Wang wp3 Revised
Wang wp3 Revised
Wang wp3 Revised
Writing 2
05/26/2019
Preparation:
1. Soccer balls
5. Gates (2 or more)
Most of us MFor most of us, we are not as talented as those professional soccer players.
Yet, an old Chinese saying points that: “Diligence is the means by which one makes up for
one's dullness.” Although we may not have enough potential with those professional players,
we can still reach the same achievements as they did through our harsh exercise. we might
lose a little bit at the beginning, we can make much more scientific efforts to fulfill the lack
of intelligence. At first, we can make a specific schedule which includes all the practices we Commented [MOU1]: I am not sure what you mean.
I think that you mean that while it is hard to
train in the beginning, it will become easier
need to do every day. For example, on Monday we can improve our shooting skills, and then with more practice. Am I correct?
on the next day, you we can try towill practice more about passing. After the schedule is
completed completing, we must execute those instructions every day.;. Wwe cannot relax any
single daysat all without having trainingand should train every day. We should not rest for
any unacceptable reasons, and keep training every day. If we have one day off, we will fall
into this sense of relaxation, and we will never follow the instructions dedicatedly as we did
before having rested. One of the greatest Chinese writers, Xun Lu, pointed out that “Talent Commented [MOU2]: I learn a lot from your
essays. This is a beautiful message.
determines the upper limit, but your efforts determine the lower limit.” When we put enough
efforts into work on something, even though we do not have extraordinary talents, we can
still complete the high-level achievements achieve a lot in playing soccer than like those genii
who do not pay many efforts on training. Even though we do not as talented as those genii Commented [MOU3]: I know what you mean but I
would cut this phrase. It does not add a lot to
who are excellent at playing soccer since their younghood, we could still pay enough efforts your narrative.
and robust body not only for the legs but for all of the parts on your body. When playing soccer,
we need to have high explosive power, offered by your leg muscles. We need great agility and
balance provided by your waist and abdomen. We also have to control greatbe strengthstrong,
and all of the and to be able to engage all muscles do this on yourin your body. As a result,
exercise should be donewe should exercise every day. In addition, maintaining a healthy diet
is another significantsignificant point for us. When playing a match, most of us would consume
1500 to 3000 calories, so we need proper meals every day to help us containing maintainour
body health. It is better for us to have more colorful fruits and vegetables, or some meat, like
chicken or beef, but with as less fried food as we can. Moreover, the water supply must be
sufficient. Soccer playing will consume lots of water inside our bodies; to keep healthy, we
Sometimes we do not understand the key points provided by our coaches coaches provides
essential suggestions, but we could not entirely understand all of those points., and a At this
time, we need to find some professional players’ videos. We can carefully observe their
performance on the field and analyze why they act like that. Then find out their advantages
that we can gain experiences and improve ourselves. In addition, when playing soccer, we
need to use our brain to analyze the possible next-step action. For example, when your
teammate gets the ball, you can predict that he will pass toward to where and begin to
accelerate to the space in that direction, which could help your teammate to create more
passing choices.
As we all know, soccer is a team-playing game. Even though you have the greatest player
in the world, you can not win all of the championships if other members are not qualified
enough If you are the greatest soccer player in the world, but your teammates are not able to
rival with other high-level players, you cannot win all of the championships by your own
efforts. Thus, playing more with teammates is essential; when matching on the ground, a kind
of trustiness and tastiness will automatically form. It will help your team to become the most
Becoming an athlete is a dream for every young boy. When looking at those glorious
players standing on the podium, wearing the flags of their countries, most of us must imagine
ourselves standing there. I was one of those boys dreaming about this. I sometimes imagined
that I could become the best soccer player in the world and help my country to win the World
Cup championship. Who does not want to become the a hero of for his country? However,
because of the lack of talent, patience, and because of the risks involved in becoming a
professional soccer player, I gave up my dream when I was at primary school. However,
Tthis abandonment decision becomes is one of the most regretted things that I regret most
later in my life. As a result, I have always dreamt of guiding the teenagers to make their
dreams come true. As early asIf they read my guide, they will have more chances to become
ThusTo begin my translation, I found some papers or essays written by expertise experts
in soccer training. However, the articles are provided to those specialists; they are usually
long and less efficient to read, so it is hard for teenagers to understand and spend time on that,
especially for those who are not good at explicit training pieces of knowledge. Therefore, I
translated their papers to a kind of guide, which is like the summary ofsummarizes processes
of cooking but changing the methods of cooking intosteps that you need to follow to develop
skills of trainingyour soccer playing., and the guide might be a much more acceptable writing
genre to those teens. In this guide, I summarize the context in of those papers and list them as
four steps; each of them contains one of the most critical experience to become a better
soccer player. That makes the boring and tedious training methods tidier, and I believe
teenagers would prefer to look at a special guide more than reading essays. Besides, this
for my audiences because they could not directly detect the primary sources I cited. .
