Masters of Copywriting
Masters of Copywriting
Masters of Copywriting
COPYWRITING
A Complete Course on The Principles and Practice of
Writing Advertising and Direct Mail Copy That Sells
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PREFACE ........................................................................ 11
The Editor
INTRODUCTION .............................................................. 13
J. George Frederick
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the readers will agree with him that the book is not only practically
helpful in the study of copy, but is also historically important, as it
collects and conserves the writings of the men who have made
history in advertising writing.
THE EDITOR.
INTRODUCTION
The History of Advertising Writing
By J. George Frederick
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the Babylonian gently sets his clay tablet into an oven and bakes
it. On the morrow he will send a runner with it to some distant
points along the Euphrates. It contains a statement of what cattle
and feed his employer (I almost said his client) has for sale, and at
what prices. He is the first hired advertising man. I have in my
possession this very clay tablet or its prototype.
Again we spread wings and let a dozen or two of centuries slip
under our feet, and we are in Thebes, Egypt, about 1100 B. C. An
austere Egyptian aristocrat is dictating to his amanuensis a
statement that he will offer a reward for the return of a valuable
slave who has run away. The amanuensis is writing this ad upon
papyrus. It will probably be hung up in public. You can see the
original in the British Museum today. Papyrus is the first dim hint
of the newsprint and the other members of the paper family upon
which millions of ads are to be printed 3,000 years later.
Gently we let time glide us forward until we find ourselves in
Greece and Rome. Both these great peoples, from whom we have
borrowed so much else that has ennobled and enriched our
heritage, were very familiar indeed with advertising. There must
have been something of a profession of advertising then, for the
walls of Pompeii and Herculaneum, which are visible today, were
crowded full of announcements painted in black and red. The
things advertised were plays, exhibitions, gladiatorial shows, salt-
and fresh-water baths. Bills termed libelli were the media of news
of sales of estates, lost and found articles, absconded debtors, etc.
Police regulations were given to the public via such
advertisements; and some were permanently cut in stone and terra
cotta relief, set in pilasters decorating the front of public buildings.
Even the ancient Greeks had the criera most important
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reasonhe had the advertising stage all to himself, and the law of
contrast gave him 100% advantage. I get all the money I can lay
my hands on and throw it out to the newspaper, he said, and
before I get back to my office there it all is again, and a lot more
with it ! Bonners instinct for publicity was like Barnums; he
was a great showman. His paper, which Godkin satirically said
was filled with tales of The Demon Cabman, The Maidens
Revenge and other low and coarse material, got Edward
Everett to write for itEverett, ex-president of Harvard, ex-
ambassador, exquisite stylist and scholar! It made a sensation.
Now for the paradox: although Bonner used advertising with
great success, nobody else did; and his Ledger, which was the
Cosmopolitan or the Saturday Evening Post of the day, never
carried a single ad! There were no business houses which
considered its space valuable. The magazines of the period were
so completely without advertising patronage that George P.
Rowell, founder of Printers Ink, once became the owner of the
outside cover page of Our Young Folks for a year, but even he
could not dispose of it, so he used it himself.
The truth is, advertising was looked down upon, not only by the
public, but by business men. Not only was it unvalued; it was
actually an object of contempt. It is amusing today to note the airs
put on by The Chicago Magazine, for instance, before the Civil
War. It frankly announced that its editorial plans were to
daguerreotype leading citizens in nearby towns (a little graft
game we know how to smile at today); yet it was able to say in the
same issue, we respond to the wish of a contemporary that we
might be able to dispense with advertising, but at present the law
of necessity must overrule the law of taste. If Chicago felt that
way, it may be imagined how Boston and Philadelphia felt.
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took up the cry and began a crusade with almost religious fervor.
For ten years this fight waged, vigilance committees being
organized to take action, and legislative efforts undertaken to
secure passage of the Printers Ink model statute against
fraudulent and misleading advertising. To-day practically all states
have adequate laws, and there exists a large and well-organized
machine, composed of the Better Business Bureaus, for the work
not only of stamping out fraudulent advertising, but of offering
constructive guidance in disputed or dubious matters of
advertising representation.
Meantime the technique of copy grew in vision and outlook as
more and more money was used in application of the advertising
method. Advertising became less a mere matter of copy and media
and more a coordination of practical sales-management and the
closer analysis of conditions of distribution and consumption.
Arm chair copy-writing gave way to market survey-built copy.
Intuitive insight into the public mind began to be supplemented by
research-backed judgments of consumer-reactions. Particularly so
after a period of five or six years of rather unsatisfactory flirting
with the science of psychology as a guide to copy. A body of very
valuable knowledge was turned up by the interest in psychology as
it relates to advertising, especially the contribution of Prof. H. L.
Hollingsworth of Columbia University, and Walter Dill Scott, now
President of Northwestern University. But the application of
psychological knowledge was limited to those who could grasp the
subject, and still further to those with minds able to apply its broad
generalizations practically and wisely. The need was so much
greater for knowledge of practical economic factors in the field
that more attention began to be paid to research, a factor now
bulking very large and permanently in matters of copy preparation.
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Copy is the soul of advertising. Picture and type may appeal
to instincts, to the senses, but copy has no other entry-way into
the reader except through his or her intelligence. And yet copy
is more potent perhaps than type or picture to reach, if
desired, either instincts or senses, for language has power to
create an infinitely greater variety of images, symbols and
associations than
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not only for the consumers, but also for the retailers, since a
research in a western state has disclosed that 75% of retailers are,
as yet, unconvinced of the value of advertising. These less
progressive retailerswhose information on any subject is
limitedare, in many instances, for selfish reasons telling the
public that advertised goods cost more, in order that they may
persuade customers to buy goods of low quality and irresponsible
manufacture, with a high percentage of profit to retailers. The
public sees evidences of large advertising expenditure, but is not
aware of the rearrangement of selling method which advertising
represents, with a resulting lower unit sales cost on an increased
volume not possible to secure, except through advertising.
On top of this, we have the propaganda of radicals,
malcontents, social theorists and the half-educated, who
deliberately argue that advertising is an economic waste; that it
plays on human weakness; that the public should be shielded
from the wiles of the advertising writer.
Such a thesis deserves to be analyzed, for advertising writers,
like any modern professional men, wish to feel certain that they
are rendering a public service; that their work is fundamentally
sound.
Years ago a brilliant New Yorker, William M. Ivins, aided and
abetted by some choice spirits of the time, schemed out a plan to
test human credulity. The famous Madame Blavatsky was the
resulta fictitious, invented personality. The public was found to
be gullible, all right; but gullible as Barnum had found it gullible;
that is, for the things it desired and enjoyed, and fairly quick to
discover when it was being bunked.
In 1924 the new President of the New York Stock Exchange
said that the American investing public was the most gullible in
the world. In view of the three to five
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a very clear statement of the great need now all over the world for
increasing living standards up to the level of production capacity:
T. HARRY THOMPSON.
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Advertising Copy and the Writer
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to take it away from him. I once, and only once, had an experience
of this kind myself. He was a remote relative of the head of the
house and his ability was also relative and remote. It should be
added, in extenuation, that his congenital malignity had recently
been aggravated by the hysteria of a belated honeymoon. At any
rate, he decided to prepare a Christmas advertisement, for which
he stole the sampler idea of a prominent candy concern and then
dragged in the Deity to sell Grand Rapids furniture and linoleums.
Some people think they want an advertising man when all that
they really want is an audience.
There is, of course, a vast difference between being suppliant
and being pliant. A tactful man can concede a comma and achieve
a page. It is just as foolish and fatal for an advertising man to be
overly stubborn as it is for him to surrender his individuality.
Some months ago the advertising man for a client of mine sent me
a booklet he had written and asked me to go over it. I deleted three
paragraphs, but did not add or change a line of the remainder. It is
always easy to improve another mans work. But the revision did
seem to be desirable. I sent it back and received a very peevish
letter objecting to such liberal cutting. So I called him on the
telephone and said: Did you ever see Hamlet ?" He said: Yes,
what about it ?" I said: Well, every time they play Hamlet they
cut half of it out. And if Shakespeare can stand it, so can you.
Still another of our weaknesses is sensitiveness to criticism from
those who cannot or do not write themselves. It is absurd to
contend that those who cannot produce an advertisement are
incompetent to condemn it. You might just as well say that a man
has no right to condemn an omelet because he cannot lay eggs.
Criticism, if it is at all intelligent, is an invaluable aid in avoiding
it! And a wise man
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design his own house, conduct his own case in court or treat his
own influenza is because his time is valuable, his mind is bur-
dened with weighty things, and the doctor or lawyer, with proper
coaching, can carry out his ideas almost as well as he could do it
himself.
vanity, our taste, our sense of luxury, our desire for happiness, and
it touches our pocketbook.
Tell the story of your goods believing that it is the most
interesting thing in the world. Then perhaps you can make it so.
Dont try to sneak the facts about your business into the public
consciousness by a surreptitious hypodermic injection. Come out
with them face to face. Tell the people what youve got, why you
can serve them, what it costs and ask for their trade.
Advertising is news.
It will be a great day for advertising when men see it in a large
way and stop taking a part of it for the whole. When they
understand that the vital parts of advertising are the things that go
with it and that advertising is a moral force and not a mechanical
toy.
Rule twisting and type sticking and stamp licking and space
measuring all have their place and their value. I do not depreciate
them when I say that they should not be permitted to obscure the
view.
Mechanical details have a great fascination for most minds,
especially the mathematical American mind. The average business
imagination does not rise much higher than it can travel in a
passenger elevator.
An increasing number of men refuse to believe in all but the
things they can touch and see, and it is perhaps natural they should
dwell upon the material, obvious aspects of the subject and miss
the soul in the machine.
