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The Invisible War


Feature Film – Supernatural Spiritual Suspense Drama

Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis (Ghostwriter) & Jesse Battle
―The Invisible War is a supernatural spiritual drama that follows the life of a
struggling black artist reluctant to believe in God after being abused as a
child, who suspects he is being stalked by a threatening woman who
possesses a demonic spirit. Scenes often deliver on this high expectation
and highlight the risks to the protagonist who derives tension from these
obstacles effectively. Action relates well to the core concept, and the
characters have room to be exploring their emotions as well as convey
meaningful subtext. As Jesse is repeated stalked by Simone, who is hell
bent on converting him towards occult and Satan, Jesse soon finds himself
turning to religion in an effort to get her out of his life. Jesse is further
educated in ways of demons by Born Again Christian, Angela, who works
with Jesse at a hotel and who offers Jesse advise on how to deal with them
through Bible teachings about ‗Spiritual Warfare‘. Through a series of
compelling encounters with Simone and her ‗fellow‘ demons, Jesse soon
discovers his true ‗gift‘ of discern ‗demonic spirits‘ living inside human
beings — a gift he possessed as a child but has since forgotten. This ‗gift‘
also proves to provide another spiritual awakens when a message is
relayed to him from God that he has been chosen as the ‗Last Prophet‘ to
rid New York City of its demonic presence. As Jesse struggles to deal with
this revelation he turns towards Christianity itself to bind the evil sprits
around him. As the battle escalates between Simone, and her fellow
Satan/occult worshiping roommate, Caesar, Jesse is lured into a den of evil
in a tent located at the Brooklyn Trinidad Street Carnival where attendees
offer human sacrifices to Satan. Here Jesse confronts all the demons,
including the Satan himself, in a climactic scene, which proves to be both
realistic and breathtaking. This script deserves high marks. Great
writing!‖

RECOMMEND – Reader from Specscout.com

Sunnycrest Farm for Boys


One-Hour TV Series – Family Period Drama (1960s)

TV Series Development, First Episode & Treatment by Suzanne Gillis


(Ghostwriter) & Michael Jackson
―There is solid potential in for this TV Series premise, particularly in the
nostalgic feel and the transition 12 year-old Michael makes from a
dangerous urban area environment to the pleasant life on a rural farm. The
contrast between life in the North Philly projects, complete with broken
elevators and aggressive gang members recruiting young kids, to life in
Quaker/Amish Lancaster County – with swimming/fishing holes and
feeding livestock – is quite effective. The meeting between Big Momma and
Miss Stuckland effectively sets up the action and change of location that
follows. Once Michael arrives at the farm, the writer does a solid job
drawing him out of his shell and showing him form friendships with the
other orphaned, neglected and abused boys. The bonds are formed and
the storyline is engaging at all times. The strong characters who encounter
bullies, negro girls at a neighboring farm for girls who they engage with
through weekly dances, as well as the many other adventures highlighted
in the additional episodes, makes this TV Series stand out and highly
unique.‖

Reader NSP – ScreenplayCoverage.com

Sunnycrest Farm for Boys

One-Hour TV Series – Family Period Drama (1960s)


TV Series Development, First Episode & Treatment by Suzanne Gillis
(Ghostwriter) & Michael Jackson
―SFFB‘s main characters are charming. A young boy from the projects of
Northern ―Philadelphia is lucky to have a grandmother, Big Momma, so
determined to protect him from gangs that she talks her grandson‘s way
into a three-year program with the Quakers that teaches academics and
farming life far away from the inner city projects. The writer shows a strong
ability in good storyteller, as Michael‘s journey to Sunnycrest Farm is both
touching and engaging. You have set up a family that you can really root
for – which viewers will want to tune in to find out what happens to the
family and to Michael on a weekly basis. There is a Family Television feel
to your script as well as a unique and lively family that we can really care
about root for right away. Despite the danger lurking in the Projects, your
script has a very warm and hopeful feel to it, which a viewer can easily
share with his whole family. There is no visual violence from the gangs in
North Philly, but only sounds and threats made, which makes Michael‘s
stay at Sunnycrest seems like a bucolic, adventurous journey full of boyish
scuffles and challenges free from violence. Since this is also
autobiographical, we eagerly anticipating Michaels ‗weekly‘ adventures.
The strength of a family is a good theme — especially the strength of the
women – Big Momma, Van, and Miss Stuckland. Michael having doubts
about leaving his family to take advantage of Sunnycrest is every child‘s
experience on leaving home for the first time. The importance of having
good friends around him is also a theme for Michael – as well as sharing
his family with his newfound ‗orphaned buddies‘ who never grew up with
families of their own or the experience ‗loving relatives.‘ The overall tone of
your TV Series is youthful and one of discovery. This could be a great TV
show for the entire family.‖
Reader SLT – ScreenplayCoverage.com

