You’re honestly selling yourself short, because this design is FANTASTIC. The initial direction the eye moves is only half the story- you also have to think about where the eye starts, and whether it moves to an endpoint or cycles back. Your design starts the eye at the face, which is good, then smoothly moves down and back up, because the leg warmers create this nice teardrop shape. The lines of the wings and neckline converge nicely on the face, and the pink earrings and eyeshadow create eye-catching contrast near the face
But the canon design converges every single line at the exact same point: her waist. The eye is drawn up initially because it starts at her feet, but in this case that's a bad thing, because the focal point of the design isn't her face! The only contrasting colors are the lavender and yellow in her wings, which ALSO lead the eye to the waist, so there's no 'exit' to let the eye keep moving, you just kind of stop in the middle there
As for the color, a rule that I find very helpful is that your eye should be drawn to either the face or the full silhouette first. If your eye is drawn to the clothing first that means the color is jumping away from the skin instead of being in harmony, and that's definitely the effect I get from the canon design. It's a lovely color, but I think the darker tones in the middle really overpower her skin. Your design has the kind of perfect color balance that makes me seethe with jealousy tbqh
I think what you're noticing as your design pulling the eye 'down' is actually the converging lines around the knees! All you have to do to fix that is make them parallel- either by removing the horizontal strap, or removing the angled portion