Advertisers pay for space, buy cuts and copy, set the wheels in
motion and stand by to see them run. If the things desired do not
promptly happen it is plainly the fault of the agent or publisher,
and they begin to tear things to pieces like a child that wrecks a
toy because he lacks the intelligence to make it work.
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It may seem that I dwell with tiresome iteration upon this phase
of the subject. But there is not a week in the year when some
business man does not get me in a corner and pour out his woes
thousands of dollars spent and no adequate results. Best media,
good copy perhaps, and repliesbut no effect on the business.
Selling expenses only increased by the addition of the advertising
appropriation. Salesmen squeezing the house and sacrificing
everything to their customers. High anticipations, great fun and
excitement at first, but the novelty is wearing off.
What shall he do? Discharge his advertising man? Change his
agent and quit the publishers? A friend has told him to spend his
money in the street cars.
Then follows a long cross-examination as to the general
conduct of the business. The man grows reticent and suspicious at
deep, researching questions he considers utterly irrelevant. He
listens absently and says, Now to get back to advertising. When
he is told that all this is the advertising, he does not comprehend.
A man in an allied line told me the other day that he was
conducting a campaign by using all of my literature, worked over
for his business. When I said that I considered the best part of my
value was in work which he did not see, he was at a loss whether
to distrust me or to resent being cheated out of his just dues.
We need less tinkering in advertising and more use of the
merchandising brain which builds copy on the well engineered
steel framework of field facts.
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Human Appeals in Copy
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It was short and simple. But this is the interesting fact. Marie
riding to her death on that quarter of a page pulled eight times as
many coupons as we had ever got from one of these fine, full
pages on the glory and splendor of owning fine books.
It was my first vivid lesson that a little touch of human interest,
a little of the common tragedy or hope or love or success or
affection that runs through all our lives will out-pull what may be
technically a very much better advertisement, but which lacks that
human touch which makes the whole world kin.
hopes that are the common lot of the people to whom you write.
I once had to talk before a university class about writing short
stories. I was editing a magazine at that time. I said, If a writer is
going to be successful he should share the common experiences of
the people for whom he writes. Writers should get married; writers
should have children; if they are unfortunate enough to have
wealthy parents, they ought to refuse to have any help from their
parents; they should pay for a home, take out insurance, have
disappointments, struggles, hopes, ambitions, fears, take on the
mold and character of the people whom they address, and, living
their lives, be able to interpret to them their own thoughts. That is
pretty obvious, but it seems to me essential. In our offices, we are
somewhat removed from the struggles and experiences of common
life, and we must work to keep our contacts keen and fresh. That, I
think, is the first thing.
The second thing, which is equally obvious, is that the little age
in which we live is merely a drop in the great river of eternity, and
we can very much extend our contacts if we admit to the circle of
our friendships the great spirits that have lived in other times.
I got to reading biographies when I was in high school and have
continued ever since. For those of us who are writing and seeking
to influence human minds, there is a wealth of help in this contact
with the great human beings of other ages.
They have a funny story in our office to the effect that when we
take a man in to write advertising copy, I give him a copy of the
New Testament. That is untrue (factually and by implication)
factually, because I
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FirstBrevity
SecondSimplicity
ThirdSincerity
Speaking loosely, there have been and are in America only two
types of copy analysis and prospectus which by
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The very fact, however, that it is the human mind, in the last
essence, which must be subjected to dissection before a formula
can be evolved, indicates the hazard involved in any individual
attempt to erect a formula even distantly assuming infallibility.
The truth of the matter is, that any such attempt smacks of
vanity and, therefore, of narrowness, and in some cases has its
origin in a pure spirit of charlatanism.
Nevertheless, definiteness, precision, system and reasonable
assurance of results are the great desideratums in advertising, and
the pursuit of them should never be abandoned.
It is perfectly true that there are certain definite human
impulses, motives and reactions which can reasonably be counted
upon either in the individual or in the mass.
It is likewise perfectly true that men and women do
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great business would pass out of the price class into the quality
class.
I named the company which it would oust from first position in
the quality class and said that, if we all worked together, the
transition would be complete within eighteen months.
It was complete in less than a yearthe business did pass out of
the price class into the quality class, and the other business was
ousted from its preferential position.
In this instance again, public opinion was led and influenced by
suggestive copy, which had for its purpose the creation of
favorable public opinion. Within a year, the advertiser had the
reputation for honesty, quality and sincerity, and naturally the
public gave his product the preference.
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Now, what are the words that make this passage alluring?
Haven, reckless profusion, magic laundry, celestial
invention, classic are words charged more with emotion than
logic. Ask any hotel proprietor, for instance, if he does allow a
reckless profusion of clean linen.
Read John Galsworthys description of a pair of boots in his
story, Quality.
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puts the wonderful miracle of industry into the picture rather than
the hardships of labor as George Bellows might do. Persuasion is
born of pleasant association.
An advertisement should affect the reader with some of the
glowing zest that the works of Fabre, the naturalist, brought to
Maurice Maeterlinck. If we inject just a trifle of this intense
interest into our copy, the trite question of whether copy shall be
brief or lengthy will not be raised.
the grand manner, it is needful that it hold to its motif from initial
letter to the last period.
This, then, is the first requirement of style in an advertisement,
but style implies some other meanings, as well. In fact, J.
Middleton Murry draws three distinct definitions of the word style
as applied to writing: Style as a personal peculiarity; style as
technique of expression; style as the highest achievement of
literature. The difficulty attending these definitions is that they
melt one into the other.
When we speak of a certain writers style, we likely mean his
peculiar characteristics. John Corbin once reminded an actress
who imitated Mrs. Fiske that the gyrations of the sibyl are not the
secret of the sibyls inspiration. I think that these personal qualities
are almost wholly a matter of inborn genius and should not
concern one who is endeavoring to help others attain style in
writing. One seems to have personal style or not. Originality is the
rarest gem and cannot be simulated.
Artistically, I am sure, there is no such thing as imitation. There
is only parody. When writing advertising literature, profit by the
example of others, but do not copy their peculiarities of style and
construction. If you are a writer, a craftsman with words, you will
have a style of your own.
The imitations which make Cecilia Loftus famous are other
characters seen through the camera of Miss Loftus. When the
clever Cecilia imitates Mrs. Patrick Campbell, it is her
interpretation of the other actress just as definitely as a photograph
of a subject by Alfred Stieglitz represents his own ideas of the
model which will differ radically from those of Pine MacDonald.
Take, for example, Louis Untermeyers Parodies of Poets. They
are neither imitations nor burlesque, as he himself has said.
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Some Lessons I Have Learned in Advertising
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for a product which once was free. But buying the product and
paying the price in order that one may try it impresses the
recipient. The product must be excellent, else you never would do
that.
My next lesson in advertising was learned at the age of twenty.
I was writing ads for numerous retail dealers. Aluminum ware was
just coming into vogue. I specialized on it because I felt that every
home should have it, and few homes were supplied.
I found that ads inviting women to an aluminum display
brought few responses and the cost was high. But when I offered a
souvenir on a certain day I got quick action, and the saving in cost
per visitor paid for the souvenir some twenty times over. I
supplied that plan to aluminum dealers everywhere and thus made
my first success in advertising. Then I applied it to other lines, and
developed in that way a large retail clientele.
I have used that idea in countless lines since then. Instead of
saying to women Come any time, I set a certain hour or day or
week. I print in the ad a reminder for the woman to cut out. That is
so she wont forget. To insure inspection of my product I offer
some gift or inducement. That reduces my cost per visitor. Thus I
get prompt action and decision at minimum expense.
Later I found that I could quadruple results by not telling what
the souvenir was. Curiosity is a greater pulling factor than a gift.
About the same time I learned another great lesson. That is, not
to talk mechanics to a woman. I was selling carpet sweepers, but
not selling very many. Under pressure from the management I was
talking broom action, cyco bearings, patent dumping devices, etc.
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Then I went out on the road with a sample sweeper and a bag of
bran. I went into stores and showed women customers how the
sweeper swept up bran. I taught dealers and their clerks to make
like demonstrations, then went back to my office and taught them
by mail. Then carpet sweepers began to sell.
I enlarged on the plan by offering special exhibits. I had the
sweepers built in peculiar or rare woods. Or I had them built
twelve woods to the dozen to make a forestry exhibit. I furnished
circulars for dealers to put in their packages, inviting women to
see an exhibit which would never appear again. Sales multiplied
over and over. My methods brought me reputation, and I received
numerous offers to enter wider fields.
Since then I have never discussed mechanics with women. I
have used very little logic. I have brought them to see what my
product would do in some interesting manner.
My next lesson was learned in the advertising of a vegetable
shortening. I made very slow progress in merely talking that
shortening against lard. I saw in a few weeks that I would lose my
job before I won a profit. So I built in a department store in
Chicago the largest cake in the world. It was made with this
shortening. I advertised it like a circus and brought one hundred
thousand women in one week to see it. I served them samples.
Then I offered premiums to those who would buy that day.
The plan was a tremendous success. The shortening was placed
on a profit-paying basis in one week. Then I built a like cake in the
leading stores of a hundred cities and made the product a nation-
wide success.
That saved my job, gave me added reputation, and taught me to
dramatize my subjects when I could.
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years so far. That is why I have been trusted with the expenditure
of $60,000,000. I limited losses. The mistakes I made cost little.
The successes made fortunes without risk.
With advertising ventures and advertising men the fatalities are
enormous. Nearly all the stars of advertising have perished before
their prime. I believe that all of my early contemporaries are out of
the field today. Many were brilliant men, but they made the mis-
take of working in the dark. They had no compass, so they landed
on the rocks.
Others were claiming low prices and low profits. I came out
with a headline, Our Profit is 9 Per Cent. I told the exact cost of
engine, chassis, wheels, tires, etc. I cited exact costs of $762 on a
$1,500 car, without mentioning body, top or un-holstery the
things most conspicuous in a car.