Sunnycrest Farm for Boys

One-Hour TV Series – Family Period Drama (1960s)

TV Series Development, First Episode & Treatment by Suzanne Gillis


(Ghostwriter) & Michael Jackson
―The drama centers on the journey of a young boy, who struggles with the
joys and the heartbreak of growing up in the 1960s in the North
Philadelphia Projects and at Sunnycrest Farm for boys. The time-period
and culture feel authentic and the tone is consistently dramatic. The pilot
offers a cast of likable and charming characters driven by the emotional
goals and struggles. The opening is strong and easily pulls the audience
into the pilot as well as nicely sets the tone as well as firmly establishes the
culture and time-period. The image of opening with JFK speaking in the
North Philly projects to a mostly Negro crowd is smart. The main
characters opening voice-over is also sharp as it introduces the audience
to Michael‘s ordinary world. The idea of Michael attending Sunnycrest
Farm is the pivotal event that changes Michael‘s life forever. The rest of
the pilot is driven by Michael‘s struggle to adjust to his new world full of
farm life, Quaker values, the surrounding Amish community and the orphan
boys, some of who becomes his most ‗trusted‘ friends against the many
orphaned and abused bullies.‖

Reader TZ – Screenplayreaders.com

Bon Appetite'
Half-Hour TV Series – Live Action-Animation for Pre-Teens

TV Series Development, First Episode & Treatment by Suzanne Gillis


(Ghostwriter) & Lennox Blackwood
―Thank you, Suzanne, for all your talent in helping me develop this pre-teen
animated and live action TV series kids show. Your contribution to the
characters and story was extremely appreciated as well as your attention to
many fine details. You somehow took my strange animated ‗cooking
utensil‘ characters and brought them to life — giving them each very
distinct voices with personalities, which exceeded my expectations. They
are now equal to many famous animation TV shows and movies of our
times and completely unforgettable. I also enjoyed the process of working
with you, which helped me to better understand the entire TV SHOW
development process. It allowed me to walk away with the TV script that I
truly love as well as an incredible first episode. I am grateful to you for all
your hard work and additional help after the project was finished. Your
suggestions on how to prepare material for marketing were extremely
helpful. Can‘t wait to use you again on more future projects!‖

Lennox Blackwood, Client, Creator and Writer – London, UK

The General's Wife


Feature Film – Period WWII Suspense Thriller Drama (1940s)

Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Charles Gibbs


―This WWII drama has a compelling premise — a high-ranking Nazi General
is married to an American wife who is secretly working with the Allies, and
their teenage son who is torn between his parents. The concept provides
lots of narrative tension and forces you to care deeply about Kurt‘s
untenable position trapped between his feelings for both parents whom he
deeply loves. I also enjoyed the similarity to Alfred Hitchcock‘s
NOTORIOUS, in which Nazi Claude Rains discovers he is married to an
American spy played by Ingrid Bergman and the tension of how it played
out once she entered his house. The dialogue has a formal quality to it,
which is appropriate to Europe in WWII. ―I have no intentions of
abandoning my wife now, or in the future. Nor do I feel my son would
approve of such an arrangement.‖ None of the dialogue jarred me out of
the time and place of the story, and in my experience is a rare achievement.
The complicated climax was well choreographed; with the writer deftly
keep track of the movements of over a dozen characters. Well done!‖

Reader 8204 – The Blue Cat Screenplay Contest

The General's Wife

Feature Film – Period WWII Suspense Thriller Drama (1940s)

Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Charles Gibb


―Gripping and intense in a number of respects, this script begins with an
innately high-stakes scenario and builds upon it a storyline that remains
energetic and fairly harrowing throughout its duration. The opening
immediately establishes the tone and historical backdrop of the story,
following Nancy as she is exiled and Kurt begins growing up without her.
As she attempts to reach out to him, first pulling Kurt into a more
rebellious mindset, the story advances toward its second act, following
both of them to a surprising turning point as Albert essentially decides to
join their cause. At every turn, it feels as if Kurt, Nancy, and even Albert
are risking their lives in the name of completing increasingly valiant deeds,
and this sense of imminent repercussions creates a natural investment in
their actions. Some solid character beats, funneling toward a conclusion
that seems fast-paced and action-packed; this script deserves credit for
rendering a narrative with some intrinsic, gripping appeal, and a broader
presentation that comes across as entertaining throughout its duration.‖
Scriptshark.com – Reader EK – CONSIDER

The General's Wife

Feature Film – Period WWII Suspense Thriller Drama (1940s)

Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Charles Gibb


―THE GENERAL‘S WIFE has an intriguing, evocative premise that
remarkably hasn‘t been done before to this reader‘s knowledge, despite the
plethora of films about World War II. It‘s got a universally understandable
dilemma for all three lead characters – Albert, a Nazi, his wife Nancy who
works for the Allied forces in secret, and Kurt their son, who is stuck in
between his two parents and pulled in both directions. The script
structures itself around this setup smartly, with Albert‘s turn not coming
until midway through the story, at which point the family is united in
purpose against the Nazis, culminating in a climactic wedding sequence
that is rich with tension.‖

Specscout.com Reader

The General's Wife


Feature Film – Period WWII Suspense Thriller Drama (1940s)

Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Charles Gibb


―Utilizing a fascinating concept within a proven genre, THE GENERAL‘S
WIFE unfolds a sweeping insight into a family torn apart and ultimately
finding redemption within humanity‘s most brutal setting. Within this rich
tableau, the screenplay conjures fascinating character dynamics, reveals
unique perspectives, and weaves these elements into an engrossing,
entertaining, and fiercely cinematic screenplay. It is abundantly clear that
THE GENERAL‘S WIFE is a great screenplay with a solid structure and the
writers‘ outstanding prowess is evident throughout.‖

Scriptshark.com – Reader GM
The King's Rook

Feature Film – Sci-Fi Action Thriller

Story Development & Rewrite by Suzanne Gillis


―Thank you so much for all your hard work in this difficult rewrite. You
addressed all our main concerns as well as fixed all the character issues
which were holding back the story and did it all in record time to meet our
shooting deadline. Your suggestions and insight were dead on and exactly
what we needed and helped to make this a much stronger script from start
to finish. We will certainly be looking forward to working with you again on
other future projects.‖
STELLAR FILMS – PRODUCERS Liv Zheng & Zane Thomas

The Naughty Boy


Feature Film – Holiday Family Fantasy Adventure

Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Kyle Watson


―This has great potential as a movie about a boy who decides to reclaim
the true spirit of Christmas and remind people what the holidays are all
about – family. It‘s a great theme and sadly often overlooked during the
holidays. These days, Christmas seems to have become all about the
presents. I like that the writers are able to take the story to the extreme
point of James stealing presents in an attempt to make parents and kids
realize that they need to communicate better. The parents realize that
they‘ve been interfering with Santa by buying presents for their
kids. That‘s all great and really hits the theme.‖

Scriptshark.com – Reader EK

The Naughty Boy

Feature Film – Holiday Family Fantasy Adventure

Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Kyle Watson


―Suzanne, I wanted to say that I believe in you. You are an extremely
talented writer and are always in tune with every aspect of this screenplay
project, even aspects that often elude me. This script is already incredible
and I believe that a lot of that is purely you. You probably already know
that, but I felt compelled to say it now so maybe there is a reason for it. I
look forward to seeing the final draft and getting this project into the movie
theaters very soon.‖

Client, Co-Writer & Co-Developer – Kyle Watson

The Naughty Boy

Feature Film – Holiday Family Fantasy Adventure


Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Kyle Watson
―A fun holiday family film with enough whimsy and wit to appeal to both
children and adults, THE NAUGHTY BOY creates a vivid fantasy world but
populates it with believable, complex characters. James is a wonderful
protagonist, and his growth from insensitive lout into a caring person is
affecting because he is such a nuanced character, with complicated
emotions just like a child in his situation would be. The other characters
are likewise immediate and emotionally real, so the dramatic stakes of the
story always feel important. THE NAUGHTY BOY has a number of great
ideas percolating through it, and is packed with wonderful characters.‖
John Papapvolos, Gallagher Literary Agency – RECOMMEND

