
9. The Scholastic RHYMING DICTIONARY: this is a good book as a resource in the
workshop for most kids love to rhyme and I like to allow them to use rhyme judiciously-- and
stress the importance of restraint in rhyme, unless it is a nonsense poem, which is another
form to enable kids to enjoy creative writing.
10. Mary O'Neill: Hailstones and Halibut Bones, Doubleday, 1989 - 12 wonderful poems
about the colors. Good example resource for color poems.