The success of that campaign taught me to be exact. When we
claim the best or the cheapest, people smile. That is advertising
license. But when we state figures, they are either true or untrue,
and people do not expect a reputable concern to lie. They accept
the figures at par. Ever since then, whenever possible, I have
stated my facts in figures.
In other ways I learned the fearful cost of changing peoples
habits. One was in a campaign on oatmeal, another on a dentifrice.
I tried to induce more people to eat oats, and I found that the cost
of winning new users was vastly beyond any possible returns. I
tried to convert new users to the tooth brush habit. As nearly as I
could figure, the cost was $25 per convert. If all converts used our
tooth paste all their lives we could scarcely get the money back.
So I quit that. I am letting others convert people to new habits. I
simply try to get them, when they are converted, to use my type of
product. Since I learned that lesson, I have spent millions of
dollars in advertising oatmeal and tooth pastes. But I have never
used one line, one word, to win people to a habit they have not as
yet adopted.
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dollars and upon its true direction depends the growth of so large a
number of splendid business enterprises, that its wrong use, its
careless use, is unpardonable.
It must not be supposed that advertising men are alone
responsible for this. The fault is quite frequently with the
advertisers themselves, and this makes the task of the average
advertising man, from the very beginning, the more difficult, and
is quite likely to lead him into wrong conclusions that will later
affect his worth.
It is too commonly believed that success is a faculty in itself
rather than the possible product of some one or two faculties quite
individual and distinct. A man may be a great organizer, and
through this develop a fine business, reach a high position, and
achieve a high situation. In this particular place, he may have the
direction of the expenditure of large sums of money for advertis-
ing. But is he qualified?
The genius for organization characterized both Washington and
Napoleon. They had, of course, additional great abilities. Some
men have one ability; others two; and some, many. Washington
and Napoleon both believed in relying upon their generals. They
picked out the best men they could find and then entrusted
important movements to them, exercising their own ingenuity and
time for further combinations and for judgment when it was most
needed.
Such a man, too, was General Grant. In the planning of his
campaign, he employed the forces at his command with full
reliance upon their strength and availability.
On the other hand, some of the princes and generals opposed to
Napoleon trusted none but themselves, and, as a result, they were
most of the time in confusion. One of the great failures of the
American Revolution was General Gates who trusted no one, not
even Washington.
Now there are advertising managers and advertisers
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who cannot trust the best generals they employ, and hence their
plans of campaign oft go astray and work out poorly. There are
menand it has been my privilege to work with some of them
who have several qualities of success besides leadershipin some
instances, being possessed of a thorough knowledge of human
nature in the main, as well as in the individual. These men have
generally very good reasons for their criticisms of advertising and
their constructive suggestions. But a great many advertisers, on the
other hand, assume that because they have been successful in
business, they are also first-class judges of advertising and
advertising phraseology and method. Being in power, they give
orders, regardless, overwhelm all suggestion and carry things with
a high hand. Sometimes this wins out, because of its very sin-
cerity. But too often, we can read in expensive pages of
advertising snap judgment.
To avoid this seems like a very simple matter, indeed, but this
simplicity is what makes it difficult of achievement, because it
hardly seems worthwhile being natural and sincere, when so much
stress and importance are placed upon the brilliant, and the un-
usualthe bizarre in advertising.
Now, if the reader agrees with this premise, let us go along a
little further into deduction.
First of all, let us induce in the advertiser, if we can, a sensible,
frank, thoughtful mood. He has a story to tell about his product.
He believes in it. If he thinks it is somewhat better than another, or
than the general run, there must be a reason for this beyond the
mere idea that the wish is father to the thought.
A lot of us wish that we were brilliant, and wonderful, and
leaders of men, and that, being manufacturers, our products were
unequaled in their character and value, of great use to the world
and something to be proud of. But there must be something more
than wishing. There must be reasonsreal ones.
This is not a plea for reason why copy in advertising. By
reason why copy we mean the argumentative, explanatory style
of advertising which begins at the beginning and after a
considerable period, winds up at the end.
There is a time and a place for the reason why of advertising.
The public will not stand a whole lot of it, as a rule, because they
have their ups and downs and their own affairs, and they are not
to be intrigued by a long dissertation written from the standpoint
of the manufacturer.
When an article is of sufficient importance and its differentness
is easily understood or explained, reason why occasionally is
good.
But reason why in the product itself is really necessary to
success.
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plays a large part. Advertising cast like bread upon the waters
may return, but along with advertising today should really go the
motive power of good selling methods. Advertising is used not
only to influence the consumer but to influence the trade,
beginning with the advertisers own organization.
There are various ways of doing this, and too many of them
have fallen into the rubber-stamp class.
What will be proper and right and helpful for one manufacturer
might fall far short with another.
It is dangerous to assume that all house organs, and all follow
ups, all circularizing matter, all sales conventions, all direct-mail
efforts, will get results of equal value. Some of them reap a harvest
of money, and others over-emphasize one side or the other in a
way which is likely to rock the boat.
Here, too, being sincere and natural with ones own salesmen,
organization, and retailers, is wise. Dont try to hand bunk to the
salesman. Thats the way they put it. An ounce of horse sense will
get more genuine enthusiasm out of a salesman than any quantity
of theoretical hot air.
necessary that women writers should handle this, because there are
men who know exactly the way to phrase a story or to follow it up
in order to obtain the right results.
But the right style appeals to women, and fashion and vogue
have much greater sway over them than substantiality and long
wear.
Good advertising will put the urge into the prospective buyers
mind rather than merely give it utterance in the language of the
advertiser. The best style technique is the telling of a true story
attractively and in terms of the readers understanding and
sympathy, and in being sincere rather than smart; consistent rather
than clever.
Furthermore, the use of more verbs in advertising and of fewer
adjectives and nouns would be a blessing. Let advertising
represent action from the reader's viewpoint rather than adulation
from the advertisers.
Remember that generalities are cheap and can be picked up
with no effort. It is the specific that calls for digging and is hardest
to obtain.
Remember that no advertisement can be properly written unless
the man who writes it has a real interest in writing itthe pride of
creation, the pride of service, or the pride of knowledge.
He should be inclined towards advertising work, or he will
never be successful; he should be glad to render service which is
helpful not only to the advertiser, but to the purchaser of the
article. Advertising based on selling
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today competes with the best writingnot the most fanciful but
the best writing.
Given naturalness and sincerity, a wide acquaintance with the
various methods of presenting facts or conclusions is a necessary
corollary.
The broadening of vocabulary is an excellent thing, not because
this means that the advertisement writer should use big words, but
that he should use the right words. An advertisement should be a
mosaic of properly fitted pieces, not a thrown-together thing filled
in by the plaster of phraseology.
Broad reading is necessary to the accomplishment of right
phraseology. Advertising plays an important part in life, and a
knowledge of life, of character, of the various reactions of events
upon character and peoples, is of great value.
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Nature of business.
Proposition you wish to push (give details as fully as
possible).
Description (if some specific article, describe fully).
How long has article been on the market?
How, when and where did the marketing of this product
start?
How put up?
Do you sell the wholesaler?
When does he buy?
In what quantity?
Prices and discounts to wholesalers.
Do you sell retailers direct? In what quantity?
When does retailer buy?
Prices and discounts to retailer.
Do you sell consumer direct? In what quantity?
When does consumer buy?
Prices and discounts to consumer?
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(5) Has the copy writer studied and balanced and rotated
suitably the fundamental consumer appeals inherent in the
particular article in hand?
(6) Have the advertisements been laid out with the right tone
and atmosphere for the article?
(7) Has the series of advertisements been carefully coordinated
one with the other, in relation to the proper importance to be given
to all considerations?
(8) Has the relative display position of the headline and
outstanding features been calculated so that the large percentage of
readers who merely glance through a magazine may catch
something as they run which will be of value and may lead to
either arrest of attention or the fixation of a name or an idea?
(9) Does the close of the advertisement give all the necessary
facts and stimulate thought to get the reader to do what you finally
wish him to do upon finishing the ad?
(10) Has each single advertisement been constructed upon the
basis of unity of effect, both typographically and from the point of
view of contentits ideas and logic? Has the copy the right
ring? Is the English used checked over for double meanings,
confusion, error, etc.?
Finally, has the copy been checked by the proper authorities,
O.K.d by them, and have all necessary corrections and
instructions been provided for it?
each appeal the article has. The average firm knows only in a
rough way the relative strength of its appeals; why not analyze
them accurately and fully?
The usual range of appeals for a product is made up of
combinations in various degrees of strength of about the
following:
(1) Price; (7) Recommendation;
(2) Utility; (8) Taste;
(3) Convenience; (9) Economy of use;
(4) Appearance; (10) Prompt availability;
(5) Service; (11) Reputation and familiarity
(6) Reliability; (12) Advertising.
It has been proven over and over again that salesmen will select
their own ideas of the strongest appeals, or insist that the appeal
varies in strength according to the prospect he is talking to. They
are often encouraged to do this; but it is also proven that there is
always one fundamentally strongest appeal which is wisest to
stress to practically all prospects, and through all salesmen and
advertising. In other words, an analysis for any given product will
show that certain appeals are supreme; that for a certain article
appearance may be 6o%; reliability 20% and recommendation
20%, and for another product the appeal may bear some other
ratio.
It is, therefore, not theoretical, but highly practical to make a
searching analysis of the appeals for a product, so that they can be
rated accurately. It makes the sales manual more definite and
valuable; it is of immense value and importance to the advertising
manager and agent, and it permits the writing of copy that strikes
far closer to the bulls eye in results.
The analysis should, of course, also be extended to the
wrapping of an articleto the shape, size, color and general
appearance of the article as it will look in the
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Analyzing Media
are not getting from advertisers the attention they deserve could
not hope for anything more blessed than a greater realization of
this fundamental principle in medium selection. We would then
see some of the super-inflated media lose their large and often not
wholly deserved mass of advertising, and we would witness a
more logical distribution based upon clear analysis of media.