My Grey Alien

Feature Film – Musical Sci-Fi Romance


Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis (Ghostwriter) &
Jeffrey West
―First of all, I want to say how much FUN I‘m having with this project. It
has been an extraordinary experience for me and it‘s just the beginning. I
feel CONNECTED and ENGAGED in the creative process again and I‘m
LOVIN‘ it! I have no idea how you did it, but you took my crazy idea about a
Musical love story with an AWOL Alien who sings lead in a Country
Western band and falls in love with a female SINGER — beyond what I had
ever imagined. The characters are incredible now! Thank you! You really
ramped it up this fantastical story and made sense of all the crazy elements
— including developing an incredible cast of characters — and turned it
ALL into an enormously workable and entertaining movie! And as for the
MUSIC, you even encouraged me to WRITE TWO NEW songs, which pulled
it all together even more, in terms of the emotional elements, needed to
round out this incredible CAST of unique characters. Outstanding JOB!‖
Jeffrey West – Client, Co-Writer/Creator & Songwriter – Santa Cruz, CA

Dog Gone Dubie

Feature Film – Comedy Romance Adventure

Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Craig Frankel


―Bright, funny, and playfully optimistic in tone, this script begins with a
unique concept and builds upon it a touching romantic comedy scenario.
Excellent characters, a subtle and elegant overall delivery, and a strong
sense of cinematic storytelling further bolster a finished product that feels
as if it possesses an innate and natural sense of commercial appeal. In its
quirky, offbeat sensibilities, and its distinctive style and written voice, it
proves thoroughly entertaining from start to finish.‖
CONSIDER – Scriptshark.com – Reader EK
HONORABLE MENTION – The Happy Writer’s Screenplay Contest

Dog Gone Dubie

Feature Film – Comedy Romance Adventure


Story Development & Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis & Craig Frankel
―With her knowledge of screenplays, Suzanne was able to take my story
and create a screenplay that has structure, style, and flow. She created the
dialogue that helped the characters have an endearing nuance to them. She
was able to build character arcs that allow the story to be told in such an
engaging way that the personalities of the characters literally jump off the
page at you. I highly recommend Suzanne! ―
Craig Frankel – Client, Co-Write & Co-Developer

Cupid's Day Off

Feature Film – Holiday Fantasy Adventure Romance

Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis


―Suzanne, this was a really cover-to-cover fun read and a story that I
believe will find a home. It reminds me a great deal of an old Jack Benny
movie, ‗THE HORN BLOWS AT MIDNIGHT‘. It is about Ethanial, an angel,
sent to blow Gabriel‘s horn at midnight, thus ending the world. Naturally,
he fails and it is a hilarious look at the fish-out-of-water among humans in
New York City. It also reminded me a bit of MICHAEL, but the more
innocent side.‖
Joseph Pillitteri – Professional Screenwriter

Mr. Anonymous

Feature Film – Romance Comedy

Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis


―Big Plusses! This is a romantic comedy that has a very clear, original,
highly clever premise. You know how to create believable characters and
walk them through very funny situations. The script has a definite appeal
over and above the average romantic comedy because of the mortician and
sperm donor angle. This is a topic not many dare to tackle. Great job!‖
CANE 49 – Screenwriter & Mentor

Mr. Anonymous

Feature Film – Romance Comedy


Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis
―Every once in a while a script comes along that is fresh, original, and just
a lot of fun to read! This was that script. I loved the characters and the
funny aspect of the story had just enough seriousness to not be too
cheesy. It‘s obvious that the writer is experienced as this was a breeze to
read. Well done!‖
Joseph Pillitteri – Professional Screenwriter

The Mother Load

Feature Film – Family Romance Comedy


Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis
―First off, I really enjoyed ‗The Mother Load.‘ It was indeed one of the most
entertaining scripts I‘ve read in a long while. The prize of the script is the
characterizations. Especially the quirkiest characters like Marion, the
mother, who manages to keep the story flowing rather nicely along. The
characterizations are almost good enough to sell the story on their own.‖
Alfredo Fortuna – Professional Screenwriter