However, Therefore, they may lose their chances to they could not become a better soccer
player if they only get the information I listed on my brief guide. To solve this problem, I
created a website where I can put the links to the related sources and examples next to each Commented [MOU4]: Wonderful! This was such a
great idea!
part of my guide. If they want to develop more in this aspect, they he only needs to click on
the buttons, and the primary sources will be shown to him. Besides, the website guide can be
more obvious is more clear for my audience to read and understand compared with the paper
guide, because different colors separate the parts of the guide, and this kind of color
When doing this translation, I made a summary that excluded most of the proper nouns,
and tried to use the most concise easily understandable way to paraphrase those. For
example, in the article “My Exercise Training Program Essay,” the author clearly introduces
how to make each part of your muscles to be stronger. introduces the methods for training
each part’ muscles explicitly. (123HelpMe) Thus, the article contains lots of unusual names
of the body muscles; therefore, most of the teenagers would not be, which is not familiar to
with those teenagers, and keep this sense of unfamiliar would bring them away from reading
the entire whole paper. As a result, I only pointed out the training methods for the most basic
muscles for playing soccer, and I put a link in the guide. If the audience has interests in
developing their muscles, they can click on the button and directly go to the original essay to
explore more about muscle training. Even though this exclusion reduces some depths of the
knowledge in the genre translation, the readability of the new guide increases. has been raised
a lot. This change will not make my readers feel troublesome; instead, it would attract views
viewers because it looks much more concise compared with the original essays. I believe this
reduction will be beneficial to my guide and make it more popular among teenagers.
Not only making the reduction, but I also added my opinion to the experience mentioned
by those specialists. Although I am not some professional soccer player, I could give the
teenagers my personal experience with training as a typical soccer lover. For instance, about
the example to practice dribbling, I used my method which is not mentioned by “The Basic
Soccer Fundamentals Essay,” because I believe that the professional training methods are too
abstruse to use in the teenager’s daily training.the methods introduced by the papers are
difficult enough to understand for my audiences. If teenagers cannot understand the processes
it states, they will not continue their reading, and the paper will lose its their usefulness.
However, my example is more closed to those teenagers, and they can even complete achieve
my training methods exercise when they are playing alone. It might be more suitable for the
entry level soccer players to practice rather than the methods mentioned in the essay.
Making During this translation, I have encountered lots of troubles. The first one would be
the topic choice. This Writing Project 3 is a hard project because the sources are always case-
hardened. Therefore, if we want to translate them into another entirely different genre but
keep the same contents, we need to find flexible sources that could fit into lots of types of
writing. As a result, due to my interests in intimacy with soccer playing and my soccer young
dream I introduced previously, I chose to translate soccer training essays into a new genre.
Then, the next huge problem was the new genre choice for this topic. I got heard my Commented [MOU5]: New paragraph
suggestions from my friends, and one of them offered a guide for to me. It is a unique writing
style, and it is also the first time I contact with it, so it triggered my endless curiosity. To
further understand this genre, I searched for lots of standard guides online and found out that
this writing style type of writing has lots of special features. For example, all of the guides
have short titles, expressing the main contents most crucial subjects that will be introduced in
the content of the guides inside the titles. Besides, the word choice in those guides are
extremely concise; the authors do not add many more adjectives to dress too much on their
subjects. And most of those have a subtitle for each main part to make their audiences
understand more clearly about the thesis of this part. This kind of information introduction
achieved my ideal writing style perfectly. And due to the article “Reading Games”,
introduction is the most important part of an essay, because it is the first thing we look at
during reading.(Karen, 216). This is in agreement agrees with my goals to the genre Commented [MOU6]: Citation?
translation. Thus, I decided to translate the formal essays and papers to this easily
understandable writing style. Furthermore, according to McCloud’s comic, when doing genre
translation, we have to make the “choice of frame”; that means, we need to change our point
of views during the genre translation. (McCloud, 4) In my brief guide, I turned the second-
person description in the papers into the first-person point of view, which could bring more
After completing this genre translation, I find that this is the harshest writing project in
this writing 2 course I have ever seen. To finish this project, we need to master both of the
essences critical points of those two writing genres, and we also need to have to add our
thoughts into the translated type to make it different from the original sources. It is a hard job
because if adding something new, we would have to break up the original structure created by
the professional writers. Thus, the skills of transitions we learned and discussed in the class
become essential. Besides, there are some constraints for my new, translated genre, which
restrict my word choice. For example, because of the unique style for my writing project is
the guide, I could not put too much context inside, or it would become another piece of the
essay. Thus, I decided to make a summary of the contents of the primary sources and
separated them into four main parts, which looks more likely to a guide to teenagers and
could attract more potential readers. In addition, I made have to make an exclusive checklist
become a better soccer player. This could clearly remind my audiences recognize the
requisites.
To sum up, in this genre translation, I found some essays and papers about the methods to
improve our abilities to play soccer and translated them into two kinds of guides: a paper
guide and a website guide. I hope I could complete a perfect guide, which contains more
sources about the methods to become a better soccer player, in the future, and all I hope more
teenagers will get benefits from my guide and continue their soccer dream.
Work Cited
“Essay on Effective Ways to Kick a Soccer Ball.” Essay on Effective Ways to Kick a Soccer
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www.livestrong.com/article/340331-what-are-the-fundamental-skills-in-soccer/.
“My Exercise Training Program Essay.” My Exercise Training Program Essay -- Muscles,
Scott McCloud, “Writing with Pictures,” Writing Spaces: Reading on Writing. (2006)
Karen Rosenberg, “Reading Games: Strategies for Reading Scholarly Sources,” Writing
Spaces: Reading on Writing. (2011)