It is wearisomevery especially so to a man who has been in
the advertising business a long time, as I have to hear over and
over again each year the same old debates as to the relative merits
of different types and classes of media. It is all the question of a
merchandising situation, the strategy of the campaign and the type
of article, state of distribution, etc. To one thoroughly versed in
merchandising tactics it is not alone wearisome, but more or less
dishonest to glorify or over-emphasize one type of media over
another, because it indicates a woeful lack of study and analysis of
the advertisers problems.
The president of one of the most brilliant companies in the
United States, a man who has raced up his sales in half a dozen
years from half a million to fifteen million dollars annually, has as
fixed and definite a policy regarding media as an engineer has
measurements and rules of orientation. He made his success by
working out a broad policy, selecting type of media adaptable to
his strategic policy, and these media made his proposition
successful. Many of his aping competitors do not today know any-
thing about the general policy behind the campaign. The president
of this company is a theorist on his subjectthat of newspaper
advertising on a zone basisand his analysis and his method of
linking up his advertising to his sales work have made him
successful in his plans. He therefore dogmatizes about his plan.
Yet
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out its reporters to gather the store news first hand. First hand
means at the source. The source of store news is the merchandise
and the merchandise chief who buys it. Efficient advertising
requires the writers personal examination of the merchandise and
the hearing of the story of its purchase directly from the lips of
the buyer who secured the merchandise in the wholesale market.
Every purchase has its storytell that story.
Merchandise is dumbuntil seen; then it speaks louder than
words. To bring people into the store to see the merchandiseto
speak for the merchandise until it can speak for itselfis the first
step in advertising.
Advertising must be fair to the merchandise as well as to the
people it invites into the store. Advertising must "square up" with
the merchandise and with the store.
To "square up" with the merchandise and with the store,
advertising must be accurate. To be accurate, advertising must be
truthful.
Advertising is as honest as the man who signs his name to it.
A store is as honest as its advertising.
Efficiency in advertising is impossible without honesty. But
honesty is possible without efficiency. Waste in advertising is the
natural result of dishonesty.
Honesty in business usually means life; dishonesty surely
means death.
Honesty in advertising is not a question of comparative prices
or comparative values. Honesty is never comparative nor relative.
Honesty is absoluteit means telling and living the truth, the
whole truth and nothing but the truth.
In advertising, as in everything else, the people are the Court of
Last Resort. The people soon begin to discount the statements of a
store that habitually exaggerates in its advertising.
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goods; but you could sit and choose media until you were black in
the face, and never move a boys express wagon full of toy
balloons. Mechanical departments help copy find favorable
expression; but the most meticulously symmetrical piece of
typography that ever lulled a roving eye will never turn a nickel,
unless it eases home a message some real copy writer has cut and
hammered until it means something very vital to every man who
reads it.
Copy, in one form or other, is the heart and soul of advertising.
Except as an aid to the preparation of copy, or to the extension of
copy after it has been prepared, everything else is more or less
meaningless. Much of the unnecessary complication in modern
advertising thought is due to straying away from that one simple
fundamental. If copy is good enough, it can succeed without a
dollar spent on anything except white space to print it in; if copy is
bad enough, the most elaborate merchandising and marketing
plans will only pile up the possibilities of failure.
This blunt truth will, I fear, run athwart many able men whose
generous conceptions of advertising have grown to embrace
everythingfrom finding an architect for the factory to placing
fair-haired boys behind the merchants sales counters.
You may remember an old story of the man who proposed to
trade his cow for his neighbors bicycle: Id look fine, wouldnt I,
trying to ride a cow? was the ungracious answer. Yes, returned
the proposer, but think how I would look trying to milk a
bicycle.
Respectfully I commend this primitive form of reasoning to any
who feel I unduly overestimate the importance of copy. On a
pinch, you can easily imagine an advertising campaignmail
order, for examplesimplified down to nothing but copy. But try
to think of an advertising campaign without copy!
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ness every day for a normal span of life and never get out of the
first alcove.
There must be a discrimination; hence there must be a basis for
discrimination and I submit that we automatically only read those
things which minister to our self-preservation through our need
for
Information
Beauty
Entertainment
you a lot of money. What are they getting now for a page in the
Saturday Evening Post? He may even ask how much money it
will cost and express a hope that it will pay you, but he will never
turn bright, expectant eyes and inquire what it is you are going to
say in your copy. He will not for an instant think of your going
out to buck Royal or advise with you as to the lessons that may
be learned from what Ryzon did and did not do.
The only people who will be in the least interested in what your
copy is to be or in the media you are going to use will be
advertising agencies and men who have space to sell, and they will
be interested for reasons that touch precisely upon the definition of
interest given in foregoing paragraphs. I will repeat the statement
that the public is entirely indifferent to what any advertiser is
going to say next week, next month or next year.
Your attention device catches the readers eye. This device may
be size, shape, picture or what not; now you want him to read and
to continue reading.
You must work entirely from his needs, his likes or his dislikes.
There is no drama, there is no interest in advertising that does not
have its roots in the need of some person for something, or in the
fact that the person likes or dislikes a certain thing or certain ways
of doing things.
The simple retail store copy says
and that is enough because they are addressing the woman who
needs shoes, who needs fashionable shoes, who likes gray sude
shoes she has seen, and whose foot may be large, small or
medium. It ignores the woman who hasnt $8.00. They will get her
next week when they reduce them to $5.95.
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There is news about your needs and all it has to do is to tell you
what it promises to tell you and so long as it is doing this a woman
with blankets to wash will read until her credulity is strained.
I noticed an advertisement today headed A Smiling Baby.
That headline was founded on one rule of human likes and dislikes
I referred to. We like smiling babies: we dont like crying babies.
For that reason I call it good.
The next precept to remember isPeople are not interested in a
one-sided pleading. They are willing to take sides; they are willing
to take your side if you raise an issue, but do not, in the guise of
argument, offer a contention against which there is no resistance.
it raises an issue.
If it is possible to get news value into your story, do it. It is
possible more often than you think. The reporter writes as though
the thing were taking place as he wrote it. Have you noticed that?
Their headlines say:
Always the present tense. Use it wherever you can and, above
all, write the thing you write as though nothing of the sort had ever
been written before. Keep in your own mind the illusion that you
are saying the thing for the first time. That will almost add news
value to the statement that the Eastman Kodak Company makes
camera films.
Keep constantly in mind your readers needs, his likes and
dislikes. Write about these things or not, as the situation may
require, but never let any other point dominate your conception of
the thing you are writing about.
Think of your goods as things which the reader needs, I never
as something you want to sell.
Just here it will be helpful to consider that all merchandise from
a copy point of view comes into one of these classes:
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Dont address your message to the thin air. Talk to real people.
Dont let familiarity with your subject lead you into technical
terms which the green reader doesnt understand.
Dont get discouraged when the ideas fail to flow. Keep on
trying. The happy thought may wake you up in the middle of the
night.
Dont exaggerateunless you are willing to plant mistrust.
Dont expect to get a fair-minded hearing, if you employ unfair
claims and phraseology.
Dont whine. State the facts and trust to the readers sound
judgment.
Dont figure that any product of itself makes a tame subject for
advertising copy. A good writer can put a thrill into the nebular
hypothesis.
Dont assume that people wont read long advertisements.
Rather admit to yourself I dont know how to be interesting.
Dont imagine that any combination of words will take the
place of a real thought.
Dont look down on Rhetoric textbooks. They hold many
valuable practical pointers on force, clearness and precision.
Dont fall back on the word best. Its a sign you are slipping.
Dont consider your job finished when you have brought out the
merits of the product. Make your reader like the Company which
offers it.
Dont convince your reader and leave him guessing at where he
can buy.
Dont lay too much stress on the value of a trade-mark figure.
By the time it gets established, it is liable to give a chestnut flavor
to the whole advertisement.
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finest chance, and the strongest urge, to put this deep feeling of
reality into these bits of writing we do about Things.
How significant things are to people! The peaty smell of Scotch
tweeds . . . the little shoe that a baby has worn . . . a pipe . . . an
armchair . . . a clock on a mantel . . . a vase that has held flowers .
. . the flowers she put there!
And isnt writingof which advertising is one departmentin
itself, one of the most marvelous gifts and powers? And dont the
sheep, the loaves, the cloth, the olive trees of life, the coats of
many colors, deserve as fine and as vivid and as effective writing-
about as will stir folks deeply?
Wont it be delightful when our every-day advertisements are
informed by this spirit of worth and charm, so that our magazines
and newspapers are dotted and gay with poetical allusions to the
furniture and fixings of life and the ways and means of fitting
them to our affairs?
Money, tooand the spending of itis a heart-throbbing
poetical affair. Ask mother. She knows.
Heres the little bit of money Dad brings home on Saturday
night. . . . To Mothers way of thinking, a dozen kindly enough,
but very hungry wolves are lying in wait for it . . . the Butcher, the
Baker, the Milkman, and all the other bandits. . . .
Seems to me I have to pay it all out as soon as it comes in!
she says. All the more reason, of course, why she feels the keenest
sense of responsibility that every purchase shall satisfy her wish
for the familys life-enrichment. Theres so little left over for
luxuries. And each luxury,if its only a pair of silk stockings, or
even a jar of marmalade,should have delight wrapped up with
the package. Shes just as keen to understand and
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It is our romantic aim, the job we give our waking hours to, that
when she enters the grocers, she may say without the slightest
degree of hesitancy:
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sizes. Nowadays that idea is pass, and the measure of woman and
her ankles and feet is no longer an indication to her character,
charm or beauty. The average size of womens feet these days is
5 or 6and no disgrace attached to it, either! Clementinas No.