Undatable You
Feature Film – Romance Comedy
Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis
―Wow, Suzanne, this is a terrific screenplay and the best I‘ve read on this
Web site. I can understand why producers are interested in reading it. You
take a run-of-the-mill romantic comedy and deviate from its standard
procedure producing an entertaining and lovable script. You really
describe your characters accurately and paint an excellent picture of them
in the reader‘s mind. Great premise, great chemistry, and a great plot.
Congratulations!‖
Justin Kremer – Screenwriter
In-Between
Feature Film – Fantasy Black Comedy Drama
Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis
―Great Originality. I love this kind of story that takes us out of the everyday
world into the strange unknown. There are other scripts about the afterlife,
but this one has a ‗spark‘ because Sam isn‘t your average Arch Angel. He‘s
mean, grumpy, self-absorbed and hates dead kids. His inaction practically
jumps off the page when he does nothing but get pissed off at his fate in
the ‗in-between‘ afterlife, while being forced to do good for the newly dead
whom will all have far a better death than he ever will. Bryan is his final
chance at redemption, but Sam doesn‘t know this. Once Bryan figures out
Sam‘s dark past, the premise of ‗what happens to a guy who never had a
chance to do any good in life – suddenly turns into a great story to watch.
Seeing the living and dead interact in the tiny rural town of Hadleyville, NY
helps makes Sam and Bryan‘s journey all that much more fun and
terrifying, and gives great scope and depth to their final mission.‖
Joseph Pillitteri – Professional Screenwriter & Mentor

The Gamekeeper

Feature Film – Fantasy Family Action Adventure


Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis
―The driving concept is a young boy in the 1980s that is trapped in a board
game that teaches him how to become a man while also learning the harsh
lessons of reality that his father is trying to teach him. The premise is
easily delivered and is accompanied by a compelling structure that is
consistent from start to finish. There is also a strong theme that stems
from a premise about the power of imagination and staying true to one‘s
inner self. A slew of added characters in the fantasy world mirror similar
characters in the boy‘s world, which adds extra flavor to the story, which
delivers on its many expectations. The film contains elements of other
such commercial hits as BACK TO THE FUTURE, JUMANJI, A KID IN KING
ARTHUR‘S COURT, HARRY POTTER and THE WIZARD OF OZ. The tone is
effective within its genre and creates a world that is both mystical and
fresh.―
RECOMMEND – Scriptshark.com – Reader BN

The Gamekeeper

Feature Film – Fantasy Family Action Adventure


Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis
―The combination of characters and setting help create a most original
premise which is set in the 1980‘s in Northern California. A teenage boy
spends his day‘s obsession with the famous board game Dungeons and
Dragons, which forces his father to make a decision to take the game
away. Distraught, the boy soon purchases another even more elaborate
game from a local junk dealer unaware of its dangerous powers. Soon the
boy‘s three-year-old brother is sucked into the game where an evil sorcerer
uses children‘s fingers to gain his evil powers which force the boy and his
two friends to try and rescue him — all while his parents are busy attending
a neighbors Halloween party nearby and are unaware of what is going on at
their home. The characters and dialogue are greatly distinguished from
each other and do not fall prey to the typical high school stereotypes.
Conflict is presented right from the beginning and accompanies a strong
and compelling structure. The writing is presented in a professional
manner from start to finish and possess a highly original and vibrant tone.‖
RECOMMEND – Specscout.com – Reader TH

Under My Skin

Feature Film – Romance Comedy

Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis


―I liked this. You have a knack for picking out risqué topics and giving what
you write that extra punch to it. Originality! The script wins big prizes for
this. Tyrone‘s character makes the script very original.‖
Joseph Pillitteri – Professional Screenwriter

Under My Skin
Feature Film – Romance Comedy
Original Screenplay by Suzanne Gillis
―I‘ve read comedies on this site, but this one absolutely cracked me up.
This is a movie that has to get made! Anything less would be a sin. All the
characters were well developed, each one with their own distinct voice–
some with much higher ones than others. This was an entirely new spin on
the Romantic Comedy! Great idea.―
RECOMMEND – Reader Scriptshark.com
TOP TEN – Triggerstreed.com (2 years in a row)

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