9s do not disqualify her. You have heard the story of the shoe
clerk who lost a customer by saying: Madam, your left foot is
larger than the other; and the shoe clerk across the street who
gained that same customer by saying, instead, Madam, your right
foot is smaller than the other.
How about Miladys Averages bust size? America can hold up
her head proudly, for there are actually more perfect 36s than
any other size. Here is the inside dope: Size 34, 20%; 36, 30%;
38, 20%; 40, 15%; 42, 10% 44 to 48, 5%.
There is, of course, much truth in the fact that the Colonels
Lady and Judy OGrady are sisters under their skins, and on this
theory a good many products, particularly those appealing very
strictly to the truly feminine tastes of women, have stood a good
chance of striking a high average of return. But women are
becoming more and more highly individualized, and with this
greater individuality, must, necessarily, come a keener study of
women as targets for advertising or for the output of special trade-
marks or brands; a study to classify and group them and thus hit
the target of mass appeal more often. Right classification is the
answer, not lump averages.
The real way to find out about the typical woman for your own
particular advertising proposition, is to make a questionnaire
survey. That is the true way to determine a mode. You select the
women who are of the kind you deal or hope to deal with, and then
you have a statistically sound basis on which to construct your
picture of the typical woman for your purposes. By carefully
seeing
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either sat in the tire, or smoked the cigarette, or hugged the article
close to her not over-obviously clothed person.
Ask Dad, he knowsif he will tellof those days when the
chief reason for buying cigarettes was to get a small photo of
Lillian Russell or Cissy Loftus, or a bowery burlesque Queen to
stick around his mirror, and when all tobacco advertising vied with
its rivals solely on the basis of the vaudeville artists they included
in each package. But compare a striking tobacco advertisement of
todayYour nose knows, or Watch them registerthey
satisfywhich leaves the P.G. in mentionless oblivion.
There is a marked lessening of the use of the P.G. not only in
the smoking, suspender, and allied mens fields, but in all lines of
products either of distinctly women's or for household use. I might
perhaps venture to suggest that all women today are so universally
beautiful that men do not need to put a headless lady into a
shaving brush or buy a package of cigarettes to gaze on extraor-
dinary feminine charms!
There must be some reason why the P.G. has disappeared so
markedly. To-day competition is most keen, and the best business
brains are devoting themselves to advertising, so that we are
seeing the sense and power of reason why,of arguments based
on the scientific, fact, utility, economy, convenience, comfort,
style and educational appeal in the advertising of countless
products.
And now for my secondlyI believe it is men, and not women
who are appealed to by the P.G. as she is exploited in our current
advertisements. Do pretty women appeal to women? I admit that
women are admirers of female beauty, but the point men never see
is, that we are far sharper-eyed critics of our sex than men, and
know real beauty when we see it, and when it is not beauty at all.
There is no antagonism so pronounced as the
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Rice is not given its full possible variety on the menu, nor
bread, nor crackers, no cheese, nor flavoring extracts, spices,
cocoa, gelatin, cocoanut, salad oil, spaghetti, and a long list of
other foods. People get in a rut in the use of an article. They use it
for one purpose and never for anything else, because it does not
occur to them. Cranberries were once reserved only for two days
of the year, for some purely habit reason, until a use-broadening
campaign was begun.
The American woman is red-ripe for education along use-
broadening lines, because huge numbers of women have a longer
family purse today than before the war. They can do more things,
buy more things, and they are still fascinated with the novelty of
experiment. An advertising writer to women should get the sense
and the spirit of this.
Advertisers are not all aware, also, that cooking knowledge and
general household science has advanced in the last dozen years,
and that it is distinctly behind the times to neglect the increased
knowledge of the day. Competitors will surely break the new
ground first if it is not looked after.
Certain types and kinds of cookery are also neglected because
there is no educational advertising in operation. Deep-fat frying,
for instance, or casserole cookery, or home candy makingto
mention a few at random. Pie-making is becoming a factory and
restaurant proposition; whereas pie is the American mans first
love. Few advertisers are stressing home-made pie. Not long ago,
for a great California fruit-growing association, I developed some
new pie recipes which are to be featured in advertising; but this is
but one kind of pie. Nobody else is at work boosting home-made
pies. There ought to be a pie cook book, for every woman ought to
learn this broad path to a mans heart!
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Figures
Proper Nouns
Reiteration
Local Connection
Testimonials
for he knows many things like it. His emphasis stops short of over-
emphasis. His vocabulary will, as a rule, be rather large. There
will be a bookish touch in what he says and more than a few
allusions that would not occur to all. The best illustration of the
kind of believability that inheres in everything such people say
that I can think of was when Senator Proctor of Vermont came
back from Cuba and told this country what he had seen there. It
was just before our war with Spainjust before, for the simple
reason that his sober account resolved America to fight Spain.
Proctor was temperamentally the most un-sensational man
imaginable, a very grave and reverend senior. There were no
winged words in his story, no epigrams, nothing quotable, but
the ring of perfect truth was in every word.
The many reserves and hesitations in his telling would, I
suppose, be anathema to a professional writer of advertisements. I
dont say reserve and hesitation are good copy qualities; but I do
say that if any copy writer had Proctors intellect, education and
character, his copy would have reserve and hesitation at the right
places and no other.
The point I am arriving at is that, first, a high degree of
education will quite unerringly make believable even amateurish
advertising. Second, that a quite low degree will frequently do the
very same thing. That is one of the inconsistencies of faith.
Occasionally there strays into print the advertising of some man
who chooses to write his own copy but who has had scant
schooling. His very ignorance, oftener than not, makes his
advertising amazingly profitable. One case was an Italian
restaurateur who sent out a circular of his own composition, in
ludicrous English, that drew customers by scores to his shabby
place in a side street. Another
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Superlatives
that apply superlatives to the product discussed. This rule has cost
us many a dollar, for not every advertiser will amend his
manuscript. We ask him, Suppose, at the same time we print the
statement that your machine is the best, some other concern,
making a similar apparatus, advertises with us that theirs is the
best? Where does that leave us for consistencywe, who
guarantee every statement our advertisers make? The reply often
is, Yes, but mine is the best! It matters not that housewives,
comparing and pricing the two devices, buy the other as often as
hishis is still the best!
We have never met a manufacturer who said that he made the
second best article of its kind! We never expect to. But if such a
rare being should turn up and announce his article as second best,
the startling, the revolutionary frankness of the thing would sell
his goodsbecause it would establish his truthfulness on such a
firm base that in the next breath he might make almost any claim
and be believed!
If one advertises that an article is healing, delicious,
economical, light, durable, nickel-plated, antiseptic or anything
else definite, the mind can grasp the claim, weigh it and act on it.
But what does best really mean? Best for whom? For what? Isnt it
about as inept as the best best occasionally used by frenzied
advertisers?
You open a magazine at random, see the name of a soap more
or less unknown to fame, and are told it is the best soap made. Of
all the hundreds of soaps devised by mans skill in centuries, you
just happen to have learned of the supreme detergent of them all!
You feel as Madame Curie felt when she discovered radiumor,
if you are like most of us, you say Piffle! and turn the page.
The genius who wrote of his soap It floats knew the art of
inducing belief better.
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Guaranteeing
by all sorts of sellers who meant nothing tangible by it, and partly
by the fact that the word itself to many people, and especially to
women, means merely emphatic assurance and not legal
obligation.
I have seen a good many manufacturers, and some publishers,
vastly worried when it was first proposed that they embody
guarantee in their policies. I have seen them call in their lawyers to
scrutinize the wording of the guarantee lest it involve them in
unforeseen and huge responsibilities. They were business, men
and as such had found guarantee a dangerous thing to play with. I
have seen the same men afterwards both astonished and relieved,
and still later disappointed, to find out that the American consumer
puts no faith in and pays no attention one way or the other to
advertised guarantees.
Motives
Unbelievable Advertising
out of his sphere and does not realize it. Some parts of advertising,
such as the appropriation, the mechanism of circulation, the
successes of other advertisers and the personalities of the agency
heads who meet him as an equal, are quite in his line and give him
the fallacious conviction that advertising is only another phase of
that business life where he has been winner so far. His shrewdness
even shows him that much of the expert counsel offered him is
not expert. He leans less on professional advice in advertising than
he does in matters of law, architecture or health, where experts
self-evidently can guide him.
The net result of his contact with the tangle of pretense, self-
interest, error and waste called advertising is, on the whole, an
inferior, not very believable and, therefore, expensive kind of
advertising, from which only the fool-proof quality of advertising
itself can be relied on to yield the frequent profits it does.
There can be no complete remedy suggested, but it lies within
the power of any intelligent advertiser to learn what makes
advertising believable and then so guide his writers that greater
profit results.
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Industrial Copy
Hobby Riding
Originality Pays
Fat Phrases
his stubby pencil in hand, and chews the end off, does he try to
impress by his erudition? Not so that it can be observed! Yet
Mennens went on the map with a bang and stayed there.
I quote these examples of writing from the general field because
that is where we must go to find the best. As I remarked at the
beginning of this talk, its time to drop our insular attitude and
take a look at the world around us.
Any of these writers whose work we admire could take a highly
specialized industrial account and write copy of the same
distinctive character.
In our organization we recently established a service
department and to get away from that musty old word we call it
the Results Department. It was placed in charge of a man who,
knowing none of the traditions or precedents of the average
business paper, will probably break all the unwritten lawsand
thereby make a great success.
I believe that a higher premium should be placed on advertising
writing. I dont mean by that that any one should have his salary
boosted to-morrow. But make it an incentive to become a writer
and stay one. The trouble now is that you develop a first-class man
and then promote him to assistant manager or club salesman. As
a matter of fact such a move should not be a promotion at all. I
have never heard of an association of advertising writers, but there
should be one. And one of its principal jobs should be to advertise
the value and importance of copy.
Formidable?
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In time it will be found that one or two of these are the best selling
points. Then they will be used as the keynotes and the other points
woven in with them. A phonograph, for instance, may be
advertised because of its tonal quality. But in time this emphasis
will be found to be losing its force. Then the advertising will be
changed to bring out the beauty of the cabinet, showing that the
musical charm of the instrument is receiving a housing in keeping
with its superiority; and so on, point by point. There are few
articles which cannot offer at least ten good pointssubjects for
separate advertisements.
You must consider the people who are to buy the article you are
advertising. In writing advertisements of gloves, we may say, you
will use a different argument to persuade a woman to purchase a
fine dress glove than you would to induce a man to buy a working
glove.
In the one case you would appeal to woman's natural love of
beauty. You would show how the glove enhanced the natural
charm of her hand, how it gave her the finishing touch of being
well-groomed. You would mention the fact that the gloves are the
last to be put on, that they either make or mar the costume. Then
you would tell how carefully these gloves are made, how exactly
they are stitched, how they have been designed, perhaps, by some
eminent glove-artist in Paris, and so on. And you would never
forget to impress her with the fact that these gloves bear the seal of
the latest fashion.
But with the work glove you would go about your task in
another way. You would show how ruggedly it is made, how
stoutly it is stitched. You would tell how long wear and great
durability are made into it. You would tell how well it fits the
hand, and how it really helps to do better work because it supports
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of the hand when they are weary. Your imagination would have
you at work, out in the cold, wearing a pair of those gloves and
doing the best days work you ever accomplished because of that
fact.
You would make the woman feel that here was somebody who
was accustomed to moving in the best society and knew what was
the exactly correct mode in dress gloves; you would make the man
feel that here was somebody who knew what hard work was and
who knew through experience how to select a glove that would
lighten that hard work.
Some people, in writing advertisements, either accidentally or
purposely omit asking the reader to buy the article advertised.
Now, the end and aim of an advertisement is to sell, not just to get
the reader mildly interested, so that some time when he is down
town he will, if he happens to think of it, go into a store and ask to
be shown whatever it was that was advertised. Your advertisement
should convince the reader that he is going to be more than
satisfied with his purchase, and should put him in a purchasing
mood. Often a writer will think it really beneath his dignity to say
to his reader:
Please buy this. He feels as if this puts him behind a counter,
serving whoever comes down the aisle. Yet that is just what he is
doing, and if he believes in himself, and believes in the goods he is
advertising, and believes in the manufacturer of those goods, he is
performing a true service when he leads his reader to make the
purchase.
If you are writing an advertisement for a kitchen cabinet or a
refrigerator, you will not write it as you would one for a piano or
for a library table. Pianos and library tables have their elements of
beauty; they are to be seen as well as to be used. They are in the
higher sphere of life. But the refrigerator is not always
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a spotless thing of beauty, holding fresh fruits and meats and eggs
and other appetizing things. Nor is the kitchen cabinet always
standing, immaculate, against the wall, its door glistening and its
shelves arrayed with shining jars and glittering knives and things.
There are days when both refrigerator and cabinet must be
cleaned. A maker of refrigerators and a maker of kitchen cabinets
kept this in mind in their advertisements. They told how the
refrigerator would keep things fresh and sweet, and how the
cabinet would save thousands of steps and lighten the work in the
kitchen. But they also told, and told very emphatically, how easy it
was to scrub and wash and clean the refrigerator and the cabinet.
They told of smooth surfacesno square panels or corners to
catch and hold dust or dirt and grease. They put a Saturday night
clean-up atmosphere into their advertisements, and they
convinced the women who read them that they had at heart the
interests of the women who had to work at keeping house. And
their campaigns succeeded.
There is nothing that one man sells and another man buys that
does not have its angle of human appeal.
It must meet a human need, satisfy a human desire, or gratify a
human whim.
A musical comedy gratifies the very human wish for color and
sound; a drama appeals to human sentiment; a story, to human
understanding; and a sermon, to human conviction.
The successful advertisement approaches the reader along the
same lines.
As we have said, there is no business organization that does not
have in it and of it an individuality, whether of one man or a
composite of many men.
The greater this individuality the greater the success of the
business organization. Advertising is the expression of this
characteristic, of this human appeal.
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type, with the same surroundings, with the same illustrations and
with the same sentiment expressed, appearing in the National
Geographic and Vanity Fair at the same time, without any change.
In fact, I have seen copy going to the technical engineer, to the
merchandising dealer, and to the layman, who had no interest in
either of the other two, without a single change and from the same
place.
And then, think of the generalities which must occur when you
dont know your audience, because if you cannot speak the
language of the people, you are confined to those generalities
which, meaning so little, cannot be criticized. We have some
adjectives that have been so thoroughly worked out that we cannot
use them ourselves. They have been misplaced and misused to
such an extent that we cant even consider them.
I took about fifteen pieces of copy advertising one type of
product, cut off the illustration and the rest of the identifying
material, and then a couple of days afterwards tried to remember
which was which. It was almost impossible. The remarkable
unanimity of statement and the almost complete generalization of
claim made it practically impossible to find any individuality.
Let us grant for the moment that advertising is successful from
the mere reiteration of the nameas Matthew Arnold said,
beating it upon our weary brains like a hawkerand that from
mere familiarity and identification we can impress to a degree the
audience of indiscriminating laymen, yet at what an expense of
waste that must be, at what a tremendous inefficiency!
We are so inefficient in advertising that if we get 2 per cent
returns from a magazine in inquiries, when we go out directly for
inquiries, we are getting something to be really proud of, and if we
get one-quarter of 2 per cent in orders from the inquiries, we are
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elated, which means that we are getting just one-half of one per
cent of the possibility of our work.
But that is not the only way in which we fail to study our
audience. We fail to study the language of the specialized
audience that we must reach. I would not be a bit surprised but
what the failure to secure the proper results from specialized
publications lies largely with the failure of the advertising man to
get in and understand the audience that reads those publications. I
question very much whether you, any more than I did, find it
possible to study the audience of a particular medium through its
editorial columns, as you should. If you are receiving a hundred
and fifty magazines every month and of course you dont look
through them all at the officehow many of them do you
understand editoriallyI mean, not the editorials but the people
who read them? And if you dont understand those people who
read them, how are you going to write to them effectively?
Passing on from that element to the second one knowledge of
the subjectI think we have gone a long way from this question
in the last few years. In fact, I have heard it stated in some quarters
that a writer is better off if he doesnt know a subject. It is true that
there are some men, and they are reasonably scarce in this world,
who are provided with such a facility of language and such a
capacity for adaptation, that they are able to seize upon the
essential features of a possibility and present it to an audience with
a very superficial acquaintance with it. But the average man is
neither eloquent nor discerning unless he knows his subject, and I
dont believe that the average man is any more eloquent or
discerning in his written language than he is in his spoken
language. We are working, in the advertising business, with the
average man. We have thousands of
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they will understand. Unless we know it, how can we translate it?
The third point that I want to bring out is knowledge of the
language. I have counted fourteen different automobile
advertisements that were either superior, the most beautiful or
the smartest (or some other word of that kind) car in America.
Now, surely, there is something more about that wonderful
construction, the automobile of any particular make, than that
kind of a statement. Why, it embodies the brains of wonderful
engineers, it has taken thousands of men to make it and has all
kinds of separate and distinct parts in it that are themselves a
beauty because of their strict usefulness. Cant anything be said of
that but a mere word, that it is the smartest, a superlative that
means less than anything else, a qualification that does not qualify
and a statement that really doesnt claim?
And yet perhaps we are a little bit like the man whom Walter
Raleigh talks about, who, being introduced to a language of a
hundred thousand words that quiver through a million of
meanings, is tempted by the very wealth of inheritance to be
careless and is content if, out of those million highly tempered
swords, he can construct a few clumsy coulters. For language is
something which cannot be used by the careless. It is like putting
an inefficient workman in charge of the finest of instruments,
which must be handled by the most delicate of craftsmans hands,
for it has grown up through the centuries, expressing at every stage
some additional values of human emotion or human activity or
human operation that have accrued to it, that have invented new
combinations of letters to express themselves; it is in itself an
epitome of human progress from beginning to end. If we knew
how to use it, we should be able to write it. If we knew the
language we should then know
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I stood in New York the last day that Marshal Joffre was visible
there, and I managed to hear a few words he said, but my French is
not very good, and he spoke French rather rapidly, and it didnt
connect. It was undoubtedly very beautiful, very fine, but it made
no impression upon me, because I couldnt understand it. And why
should you talk to people in Louisiana in phrases which are not
known beyond the boundaries of the Eastern States? Why
shouldnt you get down, when you talk to Louisiana, to the
language that they know at home, the particular phraseology they
use there?
I remember that some of the most successful copy I ever made
for the State of Texas was written in Houston, Texas, in my office
there, and six weeks after I got back to New York I couldnt write
it. I had lost just the touch of the local atmosphere that was
necessary to make the difference between ordinary copy and
unusually efficient copy.
Finally, of all the things which man has to do, there is nothing
quite so great as that of impressing other people or expressing to
other people in writing. The whole of the accumulated knowledge
of the world is compassed in a few books, because it is written.
We have progressed in the mechanical arts, we have progressed in
those other arts that are not yet purely mechanical, because we
have been able to gather into our books the thoughts and the
operations of thousands upon thousands of brains, doing a little,
improving here and there and all over, and have brought that down
so that in a few years a new generation can accumulate all that is
necessary of what has gone before. There is nothing quite so great
as the possibility of expressing to your people in written language.
While this is but one of the operations of advertising, and while
it is not always the most important operation
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was in them. They were sold on the idea that there were 9,000,000
people who had already bought them and that volumes standing
end on end would climb Mt. Everest and that volumes side by side
would encircle the globe, or almost anything except the actual
contents of the books.
As a consequence this installment book business wore itself out
in a very few years. It was never sound. There were a great many
failures among these publishers and the book business was
quiescent for a number of years.
At that time it occurred to one of our leading publishers that if
books were sold at a fair price on installments and if they were
sold for their contents by means of advertising copy very carefully
prepared, rather than for their bindings, a solid business could be
built up. This idea was carried out successfully by the Review of
Reviews, Harper & Brothers, Scribners and a number of other
well-known publishers. And today after a number of years, an
honest business that is substantial has been built up, and the names
of some of our best American writers, such as O. Henry, Mark
Twain, Richard Harding Davis and some others, have been placed
higher than they ever had been.
It is important to notice that this sale is built almost exclusively
on the idea that all books are sent on approval; therefore you have
to have a satisfied customer and the only way to have a satisfied
customer is to tell in advance what he is actually going to find in
the books. There is no use telling him that O. Henry is the greatest
writer that ever lived if he does not care for O. Henrys kind of
book. If there had been any doubt in my mind about this it was
very sharply dispelled by an experience of my own a few years
ago.
One of our publishers had among their writers one of
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This sense of the here and now is one of the first things for the
copy writer to acquire.
Aimless blazing away in the advertising pages (and there is still
plenty of it) has no excuse today. There is no room in the
commercial world for slighted responsibility and opportunity
thrown away.
If any copy writer finds himself in doubt how to go about a
professional job of writing, he need only study the able,
professional copy being published. Any man who will, can find it.
There is no mystery about it. Its principles and methods are plain
to be seen.
The above is but one example of the constant changes that are
always taking place to affect the copy mans approach to his work.
This particular change happens to be a standard trade situation.
Other possible changes that he will have to look out for are
shifts in public opinionthe most subtle of all the situations the
copy writer is called on to meet.
Such shifts of the consuming mind may have to do with style
with price or moneys worthwith balancing this
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Elgin takes the time from the stars and puts it in your
pocket.
Out in Elgin, Illinois, there is a spick and span little
building standing all by itself on a little knoll.
This is the Elgin Time Observatoryfor the sole
purpose of recording the exact time from the passage of
the stars across the meridian.
The astronomer makes 110 star records in each nights
observationsand the time is correct within a few
thousandths of a second.
Now to put this precise time in your pocket.
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and the high pitched sharp vowels that cut a sentence off like
a knife.
And the consonant sounds. The soft bs and ds, and ms
and ns, and rs and ls. The hissing vigor of s (but one
has to look out for too many "s's in a rowthey may trip the
readers tongue even in silent reading). And the shock of the t
sound and the k sound at the end of a sentence.
Fortunately, the writer who schools himself to see amply, think
truly and feel deeply, will find himself picking the right word by
instinct.
This is a faculty that grows by use.
His words will be chosen not only for what they mean, but for
their associations.
His writing will deliver the full content of the thought and
emotion.
He finds himself with a new sense of intimate contact with the
inner life of the reader.
He becomes conscious of true power in expressing the ideals
and authority of his clients.
Instead of writing long academic words about the little details
of merchandise, he is expressing the great human things of
merchandise in short simple words.
That is, he is writing great copyat last.
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The Psychology of the Printed Word
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they must be attended to, read, and acted upon. Nobody puts up a
sign warning animals off the premises, and a campaign of
advertising amongst illiterate human beings would be a sad waste
of money. The printed word must have power to attract attention,
power to hold attention long enough to tell its story, power to
move the prospective customer, power to direct the customer.
These powers it must have mediately or immediately; or else the
advertiser's money is wasted.
Such powers rest upon the nature of man. He reacts to any
stimulation whatever. Impressions produce expressions is the
fundamental law of mans psychic nature. He can no more help
that than a nervous woman can help jumping when a window falls,
or the mouth of a tramp help watering when he smells frying
chicken, or a healthy baby help kicking and grabbing. Man must
act, inside or out; spasmodically and haphazardly as in reflexes;
purposively without knowing why, as in blind instincts, and
purposively with full knowledge of what he is trying to
accomplish, as in voluntary, rational or ideational actions. All of
these varieties of actionsreflex, instinctive and purposefulare
subject to arousal by advertisement. None of them should be left
out of consideration by the framer of productive appeals. How
each one operates we will see in the next few lines.
First, let us take the simplest form of human action, the reflex.
It is a simple, unconscious action aroused by some object or idea
or feeling. The winking of the eye is a good example. The ordinary
action is due to an impression of dryness and is performed
unconsciously. In the same manner is much of our seeing done. A
million objects affront the eye, and how many of them make any
impression on our minds? Nobody knows for certain. But it is
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toward making the goods advertised old and reliable has been
taken in the readers mind by making him, all unconscious to
himself, familiar with those goods.
But there is much more in even the reflex action of men. At the
very beginning, for example, of any salesmans work, mass- or
individual-salesman, writer or talker, the attention of the customer
must be attracted. That may be an entirely reflex matter. No baby
can resist following with his eyes a light moving in a dark room.
Hardly any grown person, off his guard, can help doing the same
thing. Any moving object caught out of the corner of the eye, jerks
the eye around for one full look at that thing. All moving signs
depend upon that inborn reflex to attract attention.
But further, if the message of the sign is to be consciously read,
the attention must linger a moment. Again laws of reflexes come
in to hold the observers eye or repel it. Movement will attract the
eye, but not hold it. The eye muscles weary too quickly.
Therefore, no reading matter ought to move. It ought to stand still,
and stand still long enough to be leisurely read. That additional
attention must be secured and can be secured in many ways.
The most usual way is to secure it by color. Here again certain
reflexes play their part. For, in looking at anything on earth, even
by the merest glance, always two results are obtained by the
beholder: First, he secures a sensationa color, shape, size,
something called a sensation; then, secondly, he also has aroused
in him a feeling either agreeable or disagreeable. If it is dis-
agreeable he removes his eye from the object as quickly as he can,
and goes in search of something agreeable. If it is agreeable he
lingers. This law holds for every look a man or woman ever gives
to anything. Sometimes the intensity of the feeling is so keen that
the looker
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excuse for thus exposing her, scantily clad, to the drafts in a public
conveyance. Georges eye idly roaming about stops with her;
exploits the picture; has some of his interest aroused, and quite
naturally, by the laws of association, drifts over to the reality of
the picture and rests finally upon the idea of going that night to see
a good show. That idea tickles him so much that he goes home,
gets dressed, takes his best girl to a show and lavishes upon the
evening five times as much money as the cost of the article
advertised.
What was that article? Oh, we will say a pair of suspenders.
Why the incongruity of the young lady? Obviously she needed no
suspenders for supporting her slight investiture. She was thrust in
to attract attention, and, unfortunately, did it. So the money spent
for that printed word was worse than wasted. It not only failed to
sell suspenders, but it did sell something else. It not only ruined a
suspender sale, but it used up the prospective customers money
on another enterprise. Such advertising is business suicide. Upon
this side of handling the instinctive appeals I have dwelt for some
time, for such appeals furnish such temptations to their use and so
often end in misuse. Let us now turn to more constructive uses of
them.
One of the best uses to which inborn instinct can be put is in
building up sales sentiment. A sentiment is a complex construction
built up in people out of their inherited feelings, impulses and
emotions by environment and education. The education is not
book-learning alone, but includes all those factors which bring
ideas into mind. A sentiment is then a large affair. Its base is
inborn instinct, and it rises like a pyramid in consciousness, to an
idea at the apex. It is all knit together by time and experience.
Therefore, it is one of the stable and durable structures in each
human being. It appears
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in the forms of love for any person, or love for country, or the
sentiment of religion. It is always directed toward an object, a
person, or an idea. In general, all sentiments can be divided into
those of love or of hate, taken in their broadest sense. Such a
classification reveals immediately how challengingly important
they are to the man who sells by the printed word.
For this reason a man will do as he thinks. That is, an idea
which dominates in a mans mind will have its way. It will initiate
and direct action. It is unlike a reflex which explodes in disordered
action, and unlike instinctive action, which goes toward a goal
without seeing it. Ideational action knows just where it is going. It
is rational, reasonable, justifiable, sensible. In short, all states of
mind lead directly to action. Some states of mind, says William
James in his Principles of Psychology, have it more than others.
Feelings of pleasure and pain have it, and perceptions and
imaginations of matters of fact have it. . . . It is the essence of all
consciousness. We all know pain has power to move a manthe
school-boy who sets a pin in a teachers chair takes advantage of
that law of nature;but it may have escaped the attention of men
that ideas, as well as other parts of consciousness, also have that
power vested in them.
The reason why that fact escapes attention is because of the
numerous and the various ideas which a man may have in his mind
at the same time, or close following one another. He thinks of
buying; then he thinks of the cost; and the two ideas work against
one another. He thinks of buying and thinks of the price, and his
stinginessa feelingmay hold back his hand from putting his
name on the dotted line. He thinks of buying for the sake of his
wife and children, whom he loves, and the love supports and
bulwarks the idea Buy!" But
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The artist
The writer
The engraver
The typographer
The thing advertised.
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he can spend for advertising during the coming year, whether the
bulk is to be spent in newspapers, or divided between newspapers,
the mail and other media. It means, further, that a dealer must
outline for himself, as nearly as he can, what his merchandising
plan will be for the coming year, so that he can build his
advertising policy around his selling schedule.
For example, a typical merchandising calendar used by one
large store for a year was planned in the following manner:
(e) Sales;
(f) Prices;
(g) Report of shopping.
2. Throughout the buyer displayed, as well as talked about
the merchandise, thus showing how best to handle it.
3. Older sales people in charge of each stock pointed out, in
order that questions might be directed, thus saving time.
4. Each girl supplied with pamphlet containing all the items
with prices on sale.
5. New girls directed to go about the department and
familiarize themselves with merchandise. Later in the day,
each girl assigned to definite stock. Girls had privilege of
selling throughout the department.
E. Result: Before customers entered the department, the sales
people had been
1. Introduced to members of the department;
2. Given help on:
(a) System;
(b) Merchandise.
Quota aimed at for the day, $2,000.
Amount actually sold, $3,340.
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Part of an idea
CONCEPTION
The whole idea
in other words IDEA
Direct idea
THE IDEA
Indirect idea or impression
Color
CONVEYANCE
Texture
in other words MESSAGE
Form
THE MESSAGE
Arrangement
Relevancy of Color
CONVICTION
Relevancy of Texture
in other words RESULT
Relevancy of Form
THE RESULT
Harmonious unity of the whole
IDEA
The forces found in the Ideas which can be conveyed to the eye
have definite characteristics. They can be Direct Ideas; they can be
Indirect through inference or general impression; they can be but a
part of a Composite Idea, or they may be the Complete Idea.
MESSAGE
There are four physical forces which are used in the advertising
message. Whether the advertising message is an advertisement, a
product, a package, a window display, a piece of printed matter,
etc., these four forces are at work.
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First, color
Color talks immediately. It speaks before the eye or mind has
had an opportunity to absorb any other detail of structure, form or
arrangement. Color is a sensation. We respond to its stimulation in
accordance with psychological laws. Every color causes a
reaction, and the reaction should be reckoned with in the
advertising expression.
Second, texture
Texture, like color, talks in terms of sensation. Its power can be
applied to aid in the presentation of a message. It is like the stage
setting for the actors lines. It is the harmonious environment from
which the message is delivered.
Todays reproduction processes and the advancement in the
paper industry along texture and color lines afford an opportunity
for a wide range of expression. Texture should harmonize.
Third, form
Every form used in an advertising message is a symbol. Every
symbol has a meaning, definite or remote in varying degrees. The
forms with which we work are pictures, ornamentation, type. Each
of these forms can do different kinds of work.
Pictures: Pictures should talk. They must be relevant. They can
convey a part of the message or an entire message. Frequently they
only establish a setting or an environment for an advertising
message when they might have done a more complete job.
Ornamentation: Ornament has a language, a meaning.
Ornament can embellish and create an atmosphere or environment.
It should be applied only when it is essential to the desired result.
To be in good form it must be historically correct and relevant to
the message.
Type: Type is a series of symbols evolved from the early
picture writing. The individual type letters are read in letter-group
form or word symbols. Long before (3000 years B. C., the
Egyptian wrote in sign-group
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1. PURPOSE
2. FACTS
3. TONE OR MANNER
4. APPROACH
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My suspicions are still strong that the farm itself paid best
during his absence, under the management of his wife and son. He
was a wonderful solicitor for subscribers, and he and I knew from
frequently consulting our maps of Muscatine City and Muscatine
County the name of every family that did not take the Journal;
and, what was more important, the reason for not doing so. From
Mr. Jellys reports, many ideas were put up to the editorial
department for both elaboration and soft-pedaling, and a most
accurate line kept on the value of our features.
One evening Mr. Jelly asked me to let him solicit advertising in
the city. This seemed so revolutionary that I was sure it was
impossible, but I thought the best way out of it would be for Mr.
Jelly to try it and quit himself when he found he was not adapted
for it, of which I was sure. So I told him to try it out by calling on
a very successful music house conducted by two brothers who
were highly educated Germans. I had never been able to write
anything about music that they liked, which would bring them any
business.
Mr. Jelly brought me next day an advertisement scribbled on a
piece of wrapping paper, which he said he had read to the Schmidt
Brothers and they had authorized him to print it. The headline I
recall distinctly. It was Why Do the Boys Leave the Farm?
The text developed the thought that if a farmer wanted to keep
his boys and girls at home he ought to make his home attractive,
and then asked the question, How can you do so better than by
having one of Schmidts pianos or organs in it? Then the text
suggested that if a farmer bought a piano or organ, the Schmidt
Family Orchestra would go out and install it, and the farmer could
invite his friends and have a pleasant evening.
There was nothing in the copy about the technique of
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music. I do not recall that even the names of the pianos or organs
were mentioned. The ten-strike, of course, was the Schmidt
Family Orchestra. It was Mr. Jellys idea to use this orchestra
directly in merchandising. Everybody knew there was such an
orchestra, as these brothers and their children were passionately
fond of music and frequently played together. No one had yet
suggested that this orchestra go out to a farm house. The Schmidts
adopted the suggestion so quickly that I should not be surprised to
have heard them say a few years later that they had originated it.
It is needless to say that this piece of copy pulled. It sold
pianos, it sold organs, it sold sheet music. Now just a word about
the writing of this copy. Mr. Jellys spelling and construction was
like Ring Lardners. His copy was always rewritten without in any
way changing the purpose of the appeal or eliminating any of his
colloquialisms. Merchandising the advertisingwhich is the
reflex effect on the advertiser himself and his employeeswas
initiated, as far as I am concerned, by this incident and others that
followed.
When I went to Chicago in 1921 I met for the first time the
advertising manager who wrote his own copy. I was particularly
fortunate in working with George L. Dyer, who was advertising
manager for Hart, Schaffner and Marx, in initiating the national
magazine advertising for this house.
Mr. Dyer started the printing of style books and selling them to
the dealers. He was the first to have an illustration of a man
wearing clothes with the natural wrinkles in them when the wearer
was in a comfortable position. He never wavered in his conviction
that the purpose of advertising was to get people to think the way
the advertiser wanted them to think and that the best work was
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and its development. Mr. Dyers name was not even mentioned.
Mr. Dyer was furious. He poured out his wrath to me. I argued
with him that Mr. Schafiner, in permitting the article to be
published, was paying the greatest possible compliment to Mr.
Dyer. It was sincere proof of the success of his work.
Mr. Schaffner was definitely committed to continue national
advertising. Mr. Dyers job was secure as long as he wanted it. I
told him that I was sure that in three months he would have an
offer from a competing house because competitors have a way of
sizing up each other at their real value. I was sure that men who
knew Mr. Schaffner had not originated the national advertising
idea would want to talk to the man who had, as soon as Mr.
Schaffner was willing to accept the credit.
My prediction came true. The Kirschbaums, of Philadelphia,
employed Mr. Dyer at a salary of $25,000 a year. Advertising
history should know the story of his experiences with them. When
they pressed him for copy as good as Hart, Schaffner and Marx, he
said he could not write it until they made their clothes as good as
Hart, Schaffner and Marx made theirs. Mr. Dyer, I firmly believe,
maintained that professional stand until his untimely death. He
would not write copy that he did not believe to be true.
My personal experiences with Ralph Tilton, John E. Kennedy,
J. K. Fraser, B. J. Mullaney, Witt K. Cochrane, Wilbur D. Nesbit,
J. M. Campbell, Elbert Hubbard, and Dr. Frank Crane, and my
observation of the work of other copy writers, convince me there
are three clearly defined types of writers. Elbert Hubbard and Dr.
Crane know how to write the language the masses like to read.
Arthur Brisbane and Herbert Kaufman both have this power
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ten advertisements for $2,500. At that time, Armour & Co. were
clients of the Mahin Advertising Company, and we bought a
Kennedy campaign for them. Mr. Kennedy started in by reading
all the literature he could lay his hands on relating to hams, bacon
and lard. He collected a list of facts that when stated by him were
indeed most interesting. He went down to the stockyards and,
starting with the live hog, followed all the processes until lard,
ham and bacon became merchantable products. He worked at his
home and when his campaign was ready I made an appointment
with Mr. T. J. Conners, the Armour General Superintendent. Mr.
Conners had E. B. Merritt and B. J. Mullaney at the meeting. Mr.
Kennedy read his ten advertisements. Mr. Mullaney interposed
some suggestions. Mr. Kennedy handed Mr. Mullaney several
affidavits signed by advertisers to the effect that he had largely
increased their returns with the terse command Youread
these. Mr. Mullaney read them, looked at me with a twinkle in
his eye and left Mr. Kennedy to Mr. Conners tender hands.
Mr. Conners had been P. D. Armours secretary in his youth.
He had a direct way of settling matters when he spoke, although
he was a good listener. Mr. Kennedys copy was based on the
assumption that Armour & Co. would drop what Mr. Kennedy
called the meaningless Star as a brand name and substitute his
coined word Epicured. Mr. Conners said, as P. D. Armour had
originated the use of the word Star, it would not and could not
be dropped, and no one would even discuss it with J. Ogden
Armour.
Mr. Kennedy and I left. Mr. Kennedy spent two hours telling
me that the packing business was one in which initiative,
imagination and talent were not permitted to develop. He
commented on Mr. Conners mental and physical characteristics in
anything but a complimentary manner.
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He characterized Mr. Merritt and Mr. Mullaney as Yes
men,apparently the lowest depth to which an advertising man
could sink.
He went home and came back in three days with ten of the
finest advertisements I ever read. Everyone was pleased with
them. He told the story of the wonderful epicure process of curing
hams and bacon and how the StarP. D. Armours insignia of
qualitywas placed on only the products of one out of every
fifteen hogs.
Another case where the obstacles placed by the obdurate
advertiser apparently assisted rather than retarded the expression
of genius!
Copy must compete for attention with many other appeals for
the readers free dollars. A man who takes a trip around the world
will probably not buy an automobile. A man may buy a radio and
get along with last years overcoat; children may go to a movie
instead of spending their money for candy. The width, depth,
height and extent of the problems are too vast to be even sketched
here.
Some copy must merely furnish leads for personal salesmen or
mail order follow-ups to complete the sale. Copy that tells the
whole story here handicaps rather than helps the salesmen. Some
copy must sell the dealer, some must sell the consumer, some must
sell confidence to the advertisers organization.
But, any way you consider it, copy is the inner key to success in
advertising.